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Sonnet on Theme of Betrayal33 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, when my daughter and her family lived in New York for 4+ years, we visited them every year for those four fabulous years, we frequently saw that colossus in The bay with all the iconic offerings there, it seems like they don't really want those "huddled masses" anymore, they seemed to have forgotten those ideals. Sad though it be, the two presidential candidates aren't going to lead them into that place again, beautifully written Steve, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Oh yes, when my daughter and her family lived in New York for 4+ years, we visited them every year for those four fabulous years, we frequently saw that colossus in The bay with all the iconic offerings there, it seems like they don't really want those "huddled masses" anymore, they seemed to have forgotten those ideals. Sad though it be, the two presidential candidates aren't going to lead them into that place again, beautifully written Steve, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Roy, although I believe you underestimate Kamala Harris. She doesn't only understand and support immigrants, coming from an immigrant family herself, but is on a mission to return some sense of normality to the country.
Steve
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Comment from Neonewman
This is a beautifully crafted Sonnet you've entered for this particular writing prompt. You've followed all the guidelines. best of luck in the voting polls.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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This is a beautifully crafted Sonnet you've entered for this particular writing prompt. You've followed all the guidelines. best of luck in the voting polls.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Steve
Steve too!
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My pleasure, Steve.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done.
I 'hope' that this seething chapter is done. As an American, I can not fathom the shaking heads of pity of our term of folly. And then to watch as we come perilously close to repeating the colossal mistake.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Well done.
I 'hope' that this seething chapter is done. As an American, I can not fathom the shaking heads of pity of our term of folly. And then to watch as we come perilously close to repeating the colossal mistake.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. I guess you can tell who I support. I'm hoping the win is big enough to blast that other candidate out of the water..
Steve
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I'm counting on a lot of women voters, as well as a historic turn-out of first-time youthful voters. We need a landslide - and the entire legislature.
People confuse 'checks and balances' with gridlock.
Comment from Kahlani
This poem is a lesson in American history--I'm not American, either--but it depicts the struggles many countries have gone through in the name of war. The lasting effects can be devastating.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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This poem is a lesson in American history--I'm not American, either--but it depicts the struggles many countries have gone through in the name of war. The lasting effects can be devastating.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Kahlani.
I was clearly talking about America, but yes, there's a lesson to be absorbed by everyone - don't elect criminal lunatics. It doesn't end well.
Steve
Comment from ESOSTINE
Hello Steve, your beautiful sonnet flows smoothly like a gentle breeze. It calls for reflection how great nations are deviating from the ideals of the founding fathers, the things upon which their greatness is built. Though it tends to speak to the United States of America, it applies also to many similar societies. In my country, (in very recent years), ''the golden crown of leadership'' has dressed the heads of people with records of failures, terror, hooliganism and hatred. We pray for a new ''page''. Thanks so much for sharing this excellent piece which many can relate with. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Hello Steve, your beautiful sonnet flows smoothly like a gentle breeze. It calls for reflection how great nations are deviating from the ideals of the founding fathers, the things upon which their greatness is built. Though it tends to speak to the United States of America, it applies also to many similar societies. In my country, (in very recent years), ''the golden crown of leadership'' has dressed the heads of people with records of failures, terror, hooliganism and hatred. We pray for a new ''page''. Thanks so much for sharing this excellent piece which many can relate with. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind words and the extra star! yes, I remember your Titanic poem about the situation in Nigeria. I'm afraid I am a little obsessed about American stuff at the moment. Like it or not the USA is such a global heavyweight that what happens there affects all of us, even me in a tiny country at the bottom of the world. What is it they say? If the US catches a cold, the rest of the world starts sneezing!
Steve
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent poem! I particularly liked reading "The New Colossus" in conjunction with your own words. It certainly reveals the huge gap between what she expressed and where the country now is, thanks to the one who seeks to satisfy his own ego. That is the ultimate betrayal. Very well done. Impressive. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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An excellent poem! I particularly liked reading "The New Colossus" in conjunction with your own words. It certainly reveals the huge gap between what she expressed and where the country now is, thanks to the one who seeks to satisfy his own ego. That is the ultimate betrayal. Very well done. Impressive. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Wendy, many thanks for the kind words, the clear understanding of my poem and the best wishes as well as the extra shiny star! Let's hope the page-turning, a phrase I borrowed from Kamala Harris's speeches for the ending of my poem, will be so resounding that it puts and end to much of the insanity that has infected US politics for the last nine years.
Steve
Comment from DonandVicki
I have reviewed several of these betrayal poems this evening and I got more of a feeling of betrayal from your poem/story than I did from the rest. Good structure and the poem flowed very well.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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I have reviewed several of these betrayal poems this evening and I got more of a feeling of betrayal from your poem/story than I did from the rest. Good structure and the poem flowed very well.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a powerful and moving poem about the betrayal of American values represented by one of the candidates running for President. I share you dismay and hope we will turn the page.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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a powerful and moving poem about the betrayal of American values represented by one of the candidates running for President. I share you dismay and hope we will turn the page.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Jake,
My fervent hope is that the page-turning will be resounding and you know who ends up behind bars.
Steve
Comment from lyenochka
Whoa. You really wrote quite the sonnet on betrayal - not about a personal one but about the betrayal of a country. I wrote about the same as a sci-fi and you did it without even mentioning a name. Bravo! Hope this wins!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Whoa. You really wrote quite the sonnet on betrayal - not about a personal one but about the betrayal of a country. I wrote about the same as a sci-fi and you did it without even mentioning a name. Bravo! Hope this wins!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Helen.
I didn't think I needed to mention a name, but I've had quite a few bland reviews. perhaps some people didn't quite get the point, even though I quoted Kamala in my last words.
Steve
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh wow, Steve, this is wonderful! Your beautiful sonnet reads like a dream. It's not locked in antiquated Shakespearean language, is clearly expressed and evolves very pleasingly to its excellent summation. It might be about American history but it speaks for all of us, wondering whatever happened to the heroes of the past. Love it and wish I had a six to give you but I'll be looking out for it in the contest! (Oh damn, I can't but the committee will decide on my behalf!) Good luck Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Oh wow, Steve, this is wonderful! Your beautiful sonnet reads like a dream. It's not locked in antiquated Shakespearean language, is clearly expressed and evolves very pleasingly to its excellent summation. It might be about American history but it speaks for all of us, wondering whatever happened to the heroes of the past. Love it and wish I had a six to give you but I'll be looking out for it in the contest! (Oh damn, I can't but the committee will decide on my behalf!) Good luck Debbie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Debbie. I have a fondness for the sonnet and I had fun with this one. Possibly too political to do well with our esteemed judges...
Steve