Echoes of a Nuclear Desolation
Currently 9 countries have vast piles of nuclear weapons.23 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Your stark presentation and harrowing view of nuclear war is captured so incredibly well that I think this is a case where your authors notes take away from the emotional impact!
I'd suggest a brief comment--something like your final sentence:
"(Approaching the) end and the haunting persistence of devastation."
You are very skilled! Believe me, your haiku does not need annotation!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Your stark presentation and harrowing view of nuclear war is captured so incredibly well that I think this is a case where your authors notes take away from the emotional impact!
I'd suggest a brief comment--something like your final sentence:
"(Approaching the) end and the haunting persistence of devastation."
You are very skilled! Believe me, your haiku does not need annotation!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Did you intend to leave a reply? Sometimes things get glitchy...
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review, Karenina. I truly appreciate your kind words and insightful feedback. I understand your point about the author's notes, and I agree that sometimes less is more. Your suggestion for a brief comment is spot on.
I'm grateful for your encouragement and will certainly keep your advice in mind for future works. Thank you again for your support and for taking the time to share your thoughts.
Best regards
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I had to have several goes at trying to save a reply. It plays up sometimes!!
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Smiling here. This "no reply" thing has happened to me too! I'm happy to be your fan now!
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Bless you
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This is a scary scenario. The picture is a good choice for the poem. Our world is so close to this type of war. Hopefully. It never comes to this. I like tge words you use to depict the nuclear war. Great job.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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This is a scary scenario. The picture is a good choice for the poem. Our world is so close to this type of war. Hopefully. It never comes to this. I like tge words you use to depict the nuclear war. Great job.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Dear Brenda
Thank you for your kind words and insightful feedback! I'm glad you found the poem's depiction of a nuclear war both scary and impactful. It's my hope that the poem serves as a reminder of the devastating consequences of such conflict and encourages us all to work towards peace.
I appreciate your thoughts on the image choice and the language used. I strive to create vivid and evocative imagery, and I'm pleased that you found it effective.
Your comment about our world being "so close to this type of war" is a sobering reminder of the fragility of peace. It's a powerful message that I hope resonates with readers.
Thank you again for your thoughtful review. I'm always looking for ways to improve my writing, and your feedback is invaluable.
Comment from DeboraDyess
It is a haunting haiku, although I don't think you needed the author notes. The poem explains itself well. I think I read it even darker than you intended, though, as 'ashes in the wind' made me think of humanity's last remnent blowing away. Well done. It was a drastic change to the Christmas poems I've been reading!
Blessings and best to you and yours,
Deb
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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It is a haunting haiku, although I don't think you needed the author notes. The poem explains itself well. I think I read it even darker than you intended, though, as 'ashes in the wind' made me think of humanity's last remnent blowing away. Well done. It was a drastic change to the Christmas poems I've been reading!
Blessings and best to you and yours,
Deb
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Dear Deb,
Thank you so much for your thoughtful review of "Echoes of a Nuclear Desolation." I'm glad to hear that the haiku resonated with you, even if it took on a darker tone than I initially intended. Your interpretation of "ashes in the wind" as the last remnants of humanity is poignant and adds a powerful dimension to the poem.
I appreciate your feedback regarding the author notes. I'll consider your suggestion for future pieces. It's interesting to think about how poetry can evoke such varied responses and meanings.
Wishing you blessings and the best for you and your loved ones this holiday season.
Comment from Gloria ....
Your entire presentation is stellar and works in concert to present the annihilation of nuclear weapons that always whisper in the shadows.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Your entire presentation is stellar and works in concert to present the annihilation of nuclear weapons that always whisper in the shadows.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much for your exceptional review, Gloria. Your kind words mean a lot to me. I'm glad that the presentation resonated with you and effectively conveyed the haunting reality of nuclear weapons.
I truly appreciate your encouragement and well wishes for the contest. Here's hoping the message reaches others just as powerfully.
Warm regards
Comment from jake cosmos aller
powerful and moving poem about the continued threat of nuclear weapons. Two interesting factoids. The CIA missed the development of both Pakistan's and India's nuclear weapons. Apparently someone had put out on the web transit times of US spy satellites so both countries hid their activity during the transit times hiding them from the US the US CIA did not routinely monitor the internet in those days so they completely missed it - they learned from their mistake and monitor the internet perhaps too much now another factoid there are nine countries with nuclear weapons and at least ten that could develop them within a year including Japan, South Korea, Taiwan, Brazil, Germany, Saudi Arabia, UAE, Mexico, and South Africa. Ukraine, Libya and South Africa gave up their weapons development and Iraq never had a program, just a concept of a program to use Trumpian language.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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powerful and moving poem about the continued threat of nuclear weapons. Two interesting factoids. The CIA missed the development of both Pakistan's and India's nuclear weapons. Apparently someone had put out on the web transit times of US spy satellites so both countries hid their activity during the transit times hiding them from the US the US CIA did not routinely monitor the internet in those days so they completely missed it - they learned from their mistake and monitor the internet perhaps too much now another factoid there are nine countries with nuclear weapons and at least ten that could develop them within a year including Japan, South Korea, Taiwan, Brazil, Germany, Saudi Arabia, UAE, Mexico, and South Africa. Ukraine, Libya and South Africa gave up their weapons development and Iraq never had a program, just a concept of a program to use Trumpian language.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your kind words and insightful feedback! I'm glad you found the poem's depiction of a nuclear war both scary and impactful. It's my hope that the poem serves as a reminder of the devastating consequences of such conflict and encourages us all to work towards peace.
I appreciate your thoughts on the image choice and the language used. I strive to create vivid and evocative imagery, and I'm pleased that you found it effective.
Your comment about our world being "so close to this type of war" is a sobering reminder of the fragility of peace. It's a powerful message that I hope resonates with readers.
Thank you again for your thoughtful review. I'm always looking for ways to improve my writing, and your feedback is invaluable.
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thanks a lot I like your crisp writing style
Comment from SimianSavant
This is an outstanding haiku. I think it would benefit from a bit more attention to presentation, with larger text and a different font, to achieve its full potential with the voters in the contest. Good luck! 🦍
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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This is an outstanding haiku. I think it would benefit from a bit more attention to presentation, with larger text and a different font, to achieve its full potential with the voters in the contest. Good luck! 🦍
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much for your incredibly kind words and the exceptional rating! I'm truly honoured that you found my haiku so impactful.
I appreciate your suggestion about the presentation. You're right, a larger font and perhaps a different typeface could make the haiku even more visually striking. I'll definitely consider those changes before submitting it to the contest.
Thanks again for your feedback and your support!
Take care and stay safe.
Comment from DonandVicki
All is vanity, your poem/five-seven-five brings out the aftermath of total destruction. All is a chasing after the wind. All hopes and dreams up in radioactive smoke. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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All is vanity, your poem/five-seven-five brings out the aftermath of total destruction. All is a chasing after the wind. All hopes and dreams up in radioactive smoke. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! I'm truly grateful for your kind words and for recognising the message I was trying to convey.
You're right, the aftermath of nuclear destruction is a stark reminder of the futility of our pursuits when faced with such devastation. I'm glad the haiku was able to evoke that sense of emptiness and loss.
Your feedback is truly appreciated.
Take care and stay safe.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
To be honest, Peter, I don't think you needed to explain your haiku in such detail. It spoke for itself and evoked the "haunting aftermath" you were after: the chilling silence where once there had been so much life and hope and those ashes, so representative of destruction and loss. A very well crafted verse, sympathetically illustrated, and a strong contender! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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To be honest, Peter, I don't think you needed to explain your haiku in such detail. It spoke for itself and evoked the "haunting aftermath" you were after: the chilling silence where once there had been so much life and hope and those ashes, so representative of destruction and loss. A very well crafted verse, sympathetically illustrated, and a strong contender! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Dear Debbie,
Thank you so much for your kind words and insightful feedback! I really appreciate your thoughts on the haiku and the illustration.
You're absolutely right, I think I got a little carried away with the explanation. I was so excited about the piece that I wanted to share all my thoughts, but you're right, it should speak for itself.
I'll definitely keep your advice in mind for future submissions. I'm so glad you liked it and I'm feeling very encouraged by your words.
Stay well and safe.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
Such a large message in such a small poem. It is definitely a topic that people need to look into a bit more deeply. It is a frightening thought, that all it would take is the push of one button to set off the end of the world. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Such a large message in such a small poem. It is definitely a topic that people need to look into a bit more deeply. It is a frightening thought, that all it would take is the push of one button to set off the end of the world. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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This is a fantastic review! You've perfectly captured the deeper meaning of my haiku. It's clear that "Echoes of a Nuclear Desolation" has resonated with you on a deep level, and you've articulated its message with clarity and conviction.
Thank you for review.
Blessings.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is my biggest fear Peter. We have mad men in charge of nuclear weapons today and any one of them could press the button and destroy the earth. Your few words are poignant and terrifying, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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This is my biggest fear Peter. We have mad men in charge of nuclear weapons today and any one of them could press the button and destroy the earth. Your few words are poignant and terrifying, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 21-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Dolly, your review is deeply moving and speaks volumes about my haiku It's clear that "Echoes of a Nuclear Desolation" resonated with you on a personal level, and that's a testament to the power of just a few words.
You've captured the essence of the poem's impact: the chilling fear of nuclear annihilation, the weight of responsibility in the hands of those with power, and the fragility of our world. Your words, "poignant and terrifying," perfectly encapsulate the feeling the haiku evokes.
The fear you express is a shared one, amplified by events like the Chernobyl disaster. The devastation it caused, the long-lasting effects on the environment and human health, serve as a stark reminder of the potential consequences of nuclear weapons. It's a reminder that the threat is not just theoretical, but a very real possibility.
And sadly, the threat is not just from one nation. Countries like the United States, Russia, China, France, the United Kingdom, India, Pakistan, Israel, and North Korea all possess nuclear weapons, creating a global web of potential danger.
Thank you for sharing your heartfelt response. It's a beautiful reminder of the impact art can have on our lives.
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Thank you Peter for posting this poem. I have written about the consequences of Nuclear war before and it is a very real threat. I have always counted myself lucky that I have not lived through a world war personally like my Grandparents and parents have, but our Grandchildren face a much worse threat these days, love Dolly x x x
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Thank you for your heartfelt message. It's indeed a terrifying thought that such power lies in the hands of a few. The fear of nuclear devastation is a shared concern, and it's important to voice these anxieties and advocate for peace and responsible leadership.
I'm glad my words resonated with you, even if they brought forth such a heavy topic. Let's continue to hope for a future where diplomacy and understanding prevail over conflict.
Wishing you peace and safety this holiday season.
Love,
PeterXXX