Miranda Chronicles: Teacher's Pet
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Ten Minute Stakeout"Miranda finds herself in another situation.
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Comment from lancellot
Or, she's an ordinary person who sees a strange lady walk up and speaks to her son, then comes up with a clear lie.
Interesting chapter, I would watch out for too many coincidences, just when the story needs it.
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Or, she's an ordinary person who sees a strange lady walk up and speaks to her son, then comes up with a clear lie.
Interesting chapter, I would watch out for too many coincidences, just when the story needs it.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written.
He opened his eyes and said the boy. - Need quotes around this.
I don't know how Miranda thought springing herself on Terence was a good idea.
Best wishes.
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Nicely written.
He opened his eyes and said the boy. - Need quotes around this.
I don't know how Miranda thought springing herself on Terence was a good idea.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Wendy G
A dramatic conclusion - and Miranda is pretty spot-on with her intuition. But she needed a better story to cover her visit. She's impulsive but probably should have prepared better. It is very possible/ probable that Terrence's mother was acting like a mother bear - and then conveniently was able to put the blame on Doug who may well have witnessed what she did. And "the boy" Doug was referring to was probably Terrence.
Fine writing.
Wendy
Edit: He opened his eyes and said the boy. (and said, "The boy ...")
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A dramatic conclusion - and Miranda is pretty spot-on with her intuition. But she needed a better story to cover her visit. She's impulsive but probably should have prepared better. It is very possible/ probable that Terrence's mother was acting like a mother bear - and then conveniently was able to put the blame on Doug who may well have witnessed what she did. And "the boy" Doug was referring to was probably Terrence.
Fine writing.
Wendy
Edit: He opened his eyes and said the boy. (and said, "The boy ...")
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I really felt for Miranda, caught up in her own enthusiasm. A case of jumping in with both feet. And Terrence's mother is quite the match for Miranda. ("She('s) a hands(-)on mother ...) Great pace with the story and always lovely to see Miranda being her usual impulsive self, all with the very best of intentions. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Take care Debbie
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I really felt for Miranda, caught up in her own enthusiasm. A case of jumping in with both feet. And Terrence's mother is quite the match for Miranda. ("She('s) a hands(-)on mother ...) Great pace with the story and always lovely to see Miranda being her usual impulsive self, all with the very best of intentions. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Take care Debbie
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
