Comment from Summer Falls

Excellent

Let me begin this review by assuring you that your poem does not seem stiff at all! Your rhymes fell right in place with the meter. It is a shame that you missed the contest,for it would have been stiff competition for a winning entry. It is one degree outside right now, I wish Jack would hit the road right now.
summergirl

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Thanks so much summergirl! Very ironic, your name, with 1 degree temps where you are at present, eh? So tell Jack VERY LOUDLY to git on outta there and come right back here! xoxoxoxoxo

reply by Summer Falls on 08-Dec-2008

Ironic?It's maddening! I have been screaming at Jack,he is a stubborn boy ... he said he is staying for awhile. BRRRR

Comment from earthlybeing

Excellent

Ah how fun and witty this one is. Love the story and the beat. It flows well and was a great read. Hope you are well today. Thanks, Jeanette

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Thanks so much Jeanette. Glad you liked this little bit of fun! xoxoxoxo

Comment from lupinelinda

Excellent

I don't find this stiff at all. It is fun and well done. You did a lovely job of personifying old Jack. With the temperature at 20 degrees and falling, I can honestly say, he is out here in the Berkshires at the moment.

Nice work...Peace, L

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Well, send him back to the Australians right away!

I'm glad you didn't find this stiff, but in the past when I've done tight syllable count poems I've had the odd comment! So thanks so much for stopping by and as said, I'm happy you enjoyed this xoxoxoxo

Comment from chaswriter

Excellent

AlapacaLady - This quite a delightful poem. Great rhyme and certainly great rhythm. The photo is a perfect match for the poem. I enjoyed it. Charlie.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Thanks so very much Charlie; I'm glad you stopped by and enjoyed this! xoxoxoxo

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

hi apalachalady...i think i saw him today and i said that very thing..."hit the road Jack" he laughed at me as if his pawn and said "you'll be really sorry when i'm gone." little does he know...i'm throwing a party now. yours, diana

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Good on you Diana! Tip that toddy his way and tease the sneaky little sucker. And ain't we all sorry to see him go? For it means hot, dry days and out there working in 'em, sweating like pigs ... Thanks so much for stopping by xoxoxoxox

Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

This was a light whimsical view of winter. Your poem read very fluidly to me and your words seemed unforced and smooth. A great picture to go with his delightful verse. Terror

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Thanks so much Terror! Nice to meet you, too xoxoxoxoxo

Comment from LadyMary

Excellent

This is a cheerful reading, and as I sit by the fireplace with snow outside my window, I do want to send him back. Poem does not seem stilted in its four syllable format, and the rhyme is good. Thanks for sharing in light of missing the contest. LadyMary

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 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Thankyou LadyMary. We will gladly receive him over here! I'm glad you enjoyed this, and didn't find it stilted. So thanks so much for stopping by and for your comments xoxooxoxo

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

alpacalady,

No problem, you can have Jack back. We have about 5 or 6 months of his presence to look forward to. Cute poem and brought a chuckle at the end.

Good job.

Duane

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 Comment Written 07-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008

Thanks Duane, glad it brought you a chuckle! Winter sure can be a drag, but then I think summer's worse cause it's back to working and sweating out there and then only being able to do a few hours in the morning and early evening. Oh well. The same season all year round'd be a tad boring I spose ...

As said, thanks so much! xoxoxoxo