Cheryl's Disappearance
A disturbing tale16 total reviews
Comment from wierdgrace
Great thriller, and great story, I loved it, and the ending, something you would hear at the ending of a murder mystery, thank you so much for sharing loved it. Great entry for this contest, well done.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Great thriller, and great story, I loved it, and the ending, something you would hear at the ending of a murder mystery, thank you so much for sharing loved it. Great entry for this contest, well done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Hi, Grace. Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. - John
Comment from spellbound
Very well written. Kept my attention throughout. Appears you've done a great job investigating to write this piece.
Sad to know there are people out there that do such things.
Good luck with the contest.
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Very well written. Kept my attention throughout. Appears you've done a great job investigating to write this piece.
Sad to know there are people out there that do such things.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
Comment from sugardog
Okay...this was so gruesome!! I am not much for gore, although you did a fabulous job on this story...I just can't handle it...can't sleep at night after I read this kind of story. Good realistic dialogue and you always to a great job with police matters. Well done, John.
"...she went to visit he(her)mother in Florida..."
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Okay...this was so gruesome!! I am not much for gore, although you did a fabulous job on this story...I just can't handle it...can't sleep at night after I read this kind of story. Good realistic dialogue and you always to a great job with police matters. Well done, John.
"...she went to visit he(her)mother in Florida..."
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Hey, Dana. Rememeber, I wrote this piece. It's fiction. You can go to bed, knowing I wrote a story. That's all it is. Go to sleep thinking of beaches, flowers and handbags. Regards, John
Comment from c_lucas
The poor man complemented Johnson and she didn't thank him. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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The poor man complemented Johnson and she didn't thank him. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
Comment from Harrisa
Your story was gruesome, and the maniac responsible for these terrible acts was totally sick in the head. Too bad when this happens, it takes so long to catch the lunatic.
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Your story was gruesome, and the maniac responsible for these terrible acts was totally sick in the head. Too bad when this happens, it takes so long to catch the lunatic.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
Comment from anabelle
Wow! Pretty sick man. Wait, that's not a sufficient adjective for him. I think we need appallingly disgusting excuse for a man. I admire you being able to write this. I don't think I could.
The second last sentence is really good.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Wow! Pretty sick man. Wait, that's not a sufficient adjective for him. I think we need appallingly disgusting excuse for a man. I admire you being able to write this. I don't think I could.
The second last sentence is really good.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Anabelle. I agree. The man is lower than pond scum. I'm glad you saw some good in the lines. - John