Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Heartaches & cowboys"A book of Poetry & Writing
37 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
I LOVE your free verse...because you are not coerced by form and meter and you have said it like it is...I like the repeat refrain and I can see him riding on his ranch...close to nature ...and she liking the finer things expensive......two disparate people...well done
God bless
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I LOVE your free verse...because you are not coerced by form and meter and you have said it like it is...I like the repeat refrain and I can see him riding on his ranch...close to nature ...and she liking the finer things expensive......two disparate people...well done
God bless
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Good writing in this one, GW, not that you'll ever see this review. I'm not even sure you read them.
In any event, your well-rhymed quatrains bemoaning a lone cowpoke's love who has flown the coup, so to speak, utilizes a nice cadence and good word choices to maximum effect.
Good luck to you in the Sad Poetry Contest
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Good writing in this one, GW, not that you'll ever see this review. I'm not even sure you read them.
In any event, your well-rhymed quatrains bemoaning a lone cowpoke's love who has flown the coup, so to speak, utilizes a nice cadence and good word choices to maximum effect.
Good luck to you in the Sad Poetry Contest
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I do thanks
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That's good to know. I was beginning to wonder if I'd been writing to a figure of my rather over-active imagination.
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Sorry Dean had over 700 reviews to respond to
Gary
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700!?? Holy mother-board explosion, deepwater! I'm lucky if I have 45+ to deal with. Of course, not too many of my postings make it to the front page unless they're well-received, so...
I just wanted to know you're out there is all.
Thanks.
Comment from Glasstruth
This poem has a song-like quality with the catchy refrain. Like the smoothness of the rhyming, and the cowboy who was ten years older adds flavor with this line: "What made it end so sudden was, the cowboy just got old" He didn't ride off into the sunset. No, he got old. There's a great story here. I think you could add so much more. The whole story is narrated from the third person, if you got into it from a personal view it'd add a different element. Just a thought. Great writing! Les
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This poem has a song-like quality with the catchy refrain. Like the smoothness of the rhyming, and the cowboy who was ten years older adds flavor with this line: "What made it end so sudden was, the cowboy just got old" He didn't ride off into the sunset. No, he got old. There's a great story here. I think you could add so much more. The whole story is narrated from the third person, if you got into it from a personal view it'd add a different element. Just a thought. Great writing! Les
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. This is a song eh. I think the cadence could so go with a good set of guitars. Yep, the loss of love, and I tell ya...I have picked horses over humans many times...loving a cowboy or girl means loving the need for freedom...never an easy bed partner...
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Hi. This is a song eh. I think the cadence could so go with a good set of guitars. Yep, the loss of love, and I tell ya...I have picked horses over humans many times...loving a cowboy or girl means loving the need for freedom...never an easy bed partner...
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from 1954speed
Very well written story with a good flow. And the use of repeated stanza accentuates the constant, day to day loss the cowboys feels for the woman he loved. A sad story but well done.
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Very well written story with a good flow. And the use of repeated stanza accentuates the constant, day to day loss the cowboys feels for the woman he loved. A sad story but well done.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from poetbear
Inspire and despite what you deal with,
You have to move on even with a wound that never heals.
This is passionate and thought provoking write.
We had to find the light in our darkest hours as well as our friends.
Beautifully written!
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Inspire and despite what you deal with,
You have to move on even with a wound that never heals.
This is passionate and thought provoking write.
We had to find the light in our darkest hours as well as our friends.
Beautifully written!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from freepass
I liked this a lot and another 5 star Gem!
and it reminds us about death wether its human or your animals, but they are considered your family always!
And you need to get your anger out when your pets die as well.
I even had a pet leave me and wrote a story on it, appearing in the Agawam Catalyst and wrote a short story for a contest...
its a way to grieve
well 5 very big stars*****
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I liked this a lot and another 5 star Gem!
and it reminds us about death wether its human or your animals, but they are considered your family always!
And you need to get your anger out when your pets die as well.
I even had a pet leave me and wrote a story on it, appearing in the Agawam Catalyst and wrote a short story for a contest...
its a way to grieve
well 5 very big stars*****
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This poem is a great contest entry. I had tears well up in my eyes. The flow was perfect. I loved it. Great job and good luck.
both came from defferent worlds (different?)
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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This poem is a great contest entry. I had tears well up in my eyes. The flow was perfect. I loved it. Great job and good luck.
both came from defferent worlds (different?)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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got it thanks Barbara
Comment from royowen
This is a sad poem, an old cowboy who really couldn't run with the young! That's always trouble with age, it can never recapture what is past! Mind you there are so many things in our lives that throw us a curve ball! Well written, with excellent flow, nice abab rhyming, even meter! Blessings, Roy.
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This is a sad poem, an old cowboy who really couldn't run with the young! That's always trouble with age, it can never recapture what is past! Mind you there are so many things in our lives that throw us a curve ball! Well written, with excellent flow, nice abab rhyming, even meter! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with day/way. Good alliteration with somewhat/sad...so/sudden...trials/tribulations...from/fathers...late/life...logical/life...lives/life...his/heart. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message. Best of luck in the contest.
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with day/way. Good alliteration with somewhat/sad...so/sudden...trials/tribulations...from/fathers...late/life...logical/life...lives/life...his/heart. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014