Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Dan103085
A very nice poem that really hits home. My grandmother passed away in February and it was very sudden. I luckily still have my mother, but I can only imagine your pain. Thanks for sharing this. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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A very nice poem that really hits home. My grandmother passed away in February and it was very sudden. I luckily still have my mother, but I can only imagine your pain. Thanks for sharing this. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you for the review Dan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is so lovely, Gary -
full of tenderness and emotion...
a sweet dedication to your obviously
much-loved Gran and Mum.
As I wander from time and space - might I suggest -
As I wander through time and space
The stars at night do whisper your names
My heart still carries a tear, - and here -
When stars at night whisper your names
My tender heart carries a tear. - Just ignore if not in agreement, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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This is so lovely, Gary -
full of tenderness and emotion...
a sweet dedication to your obviously
much-loved Gran and Mum.
As I wander from time and space - might I suggest -
As I wander through time and space
The stars at night do whisper your names
My heart still carries a tear, - and here -
When stars at night whisper your names
My tender heart carries a tear. - Just ignore if not in agreement, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you for the welcome comments Margaret
Comment from laren
This is a very nice poem which tell us about memoryes of other times. How the author miss his Mom and Gram but he hope see them again some day.
It's very well written!
Congratulations!
Laren
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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This is a very nice poem which tell us about memoryes of other times. How the author miss his Mom and Gram but he hope see them again some day.
It's very well written!
Congratulations!
Laren
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you Laren for the review
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Thank you for sharing,
Laren
Comment from idnami
This is certainly heartfelt, if a little non specific. The second last line is lovely though I would remove "do" as it sounds a bit awkward.
Also
All the little things you would say and do
Made me happy, not so sad
seems a bit... odd? Obvious? If you are happy then of course you are not sad.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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This is certainly heartfelt, if a little non specific. The second last line is lovely though I would remove "do" as it sounds a bit awkward.
Also
All the little things you would say and do
Made me happy, not so sad
seems a bit... odd? Obvious? If you are happy then of course you are not sad.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you for the review
Comment from overthemoon
I like this very much, the saying goes "you don't know what you've got till its gone" so true when our love ones are with us we take so much for granted. A lovely photo completes a very moving verse. Enjoy your day, Anne
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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I like this very much, the saying goes "you don't know what you've got till its gone" so true when our love ones are with us we take so much for granted. A lovely photo completes a very moving verse. Enjoy your day, Anne
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you Ann for your most welcome review Gary
Comment from pbrprasad
I feel some poetic experience by reading this lines .It still carries a tear in my heart too. All the little things made happy is something different
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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I feel some poetic experience by reading this lines .It still carries a tear in my heart too. All the little things made happy is something different
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you pb
Comment from gabriowl
A heartfelt and reflective poem. I think often of my parents and ancestors, give thanks, and look forward to seeing them again someday. When I do that, it makes me feel their presence right in the moment, and I am comforted by their aura. Be well - excellent write!
I love your flow, and grammar doesn't bother me much. One editing note that should be an easy fix though:
>The final line (period instead of comma?)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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A heartfelt and reflective poem. I think often of my parents and ancestors, give thanks, and look forward to seeing them again someday. When I do that, it makes me feel their presence right in the moment, and I am comforted by their aura. Be well - excellent write!
I love your flow, and grammar doesn't bother me much. One editing note that should be an easy fix though:
>The final line (period instead of comma?)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thanks
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello deepwater,
Your down home and personal poem was touching. Writings From the Heart is an apt title for this work. You did a very good job and paid a fine tribute to the memory of your mother and grandmother. May you feel them close to you always. Hugs, W ^-^
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Hello deepwater,
Your down home and personal poem was touching. Writings From the Heart is an apt title for this work. You did a very good job and paid a fine tribute to the memory of your mother and grandmother. May you feel them close to you always. Hugs, W ^-^
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you W^-^ for reading
Comment from Aletheia
This is very touching and what a beautiful picture of your mom and grandma. I like it because it's sad but hopeful.
I love your last two lines:
The stars at night do whisper your names (no doubt)
My heart still carries a tear
Well done! B :)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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This is very touching and what a beautiful picture of your mom and grandma. I like it because it's sad but hopeful.
I love your last two lines:
The stars at night do whisper your names (no doubt)
My heart still carries a tear
Well done! B :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you B for the review
Comment from Nerdette
This was a very sweet poem that I am assuming is in memory of your mom and grandma? It's a got a nice flow as well in the actual reading of it. What wonderful work.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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This was a very sweet poem that I am assuming is in memory of your mom and grandma? It's a got a nice flow as well in the actual reading of it. What wonderful work.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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thank you Nerdette