Snowdevil
Easy come, easy go ... (has mild language)29 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
This story is well told - in spite of the actions behind the storyline. I totally agree with Perlene and the feelings she had about all this! Fargo is a great movie and I think we all wonder about that money! ~patty~
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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This story is well told - in spite of the actions behind the storyline. I totally agree with Perlene and the feelings she had about all this! Fargo is a great movie and I think we all wonder about that money! ~patty~
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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") HI Patty! Thank you for reading this, and I am sorry for this late thanks...I thought about writing a part two with Perlene kicking some butt..? I don't know. I'm so weird. I love that movie Fargo...Frances McDormand is awesome as that deputy in it!! She is so funny. I am so glad you liked this! HUG! Susan
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Susan,
Love your story.
Good dialogue.
I like the descriptions.
Good title.
Interesting.
Entertaining.
Cool ending too.
Katie
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Susan,
Love your story.
Good dialogue.
I like the descriptions.
Good title.
Interesting.
Entertaining.
Cool ending too.
Katie
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi Katie! I am glad you enjoyed! Your opinion is important to me and it's great to hear from you!! I hope you are playing your guitar and everything is going well for you my friend...hugs!! Susan
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Susan, you're welcome. Oh man! I have to get back to playing my guitar! It's been too long. My fingers are going to be screaming soon. lol!
hugs,
katie
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I know,it's like riding a horse...I go all winter not doing it and in the spring it takes a week for my legs to adjust.? ") Play me a song Katie!! Luv you. Suse
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Suse, okay.. tomorrow..
luv you,
katie
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Okay, I hope you find a moment...I know it's hard...and you have youngin's to take care of...I have no real excuses for not doing things. Except, just fatigue. "( ")
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:)
Comment from adewpearl
What a funny story, Susan. I love the movie Fargo, and this does have that tone to it, doesn't it? Great visuals - I could see this guy trying to wake Billy up and then discovering the money and then having the suitcase ripped open by the snowdevil. And I loved his inner thoughts, like when he anticipates his wife pitching a fit when they get in so late. Great narrative voice, quirky humor - I really enjoyed this story, my friend. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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What a funny story, Susan. I love the movie Fargo, and this does have that tone to it, doesn't it? Great visuals - I could see this guy trying to wake Billy up and then discovering the money and then having the suitcase ripped open by the snowdevil. And I loved his inner thoughts, like when he anticipates his wife pitching a fit when they get in so late. Great narrative voice, quirky humor - I really enjoyed this story, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi there Brooke! Me too, and I am just thrilled that you enjoyed this! I have always hoped they would make a Fargo part two...but, the good ones they never do! So, I decided to solve the money in the snow myself! HA! Thank you so much Brooke!! HUGS! Susan
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My nephew even had a yellow lab named Fargo after the movie - people in my family have good taste. LOL
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oh that's neat! I have watched that show now, probably, let's see...10 times? Over the past few years...gee. ")
Comment from Belinda
Ha-ha Susan, this is downright humorous. You've painted a character too in the narrator, when he got the suitcase full of money. (I think I catch one twenty dollar bill just now ... :))
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Ha-ha Susan, this is downright humorous. You've painted a character too in the narrator, when he got the suitcase full of money. (I think I catch one twenty dollar bill just now ... :))
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi Belinda! Thank you so much! I wish you could find some unclaimed cash! And me too! Wouldn't it be fine? Oh well...and listen, once, when I was pregnant, 9 months along a friend of mine and I had been shopping and we stopped at a burger joint. She ordered sandwiches and when she paid, the money went flying in the wind...I thought it was a twenty, when in fact is was a five...but I took off RUNNING after it, for a long way, and my son came then, just two days later! ") I thought you would get a kick out of that? I was so dumb!! ") Susan
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Ha-ha, so your son's birth was quickened by the five dollar bill ... :) Thanks for sharing this humorous episode of your life.
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It was! I also had my friend drive thru the potholes in that same parking lot too! I had had enough of that humungous tummy...")
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
you are good a dark humor in your flash fiction stories. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you've established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Your dialogue is excellent. It serves them right for driving drunk in a snow storm. What a bunch of stooges. The reap what they sew. Your art work of the old car is great. I really enjoy your writing. I love the dark humor.
Melissa.
May you take the cake in 2011:
glitter-graphics.com
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Susan,
you are good a dark humor in your flash fiction stories. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you've established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Your dialogue is excellent. It serves them right for driving drunk in a snow storm. What a bunch of stooges. The reap what they sew. Your art work of the old car is great. I really enjoy your writing. I love the dark humor.
Melissa.
May you take the cake in 2011:
glitter-graphics.com
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Well, what a really beautiful review! WOW! THank you Melissa...I love this! How do you do this? It sparkles and everything. I hope you will send me this again in March, if I make it to my next b-day...? Thank you very much...what fun! I love it!! HUGS!! Susan
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
a good write with good flow and imagery
I enjoyed reading your script and your characters caught my attention and held it . thanks for sharing. Mary
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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a good write with good flow and imagery
I enjoyed reading your script and your characters caught my attention and held it . thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Mary!! What a thrill to see a six! But more to have you enjoy my efforts...that's what matters. Thank you my friend...it's my pleasure! Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I guess better go ahead and get home because Perlene is still going to be really angry. I don't think Billy will be too happy being left in a ditch.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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I guess better go ahead and get home because Perlene is still going to be really angry. I don't think Billy will be too happy being left in a ditch.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Hi Barb! Thank you for reading that...I hope you saw the language warning...it's extra special to hear from you for something different. I super appreciate this review...I hope you are rested and feeling good today!! ") Luv, Susan
Comment from Magic Wand
I loved the Dark humor of Fargo, too, but had forgotten about the money being stashed in the snow bank. Your work is funny and ironic. Your visuals are great, and the photo embellishes the story well. The emotion is good, and at first I found it a stretch that he would be so quickly willing to say "Easy come easy go", and then I remembered he is drunk. I like the last line best.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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I loved the Dark humor of Fargo, too, but had forgotten about the money being stashed in the snow bank. Your work is funny and ironic. Your visuals are great, and the photo embellishes the story well. The emotion is good, and at first I found it a stretch that he would be so quickly willing to say "Easy come easy go", and then I remembered he is drunk. I like the last line best.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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") Thank you SO much! This was a fun one to do. Yes, this guy was too soused to run after the money, plus the snow was just too deep! Lol. Thanks for getting it. Great and very appreciated review Magic!! Susan
Comment from writer c
Well done, Susan..good flash fiction! Setting, conflict and resolution is clear. Your two characters (three if you count that snowdevil!) are well defined for flash. I marvel at your ability to select interesting situations for your little stories day after day. I'll have to plan a car trip through Kansas in the spring...lol
Carol
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Well done, Susan..good flash fiction! Setting, conflict and resolution is clear. Your two characters (three if you count that snowdevil!) are well defined for flash. I marvel at your ability to select interesting situations for your little stories day after day. I'll have to plan a car trip through Kansas in the spring...lol
Carol
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Hi Carol! Thank you! Oh and be careful...if you go through Louisiana, they are notorious for keeping your vehicle if you speed or just roll thru a stopsign. Seriously. Just be wary. They just sell it too, no getting it back. AND watch for twisters Carol. Gee, I hope you will be okay. Let me know how it goes? I can't wait for spring, but with it comes the storms! ") Suse
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I'm teasing you, Suse. I'll be looking for that money...lol
Comment from anne1204
This is a great story . It starts out serious and ending up funny as 'ell. Serves them right for getting drunk. Perlene would really kill him if he ever tells her what happened. Very good writing and great imagination. You should start compiling a book of short stories. Anne
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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This is a great story . It starts out serious and ending up funny as 'ell. Serves them right for getting drunk. Perlene would really kill him if he ever tells her what happened. Very good writing and great imagination. You should start compiling a book of short stories. Anne
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Oh Anne, another six! Thank you!! Wow...I am thrilled that you got a good laugh with this! That means the idea worked...great. I should make a book, maybe someday, it's just expensive! I sure appreciate your enthusiasm Anne, it's so helpful...hugs!! Susan