Comment from Chiina P

Excellent

Great job at the essence poem. You followed the prompt accurately and it made sense. Ironically your poem made me smile! lol. Good job.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011

Glad this little essence poem could make you smile. Appreciate your commens ...;)

Comment from manicblue

Good

This met the 6 syllable per line criteria and the inner and outer rhyme. It was loosely woven about a Sunday. The inner rhyme was just a little confusing as to whether the second line intended for "pray" or "stays" to rhyme with Sunday in the first. Good luck in this contest, please take care.

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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011

Thanks, manicblue. I appreciate your comments. I changed the second llne to - 'We pray will stay awhile' so that both words rhyme with Sunday, and there is internal rhyme within that line as well.

Comment from laren

Excellent

A beautiful poem that says in two lines the essential a smile on Sunday, a prayer and will prevail.
Wisdom encapsulated.
Congratulations!
Laren

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011

Thanks, Laren. Appreciate your comments ...;o)

reply by laren on 05-Aug-2011

Thank you for sharing, have a nice weekend,
Laren

Comment from Katchoo_Ledeux

Excellent

I love the coupling of weekend pleasures with the sacred day of the week. Almost a play on words, but with a different spin. The artwork drives the imagery home, although it's not really needed with this type of execution.

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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011

Glad you enjoyed this little essence poem, and I'm happy to know it works even without the artwork. Appreciate your comments ...;)