Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Part one, Chapter 13"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from brighterside
brill loved this chapter as i am only starting out its great to read stories so well written
you make it so easy to read and its a great way for people
if in these situations to guide them in some ways
i really enjoyed the read
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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brill loved this chapter as i am only starting out its great to read stories so well written
you make it so easy to read and its a great way for people
if in these situations to guide them in some ways
i really enjoyed the read
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cheryl Baker
Another enjoyable episode of your story. It is well written and engaging as usual. I'm enjoying the developing relationship between Anna and Troy. The hesitation on the part of Anna, not believing that happiness could be meant for her. It is quite a realistic story. I look forward to the next section. Your author's notes are educational and easily understood.
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Another enjoyable episode of your story. It is well written and engaging as usual. I'm enjoying the developing relationship between Anna and Troy. The hesitation on the part of Anna, not believing that happiness could be meant for her. It is quite a realistic story. I look forward to the next section. Your author's notes are educational and easily understood.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ericawrites
This sounds like a very interesting story, it is well written and I love the way it flows. I noticed that you referred to the characters as "the couple" on two occasions ?
Also... "After Troy nodded.." and "After a gulp, she.." I would suggest removing the word "after" because I think it is unnecessary and repetitive.
Just my opinion though! I think it's a very good, well written chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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This sounds like a very interesting story, it is well written and I love the way it flows. I noticed that you referred to the characters as "the couple" on two occasions ?
Also... "After Troy nodded.." and "After a gulp, she.." I would suggest removing the word "after" because I think it is unnecessary and repetitive.
Just my opinion though! I think it's a very good, well written chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for your review. I will take another look at those areas.
Comment from Daniel Allan
Not confusing at all for a first time reader. You managed to wrap up most of the history subtly. I haven't seen that kind of care on this website. 'All Time Best' for a reason, I see.
I found it great. Your style is short, sweet and to the point, but your narrative allows plenty of space for intrigue. (By the way: nice mini-cliffhanger).
I think Troy might be a little too good to be true, but I suppose there are near-perfect people out there to win our envy.
You're great and I hope to read more soon.
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Not confusing at all for a first time reader. You managed to wrap up most of the history subtly. I haven't seen that kind of care on this website. 'All Time Best' for a reason, I see.
I found it great. Your style is short, sweet and to the point, but your narrative allows plenty of space for intrigue. (By the way: nice mini-cliffhanger).
I think Troy might be a little too good to be true, but I suppose there are near-perfect people out there to win our envy.
You're great and I hope to read more soon.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from clumsyninja
It is very hard to rate this as a single piece. All I can say is your dialog runs very smooth and you capture the character's personalities very well. I nearly gave this a lower mark because I like more of a narration but clearly it's at least a 5 :)
Nice work
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It is very hard to rate this as a single piece. All I can say is your dialog runs very smooth and you capture the character's personalities very well. I nearly gave this a lower mark because I like more of a narration but clearly it's at least a 5 :)
Nice work
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Hareem.S
Man, I can't wait to know what's next! Your every chapter is a page turner Barbara! It makes me so curious, I want to know what happens next soon. Loved reading it!
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Man, I can't wait to know what's next! Your every chapter is a page turner Barbara! It makes me so curious, I want to know what happens next soon. Loved reading it!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from God's Writer
A very good story Barbera. I have been in two abusive marriages. After the second one ended in her death I decided not to remarry. It has been nine years. I feel I am ready and have finally with my last surgery finally found my soulmate. She is kind, loving, everything I have always wanted and needed, and not a thread of anger or abuse in her. Thank you for the story. I will have to send you the poem I wrote about abuse. Great Job on this story. I will have to keep my eyes open for more chapters!!!!!!!
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A very good story Barbera. I have been in two abusive marriages. After the second one ended in her death I decided not to remarry. It has been nine years. I feel I am ready and have finally with my last surgery finally found my soulmate. She is kind, loving, everything I have always wanted and needed, and not a thread of anger or abuse in her. Thank you for the story. I will have to send you the poem I wrote about abuse. Great Job on this story. I will have to keep my eyes open for more chapters!!!!!!!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
This is a wonderful picture of Anna still cowering soul...hoping for some sunlight, but not wanting to trust that she could be happy.
A nice flowing pace, dialogue unfurled with ease and the emotions of Anna...as she took tentative steps..all there to see.
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This is a wonderful picture of Anna still cowering soul...hoping for some sunlight, but not wanting to trust that she could be happy.
A nice flowing pace, dialogue unfurled with ease and the emotions of Anna...as she took tentative steps..all there to see.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Very well written, very clever advices in this wonderful chapter and in the Author's Notes as well. It was a very insightful read.
Great job!!
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Very well written, very clever advices in this wonderful chapter and in the Author's Notes as well. It was a very insightful read.
Great job!!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dbmccarter
I like this upbeat chapter especially after the tenseness of the last several chapters. Still, it shows how the fear is always with Anna. I imagine it is really that way. Great job.
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I like this upbeat chapter especially after the tenseness of the last several chapters. Still, it shows how the fear is always with Anna. I imagine it is really that way. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.