Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "part 4, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Devados
Barbara,
This story hits home. I have worked in mental health and child protection for quite a while (now retired). Your expression of police powerlessness is apt, very frustrating and frightening for the victim. This message needs to be repeated over and over until laws are made that protect based on fear and intimidation. Devados
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Barbara,
This story hits home. I have worked in mental health and child protection for quite a while (now retired). Your expression of police powerlessness is apt, very frustrating and frightening for the victim. This message needs to be repeated over and over until laws are made that protect based on fear and intimidation. Devados
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cce29
another great entry. Ive enjoyed the few pieces I have read to this story. I plan to read lots more. Your dialog is great. The only thing that is a little different from the rest I have read is that you didn't describe the details of any situation very well this time. If this is just meant to be a piece for conversation, great job.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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another great entry. Ive enjoyed the few pieces I have read to this story. I plan to read lots more. Your dialog is great. The only thing that is a little different from the rest I have read is that you didn't describe the details of any situation very well this time. If this is just meant to be a piece for conversation, great job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
A nice writing Barbra. Really nice. Great ideas, wide vocabulary usage, many characters and interesting story line. Keep it up ;)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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A nice writing Barbra. Really nice. Great ideas, wide vocabulary usage, many characters and interesting story line. Keep it up ;)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Hollyhock
Another very readable chapter. Troy is proving his worth by oraganising a safety cordon around Anna. I am waiting to find out why after being so frightened, to the point of needing to know that someone will bring up her son in the event of her death, does she query the necessity of these precautions.
Despite the tenseness of the situation there is still time for humour and generalities and this is very true to life, it is how people cope.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Another very readable chapter. Troy is proving his worth by oraganising a safety cordon around Anna. I am waiting to find out why after being so frightened, to the point of needing to know that someone will bring up her son in the event of her death, does she query the necessity of these precautions.
Despite the tenseness of the situation there is still time for humour and generalities and this is very true to life, it is how people cope.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
Poor Anna. To live in constant fear like that must be awful at the least. Your dialogue is very believable and the story flows well. As usual, I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Poor Anna. To live in constant fear like that must be awful at the least. Your dialogue is very believable and the story flows well. As usual, I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from amada
I like your direct phrases, this one, for example ""A man who accidently runs into a mother and child doesn't run away." For sure Troy is a very assertive and caring guy. I like him.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I like your direct phrases, this one, for example ""A man who accidently runs into a mother and child doesn't run away." For sure Troy is a very assertive and caring guy. I like him.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Wellwritten chapter; no spags.
Poor Anna must be about worn to a frazzle by now. I sure hope that license plate number leads somewhere.
Roberta
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Wellwritten chapter; no spags.
Poor Anna must be about worn to a frazzle by now. I sure hope that license plate number leads somewhere.
Roberta
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rchitwood
Your story as always is very good and I hope Anna gets free of Bobby. Your story has good dialogue and characters very creative writing and believable. Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Your story as always is very good and I hope Anna gets free of Bobby. Your story has good dialogue and characters very creative writing and believable. Blessings Rita
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great chapter that kept me reading and wanting more when I got to the end of end. Is it Bobby's mom that is causing all of the problems?
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Great chapter that kept me reading and wanting more when I got to the end of end. Is it Bobby's mom that is causing all of the problems?
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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She's in jail too. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Lydia11
Dialogue is great but it would be nice to get some environmental details about the setting. In this sentence: He left because he was set up. It would be nice to know how..or at least that she should show interest in it. Also when she called the couch "a davenport". The only people that refer to it as such are in their 70's and eighties (from my experience). It's either a couch, loveseat, or sofa and calling it otherwise gets snickers from the younger set. Just my 2 cents.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Dialogue is great but it would be nice to get some environmental details about the setting. In this sentence: He left because he was set up. It would be nice to know how..or at least that she should show interest in it. Also when she called the couch "a davenport". The only people that refer to it as such are in their 70's and eighties (from my experience). It's either a couch, loveseat, or sofa and calling it otherwise gets snickers from the younger set. Just my 2 cents.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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If you had read previous chapters during the trial you would know how Everett was set up. There is not need to rehash it. Well I am getting older, but I am a long way from 70's or 80's and I use davenport. I checked with my teacher friends who are in their 20's and 30's and they all use davenport. I also checkec my Webster's College Dictionary and by definition I have not made a mistake. So it may be a reginal thing. Thank you for stopping by