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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from bkbehera
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The author has vividly narrated the horrified condition of Anna , under the extreme torture condition. The hot ward exchange in between Anna and Bobby has dramatically narrated. The cruelty of Bobby to wards Anna was an extreme case of abuse and violence to wards woman.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
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Barbara,
I'm violently ill after reading your fast paced and very violent chapter. I hope that bastard Bobbie gets shot between the eyes by a sniper. The only way to stop a violent abuser is six feet under. Abusive men make me sick. I know of a case where the woman was the abusive one. This chapter didn't bode well for Anne. I hope she's rescued before Bobbie does too much damage. In your chapter you used the following:
Narrative: excellent
Sentence Structure: great
Characterization: excellent
Dialogue: very good
Comments: I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers. I hope to catch your next chapter, my friend. You're doing a terrific job writing your book about a woman with courage to stand up to her abuser. Please have a lovely day...Melissa.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Allezw2
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Lady barbara wilkey,

Sadly, you have barely touched the monstrous abuses some of these women have suffered through. As you might recall, one enraged father recently killed his wife, then their two boys and himself, burning their house as well.

Nicely done, presently your theme quite expertly.

Fantasist

For your consideration, or not:

- Bobby threw the broken frame and canvas out the glass sliding door.

A minor quibble. I might think the glass sliding door was probably open when he threw the savaged painting away, through the opening, or past, the glass sliding door.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Allezw2 on 04-Apr-2012
    You're quite welcome.
Comment from Jen Gentry
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Barbara,
Heart pounding race to the end. OMG your detail of the abuse is heart stopping and shows how awful and crude an abusing can be, very realistic
Jenny

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


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    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Allison78
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I found this chapter almost hard to read because it's just so horrific to me. I think this chapter is very well written and emotional. Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


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Comment from despiser
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Bobby has an unusual way of punctuating sentences. Very well written Barbara. I'm not sure why he said 'you're my wife' but everything else meshed together good in a realistic storyline.
Feel bad for his son.

-D

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
    I think Bobby thinks he owns Anna, like property. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cobalt Blue
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A very interesting read. As I am new here I haven't read anymore of this book but I will look for more chapters as you are obviously a writer who tells a story well. Don't worry about strong language. People under stress talk that way. It is natural.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jclark
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This is a very powerful chapter! I can "feel" Anna's pain and I can "see" Bobby's rage and hatred. You painted the perfect picture of domestic abuse from all perspectives.
Judy

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
    Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Tonulak
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Wow!...This was quite an amazing write. You captured the insane brutality of abuse and have drawn Anna's psychopathic husband with frightening realism! I'm very impressed with and I'm sure it was not easy to write. Well deserving of the highest rating--Ted

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
    Thank you for your kind review and support. I am glad you stopped by. I hope to see you again. I know romance novels may not be your thing.
Comment from Bill Schott
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Intense. A lot of abuse taken here. Those kicks and punches take a mighty toll ona fragile body. Hope she survives this.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.