Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "part five, Chapter 20"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Bill Schott
Having read only this chapter of what looks like quite a tome, I see a strong female lead character. I sense that many important decisions are deferred to her and that nothing happens that she is not fully aware of. Yes?
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Having read only this chapter of what looks like quite a tome, I see a strong female lead character. I sense that many important decisions are deferred to her and that nothing happens that she is not fully aware of. Yes?
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Things are going to get really interesting for Anna. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RazberryBullet
I really didn't think the doctor would let Anna leave so quickly. I'm glad he thinks she's on the mend.
Lovely 'picnic' with friends in her room :)
Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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I really didn't think the doctor would let Anna leave so quickly. I'm glad he thinks she's on the mend.
Lovely 'picnic' with friends in her room :)
Well done!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Doctors nowadays, kick people out right away.
Comment from fidud
this is so well written...very professional. I will go to your profile now to find the rest of it. You must be very pleased to have nearly finished a novel. I think the more such books are written about these situations, the more out in the open it makes it and easier for people trapped in such relationships to call for help. Thank you very much for doing this.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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this is so well written...very professional. I will go to your profile now to find the rest of it. You must be very pleased to have nearly finished a novel. I think the more such books are written about these situations, the more out in the open it makes it and easier for people trapped in such relationships to call for help. Thank you very much for doing this.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from June-bug
I enjoyed this story, but it left me wanting something
more, although your writing captured my attention very
well. You kept my eyes moving forward on each sentence,
so I was enjoying the read. The effort put fourth on the project overwhelmed me. Great job! Keep writing and tell
your friends about my published kids' book:
Sweetbread and Tattletale by June-bug. It can be purchased
on line at Barnes and Noble, Amazon, and other places. It's
also available on my profile page.
P.S. Do read my poem: Let's love our writing.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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I enjoyed this story, but it left me wanting something
more, although your writing captured my attention very
well. You kept my eyes moving forward on each sentence,
so I was enjoying the read. The effort put fourth on the project overwhelmed me. Great job! Keep writing and tell
your friends about my published kids' book:
Sweetbread and Tattletale by June-bug. It can be purchased
on line at Barnes and Noble, Amazon, and other places. It's
also available on my profile page.
P.S. Do read my poem: Let's love our writing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from whispersofthesoul
Hiya,
This was another great piece of writing, the book is coming along really well, I hate hospital visits you never know what to say and they are also unsure, me personnaly when they are there I want them to go and when they're not I want them there, you captured this in a great unique way-well done. Your dialogue once again is realistic and natural.
Well done, keep it up. xxx
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Hiya,
This was another great piece of writing, the book is coming along really well, I hate hospital visits you never know what to say and they are also unsure, me personnaly when they are there I want them to go and when they're not I want them there, you captured this in a great unique way-well done. Your dialogue once again is realistic and natural.
Well done, keep it up. xxx
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Chapter 20 part five is praiseworthy and magnificently written with wonderful imagery painted by your excellent word structuire through out your latest chapter. I'm glad Anne is awake and Troy's in a tizzy worried about the woman he loves. You're a sensational job composing this chapter. I would recommend chapter 20 part 5 to others to reviewers. Marvelous day to you, my friend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Barbara,
Chapter 20 part five is praiseworthy and magnificently written with wonderful imagery painted by your excellent word structuire through out your latest chapter. I'm glad Anne is awake and Troy's in a tizzy worried about the woman he loves. You're a sensational job composing this chapter. I would recommend chapter 20 part 5 to others to reviewers. Marvelous day to you, my friend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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The reviewer that gave you a four star review had no valad reason why and their review breaks many site rules. Next time don't even thank that reviewer. I never return reviews for those hateful reviewers. It makes me want to give them the one in the middle. I enjoyed your chapter.
Melissa.
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Thank you for the support. Did you read the one who gave me a three??
Comment from dmt1967
I like this piece of writing very well thought out peice of writing very well put together I enjoyed reading it very much thank you
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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I like this piece of writing very well thought out peice of writing very well put together I enjoyed reading it very much thank you
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jjstar
Another good chapter. You've made what could have been a dreary hospital scene light and airy and fun with the picnic. After all of the previous action, it's lovely to sit and read what I think is a bridge chapter.(?) Hospital visits are always kind of awkward.
There's not a lot of scientific evidence that supports repressed memory--glad you didn't delve further into this subject--would have detracted from the story..
and yes, (comma?) ..there's...there are??? brownies...
apple salad---should apple be capitalized?
You did a very good job with the doctor..not to personable, kind of abrupt...he's in , he's out..Nice.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Another good chapter. You've made what could have been a dreary hospital scene light and airy and fun with the picnic. After all of the previous action, it's lovely to sit and read what I think is a bridge chapter.(?) Hospital visits are always kind of awkward.
There's not a lot of scientific evidence that supports repressed memory--glad you didn't delve further into this subject--would have detracted from the story..
and yes, (comma?) ..there's...there are??? brownies...
apple salad---should apple be capitalized?
You did a very good job with the doctor..not to personable, kind of abrupt...he's in , he's out..Nice.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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I didn't use there are, because it's dialogue and most people say there's even though it's wrong. I will correct the others. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
I'd love to see more description in your posts, a way to pull the reader into the story a bit more. Let us see the scene in our heads. One little nit, other than that well done.
Later that morning(,) the doctor stepped in the room
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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I'd love to see more description in your posts, a way to pull the reader into the story a bit more. Let us see the scene in our heads. One little nit, other than that well done.
Later that morning(,) the doctor stepped in the room
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rashi kumar
I need to catch up a lot, after 3 months of no reviewing.
Anna suffered a lot. Very well-written and smoothly told story! The family turns every night into an event, that's a quality.
Pleasure to read and review!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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I need to catch up a lot, after 3 months of no reviewing.
Anna suffered a lot. Very well-written and smoothly told story! The family turns every night into an event, that's a quality.
Pleasure to read and review!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.