The Old Red Rooster Crowed
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Comment from Dave M
Gungalo,
I wouldn't want to sleep alone at night. This is an excellent poem that paints a picture of malevolent sprites in an old, faded house. I enjoyed this Halloween read and especially liked the demons' shadowy nature, not quite seen.
Dave
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Gungalo,
I wouldn't want to sleep alone at night. This is an excellent poem that paints a picture of malevolent sprites in an old, faded house. I enjoyed this Halloween read and especially liked the demons' shadowy nature, not quite seen.
Dave
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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LOL well thanks Dave for a really great review. Sigh.
Comment from mermaids
Your poem conveys well the feeling of being alone at night and how our demons have a tendency to arrive when sleep will not come. An eerie feel comes through your words and I like the mention of the rooster.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Your poem conveys well the feeling of being alone at night and how our demons have a tendency to arrive when sleep will not come. An eerie feel comes through your words and I like the mention of the rooster.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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So very good is your review Mermaids.
Comment from Bina1
So very many tales could fit into this eerie poem. Seems packed full of fright and unrest. So different, you know no boundaries! I'll bet she never slept, with those thoughts in her head.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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So very many tales could fit into this eerie poem. Seems packed full of fright and unrest. So different, you know no boundaries! I'll bet she never slept, with those thoughts in her head.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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You'd be so right too Bina. Kept her up all night they did. LOL what a great review.
Comment from missy98writer
Girl,
Your dark poem is awesomely written with dark imagery.
The art work you used is wicked cool.
In yoir poem excellent meter and rhythm.
You succesfully used allitrration and metaphors.
The lines that stood out for me:
She'd a little song she'd sing,
learned it when she was young;
"Please be gone, the night's too long,
leave me be to rest alone."
She'd been singing it for years,
but still her demons showed up;
Gnashing teeth and scraping claws,
always kept her from resting.
Your saying she's never gotten over being sexually abused and she's drowning in her own misery.
I'd recommend yoir six worthy poem to other reviewers.
Keep on rocking the poetic art, my friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Girl,
Your dark poem is awesomely written with dark imagery.
The art work you used is wicked cool.
In yoir poem excellent meter and rhythm.
You succesfully used allitrration and metaphors.
The lines that stood out for me:
She'd a little song she'd sing,
learned it when she was young;
"Please be gone, the night's too long,
leave me be to rest alone."
She'd been singing it for years,
but still her demons showed up;
Gnashing teeth and scraping claws,
always kept her from resting.
Your saying she's never gotten over being sexually abused and she's drowning in her own misery.
I'd recommend yoir six worthy poem to other reviewers.
Keep on rocking the poetic art, my friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks Melissa for a great review of this one.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Okay Gugalo I got the picture of a very fearful night--
there wasn't even one word that didn't put fright into my mind. (which stirred up bad memories for me)
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Okay Gugalo I got the picture of a very fearful night--
there wasn't even one word that didn't put fright into my mind. (which stirred up bad memories for me)
Gert
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much Gert for a wonderful review.
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Smiles Gungalo for both of your postings.
Gert
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Thanks x2!!!!
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Please take Note I will read your postings when I get chance
Must work on my new book, which is taking a lot of my time.
My time as a member is running out here on Fs
and then I know my postings will disappear.
And I want to go through all all of them to see which ones are the best.
Gert
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Good luck Gert.
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Thank You Gungalo
You have been a great help.
Gert
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You are welcome Gert.
Comment from mtrybak
Wow, was this something I was completely not expecting from you! You had my attention from the start and I'm thinking if she didn't sleep alone, the wallpaper would leave her alone. I like that you use things like 'gain. I guess with more experience. Until then, I'll keep reading and learning from you.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Wow, was this something I was completely not expecting from you! You had my attention from the start and I'm thinking if she didn't sleep alone, the wallpaper would leave her alone. I like that you use things like 'gain. I guess with more experience. Until then, I'll keep reading and learning from you.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much Mtrybak. I'm so glad you liked it really. Your review was awesome.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, pam, you did an excellent job writing this eerie poem about the woman haunted by demons that wouldn't allow her rest, excellent imagery presented here
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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this is very well written, pam, you did an excellent job writing this eerie poem about the woman haunted by demons that wouldn't allow her rest, excellent imagery presented here
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks to you Pam for a great review.
Comment from mystery poet
She sounds as though she's dying of loneliness.
No one could sleep with demons lavishing their
hateful agonies on them. Good idea to sleep down
stairs rather than the bed she had, probably
shared with her man...
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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She sounds as though she's dying of loneliness.
No one could sleep with demons lavishing their
hateful agonies on them. Good idea to sleep down
stairs rather than the bed she had, probably
shared with her man...
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Ooooh I like the way you think girl.
Thanks so very much for an excellent review.
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And thank you for sharing your poetic voice!
Comment from squid152
You posted it today for 32 cents and already it is 5 reviews from All Time Best. Well now 4 with my review. Having over 500 fans help. I got over 60. Still a long way to go for me. I liked the uneasiness of your character feeling she needed to lay by the fire not to be alone.-Gary
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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You posted it today for 32 cents and already it is 5 reviews from All Time Best. Well now 4 with my review. Having over 500 fans help. I got over 60. Still a long way to go for me. I liked the uneasiness of your character feeling she needed to lay by the fire not to be alone.-Gary
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks a lot Gary for a wonderful review of this one.
Comment from steevie
Demons are a heavy duty topic for sure. The experiences that you write about have a chilling affect on the reader. It portrays a gloomy outlook for the person of interest in your poem.
The imagery is described in detail, giving the reader insight into the darkness of your story
steve
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Demons are a heavy duty topic for sure. The experiences that you write about have a chilling affect on the reader. It portrays a gloomy outlook for the person of interest in your poem.
The imagery is described in detail, giving the reader insight into the darkness of your story
steve
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks Steve for a fantastic review of this one.