Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Elephant Ride"Poems written using the pantoum form
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Comment from Belinda
Hi, Tony. I enjoy reading your pantoum and share your concern about the elephant who becomes a tourist attraction in many places. I like the mention of Ganesh,the elephant God, who might be in tears,and I can picture the elephant swaying from side to side.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Hi, Tony. I enjoy reading your pantoum and share your concern about the elephant who becomes a tourist attraction in many places. I like the mention of Ganesh,the elephant God, who might be in tears,and I can picture the elephant swaying from side to side.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Belinda, for your kind and empathetic review of my poem. The traditional training methods used in South-East Asia to 'break' elephants are quite barbaric. However, there is some great work currently being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand, but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there
Comment from kenni
I don't know all the requirements for writing a pantoum, but I notice the words, the ideas, more than I do its confines. I hate to see any animal confined, chains, pens, cages, or exhibited in any way commercial. kenni
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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I don't know all the requirements for writing a pantoum, but I notice the words, the ideas, more than I do its confines. I hate to see any animal confined, chains, pens, cages, or exhibited in any way commercial. kenni
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Kenni. I remember the elephant rides at London Zoo when I was little. There always seemed to be a wistful, far-away look in the elephant's eye. The traditional training methods used in South-East Asia to 'break' elephants are quite barbaric. However, there is some great work currently being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand, but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there
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I've never took an elephant rides, and the only places I've ever seen them up close in the flesh was the circuses and zoos. I felt a pity for them: such large animals restricted to such small confines; it's sad to look at. It's a parallel, I think, of what's, rapidly, becoming a common fate to many of us.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'The Elephant Ride' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. To treat these magnificent creatures in the way is nothing less than a sin. Those who do this, should be treated the same. It was a privilege to review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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'The Elephant Ride' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. To treat these magnificent creatures in the way is nothing less than a sin. Those who do this, should be treated the same. It was a privilege to review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for your empathetic review and for the six-star rating, which I very much appreciate. I remember the elephant rides at London Zoo when I was little. There always seemed to be a wistful, far-away look in the elephant's eye. The traditional training methods used in South-East Asia to 'break' elephants are quite barbaric. However, there is some great work currently being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand, but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there
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tfawcus, you definitely deserved the six star rating. Re-education will hopefully improve this barbaric situation. Your daughter is an excellent photographer.
Kindest wishes, the Duchess
Comment from The Death
Hi,
This is a wonderful poem!
How do you know about Lord Ganesha? I am from India, so I know:).
The refrains are very effective and excellent rhyming makes it fluid.
Presentation is just too good. Great work!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Hi,
This is a wonderful poem!
How do you know about Lord Ganesha? I am from India, so I know:).
The refrains are very effective and excellent rhyming makes it fluid.
Presentation is just too good. Great work!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Hi Anupam! Thank you so much for reviewing my poem and for your generous stars! I visited Thailand last year to see my daughter who was working up there. I also grew up in Singapore and I have some basic understanding of Hinduism and Buddhism from my various travels throughout Asia over the years. I have always found the Lord Ganesha to be one of the most appealing gods in the Hindu pantheon. The remover of obstacles and the patron of letters! I think he might approve of poets!
Comment from fairy77
Wow!Enjoyable piece!I hear of the danger of extinction in parts:(Yes indeed a tourist ride.I liked your vocabulary and welcome you to Fanstory.beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Wow!Enjoyable piece!I hear of the danger of extinction in parts:(Yes indeed a tourist ride.I liked your vocabulary and welcome you to Fanstory.beth fairy77.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your kind review and comments, Beth. Also for your welcome!
Comment from watergirl
Wonderful poem, full of sadness and insights. You look into the elephant's eye and show us, and we see her view more clearly. Clever work, and it reads so well!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Wonderful poem, full of sadness and insights. You look into the elephant's eye and show us, and we see her view more clearly. Clever work, and it reads so well!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review, Watergirl. Much appreciated!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh this is so sad. I would love to ride on an elephant like Mowgli... to be lifted up by his trunk and run through the jungle with him. But no, no riding in baskets now that I know how they are trained. Not that I could. In any case your pantoum is very informative. Giddy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Oh this is so sad. I would love to ride on an elephant like Mowgli... to be lifted up by his trunk and run through the jungle with him. But no, no riding in baskets now that I know how they are trained. Not that I could. In any case your pantoum is very informative. Giddy
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Man thanks for your review, Giddy. There is a wonderful romanticism about Kipling's tales! I also remember the elephant rides at London Zoo when I was little. There always seemed to be a wistful, far-away look in the elephant's eye. The traditional training methods used in South-East Asia to 'break' elephants are quite barbaric. However, there is some great work currently being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand, but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there
Comment from Sueellen11
My friend,, this breaks my heart,,, my heart bleeds for these beautiful animals that suffer at the hands of man,,, did you know elephants,,, cry real tears of pain and sorrow,,, sorry my friend,,, I pray GOD punishes all the perpetrator of such animal abuse, cruelty and slaughter,, great write as I hold back my tears,,blessings,,,sueellen
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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My friend,, this breaks my heart,,, my heart bleeds for these beautiful animals that suffer at the hands of man,,, did you know elephants,,, cry real tears of pain and sorrow,,, sorry my friend,,, I pray GOD punishes all the perpetrator of such animal abuse, cruelty and slaughter,, great write as I hold back my tears,,blessings,,,sueellen
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Sueellen, for wonderfully empathetic review! There is some great work currently being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there.
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Many thanks, Sueellen, for your wonderfully empathetic review! There is some great work currently being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there.
Comment from FrannyG
Another good one Tony expressing some disturbing thoughts on man's disregard for other sentient beings. It has an appropriate sadness running through it. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Another good one Tony expressing some disturbing thoughts on man's disregard for other sentient beings. It has an appropriate sadness running through it. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Franny, for another lovely review! There is some great work being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there.
Comment from Glasstruth
Your Pantoum is wonderfully constructed. Elephants are extremely intelligent and I'm sure they need more the basics of captivity. The great thing about a Pantoum is that the last line is also the first. Great job! Les
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Your Pantoum is wonderfully constructed. Elephants are extremely intelligent and I'm sure they need more the basics of captivity. The great thing about a Pantoum is that the last line is also the first. Great job! Les
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Les, for another supportive review! There is some great work being done in elephant sanctuaries up in Thailand but until the mass of visiting tourists transfer their allegiance to these the almighty tourist dollar will continue to sustain the elephant trekking business. It is a matter of re-education largely. That is one of the reasons my daughter was up there.
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I suppose what's done with elephants is another form of slavery. Re-education is crucial. Great poem!