Comment from Ola Awakan

Excellent

The horror in your poem in well expressed as it concerns a child. I picture the imagery in the poem and it could be scary. Well done!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thanks for the review Ola

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I live the poem. It had to be scary when she heard an adult voice coming from the child's room. But she let her guard down to quickly. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thanks for the great review, cheers

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

Ah yes, the false conclusion and the allusion to continued danger. This poem broaches on what has to be a sitter's worst nightmare. Shades of "When a Stranger Calls" come to mind. Eerie.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

boo...thanks for the review Bill.

Comment from Michaelk

Exceptional

Excellent! It gave me chills. I thought the TV was the end, and that would've been a fine ending. But you went the extra step. Great visuals, lots of story squeezed into just a few words. Great job. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thanks for the generous review Michaelk...I just hate/love when the person looks up and there's someone in the mirror,window... gets me every time, cheers Judester

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

You made good use of rhyming, imagery and language to convey the message of your poem. It had a smooth read and am glad it didn't have any more details of the portending horror! Enjoyable read and good luck in the contest. Faye

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Not enough words to really spook em out, ha ha, thanks for the review, cheers

Comment from roshnishaikh

Excellent

This piece of writing gave me goosbumps. Great job done here. It is a perfect horror story told so illustratively in as less as 100 words. A thing to do really! And the picture put up is scary too after I read the poem, it has got scarier!

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Scary kid. Thanks for the review, cheers

reply by roshnishaikh on 22-Apr-2014

:) Would love to read more of your commendable work.

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

I think you check Judester on poet profile or become a fan. Thanks for the wonderful comments, cheers. Judester

reply by roshnishaikh on 22-Apr-2014

Done! :)