The Discarded
200 word story22 total reviews
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
If I had six stars you most certainly would have received it. I wish you well in the contest I think you have a winner here. It is so sad to think a seventeen year old is no longer wanted labeled a whore and others kidnapped so young. Human trafficking goes on more than we know. My heart aches for these young people. Thank you so much for bringing it forth in your story. Terrie
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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If I had six stars you most certainly would have received it. I wish you well in the contest I think you have a winner here. It is so sad to think a seventeen year old is no longer wanted labeled a whore and others kidnapped so young. Human trafficking goes on more than we know. My heart aches for these young people. Thank you so much for bringing it forth in your story. Terrie
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Read up on honor killings/ In many, and I mean many, girls are stoned to death by their own families if they are not pure--even when it's not their fault--even when it's rape.
Comment from Debra White
Hi spiritual echo :) thank you for entering the contest. I enjoyed your interpretation of the artwork. It's a really well written and gritty piece of writing that is also current. A hard hitting yet entertaining read. Good luck in the booth, kindest regards, Debra :)
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Hi spiritual echo :) thank you for entering the contest. I enjoyed your interpretation of the artwork. It's a really well written and gritty piece of writing that is also current. A hard hitting yet entertaining read. Good luck in the booth, kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Many thanks.
Comment from Sasha
This is deeply moving and probably very true to many living in such horrific conditions through no fault of their own. This is an excellent entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
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This is deeply moving and probably very true to many living in such horrific conditions through no fault of their own. This is an excellent entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 09-May-2014
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Thank you. Also sad and yes, true for many.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A friend reminded me once that scars mean you survived. And a bleak future is better than no future at all. Not much comfort to Drija or her sisters who have suffered from evil in the guise of righteousness. When does the world say, "Enough!"? Well done, Ingrid. :) nancy
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A friend reminded me once that scars mean you survived. And a bleak future is better than no future at all. Not much comfort to Drija or her sisters who have suffered from evil in the guise of righteousness. When does the world say, "Enough!"? Well done, Ingrid. :) nancy
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from Leineco
Topical and emotionally compelling. Very nice extrapolation.
Your take is very unique, and the writing style is very fluid.
Nice submission - best of luck in the voting :-)
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Topical and emotionally compelling. Very nice extrapolation.
Your take is very unique, and the writing style is very fluid.
Nice submission - best of luck in the voting :-)
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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my most appreciative thanks.
Comment from sibhus
Great piece, yet such a sad subject. Good tight writing, and an inventive twist on he picture. You have said a lot with these few words and created a good story. Good luck with the contest.
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Great piece, yet such a sad subject. Good tight writing, and an inventive twist on he picture. You have said a lot with these few words and created a good story. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2014
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Thanks so much.
Comment from judiverse
This is really powerful. To think that someone's life is not even worth food, and that at age 17 she is already too old to have value to the kidnappers. This really is a reminder that in truth there are many young girls who are kidnapped and sold into slavery. What will happen to those Nigerian school girls? Will this be their fate? You created a compelling character and story within your word limit. Excellent work. judi
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This is really powerful. To think that someone's life is not even worth food, and that at age 17 she is already too old to have value to the kidnappers. This really is a reminder that in truth there are many young girls who are kidnapped and sold into slavery. What will happen to those Nigerian school girls? Will this be their fate? You created a compelling character and story within your word limit. Excellent work. judi
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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These 200 Nigerian girls may turn out to be the martyrs that awakened the world. This is happening all the time--it's not new. Thanks for the read.
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You're so welcome. I wonder if it's too late for the girls. They probably could have sold them off by this time. judi
Comment from NicciFaye
This is a good story. Somewhat similar to the one I written but a different persecptive of telling stories. This is a subject near and dear to me. Very sad as to what is going on over there period. Human Trafficking, kidnipping and all these evils are just unspeakable.
Nice write. Many blessings in this contest.
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This is a good story. Somewhat similar to the one I written but a different persecptive of telling stories. This is a subject near and dear to me. Very sad as to what is going on over there period. Human Trafficking, kidnipping and all these evils are just unspeakable.
Nice write. Many blessings in this contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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All because they are women and some men believe they don't deserve the slightest bit of education. Or is that just an excuse for their savagery?
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Neither...its unexplained ignonace! Sad, unmatched, unfathom ignorance. Thank you for sharing this story.
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Neither...its unexplained ignonace! Sad, unmatched, unfathom ignorance. Thank you for sharing this story.
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Neither...its unexplained ignonace! Sad, unmatched, unfathom ignorance. Thank you for sharing this story.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I was wondering where you were. Great little story. My only beef might be the pale skin and green eyes don't shout Nigeria, although I know you mention she's a refugee with a secret ethnicity. So I'll let you off just this once. LOL!
Ingrid, the way you've presented the story and that final heart wrenching line telling us she's only seventeen is delivers quite the punch.
You rock. As usual. And, of course, remove the contest rules and you could make more of this story.
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I was wondering where you were. Great little story. My only beef might be the pale skin and green eyes don't shout Nigeria, although I know you mention she's a refugee with a secret ethnicity. So I'll let you off just this once. LOL!
Ingrid, the way you've presented the story and that final heart wrenching line telling us she's only seventeen is delivers quite the punch.
You rock. As usual. And, of course, remove the contest rules and you could make more of this story.
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Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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The green eyes did not escape me and I was going to have her be a mulatto who had a double whammy in a third world country, being both a girl and a half-breed, but hey, 200 words! And against poetry, no less.
I've been busy, really toughening it out with the book edit, but this week, I'm totally in the zone. Chapter two of the rewrite was up on screen today. I'm way past that, but the first few chapters wee killers trying to get the POV into constant bullyeye position.
Weather's been great--hope you're playing a lot of golf!
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I have to get over to Nancy's site and have a read. I'm back in Guelph now.
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Already? Thought you were there for ten days?
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No. Only five. Business meeting yesterday in Toronto.
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Spiritual Echo.
This is an excellent story that shares the vision of worthlessness of girls in some parts of the world. Your descriptions are so well done and a perfect setting for the image provided. How sad that at 19years of age she'd be thought of as a used up whore. Best of luck in the contest.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
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reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Hi, Spiritual Echo.
This is an excellent story that shares the vision of worthlessness of girls in some parts of the world. Your descriptions are so well done and a perfect setting for the image provided. How sad that at 19years of age she'd be thought of as a used up whore. Best of luck in the contest.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
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Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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there are still so many places in the world where women are chattels and are considered worthless.
In Nigeria, the 'excuse' for this kidnapping by the savages (and some not so savage people in Nigeria, who might be horrified by this action, but still hold true to the philosophy)is the outrage at educating girls.
I suppose they equate that to a dog eating at a family dinner table. so very sad.
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This is an important article and well written! With more awareness, changes can come about. It's appalling how women and young girls are treated in parts of the world.
I remember reading Malala's story, a young girl from Pakistan who wanted one thing, an education. She spoke out and nearly died at the hands of the Taliban.
She now is a young activist sharing the importance of the right for girls and education.
Thanks for writing such a powerful article.
Bye
Rosalyne :)