Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

still dont understand it. tried my hand at itand it will be the last one my hand tries. Still dont understand it. but yours made sense. good job

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Barb. It is a difficult form to understand. I've failed miserably so many times. Hopefully, I got it right this time.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I love this river haiku in this contest, Dean. this is a really good entry in this contest! The requirements in these short form needs something out of the ordinary, and it think this is it, I also like the combination with the artwork, well done, good luck, blessing, Roy.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014

Thank you, Roy. I appreciate your encouragement. We'll see how well it's done when the voting stops and the dust has settled just a few short hours from now.

Thanks again.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I could easily visualize the enchanted scene even without the artwork. Your use of alliteration added to the intensity. Well done and best wishes in the haiku contest with this splendid entry- Joan

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Joan E. I thought about excluding the artwork all together, as is traditional for haiku. But those little fawns were just so adorable, I couldn't help myself, LOL.

Thanks for the very kind review and generous rating.

reply by Joan E. on 26-Jun-2014

I too could not have resisted the urge to add those charming fawns! Smiles- Joan

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

hi Dean, what a wonderful feel to this poem...the wildlife depend on the waters...just as the forest do...I love this poem and the picture is precious...so very well written...luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Linda. I realize it is a bit different for me. But, I do enjoy a good challenge.

Thank you again!

reply by l.raven on 25-Jun-2014

it's a wonderful poem...different is good sometimes...Luff..xxoo

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This is an excellent contest entry. I enjoyed reading. You created a beautiful image with a very few word/syllables. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thank you, Barbara.

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

Hey, Dean. Your are really getting into this form. Perfect haiku. Adheres to all rules. Love the alliteration in the first and second lines. Not always easy to achieve in these short forms without seeming forced. Good luck in contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, DALLAS. I appreciate it. You;re absolutely right, writing haiku is a lot harder than it looks.

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hi Dean,
I enjoyed this playful piece. I also appreciated the consonance of R, F and S, throughout the haiku. I loved the scene you presented, because, living in the woods as we do, this setting exists right outside my door. (Chased a four-point out of my front yard yesterday... damn thing was going for my strawberries! Lol.) Best of luck with your entry, Bill

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, Bill, my Chihuahua and I encounter deer of various age every morning during our walks. Lovely animals.

As for the good luck wishes? it appears as if I'm going to need all of the luck that I can get.

Thanks again.

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Hi Dean! I'm reviewing all of these entries before voting. Yelena's rules for a haiku were wonderful and thus she has invited some excellent entries. You set me free reading this haiku, just as the river and playful yearlings are feeling! Two lovely concrete images invite the reader to contemplate and interpret. Best of luck in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Sue. I'm gonna' need it.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, dean, you did an excellent job writing this haiku that delivers beautiful imagery and reminds me of the movie The Yearling. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Love that old Gregory Peck version, sweet.

Thanks for the review.

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This river haiku is perfectly written and beautifully presented with the image of the twin fawns. Waterways are the inhabitant of Springs new life, all babies of mother nature.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks.