Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "That Grin"The clue is in the title!
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Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your lines fall in with the format
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow free flow
good alliteration in
she's, such
knows, know
charm, crossness
cheers..Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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good luck in the contest
your lines fall in with the format
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow free flow
good alliteration in
she's, such
knows, know
charm, crossness
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you Faye for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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most welcome..SC >.. Faye
Comment from Andrewajgblue
This is a great codary, I wasn't familiar with it until I read your notes, and this seems excellent, well done on a great poem, iyou have chosen a brilliant photo to go with and summed it up totally,
Andrew
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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This is a great codary, I wasn't familiar with it until I read your notes, and this seems excellent, well done on a great poem, iyou have chosen a brilliant photo to go with and summed it up totally,
Andrew
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Aw, thank you Andrew :) I appreciate your lovely feedback, love Debra
Comment from Imogen JH
Everything here is great. The poem fits the prompt criteria, That cheeky wee face certainly gives it character and brings everything to life. Your last line sums it all up perfectly.I like the couplets best of all, they set the scene for me.
You have your hands full Debra. LOL
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Everything here is great. The poem fits the prompt criteria, That cheeky wee face certainly gives it character and brings everything to life. Your last line sums it all up perfectly.I like the couplets best of all, they set the scene for me.
You have your hands full Debra. LOL
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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LOL! I certainly do Imogen, she's a firecracker! Thanks for your great feedback. Love Debs
Comment from Carole Rosa
Debra, She's a doll! But, she does look like she could keep you busy.
"I know she knows she's got me where she wants me."
When these darling little children come into your life, they start learning life lessons immediately. My granddaughter is 35 years old today. When she was young, she said, "I want to live with Grandma, she cuts up my meat."
Thanks for the memories. Carole
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Debra, She's a doll! But, she does look like she could keep you busy.
"I know she knows she's got me where she wants me."
When these darling little children come into your life, they start learning life lessons immediately. My granddaughter is 35 years old today. When she was young, she said, "I want to live with Grandma, she cuts up my meat."
Thanks for the memories. Carole
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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LOL Carole - all 3 of my kids want to live with their Nan - she's a total pushover! Thank you for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra x
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Debra, Right! It's my job to be a grandma and they can do anything they want when they are with me, cuz later they go home!! Ha!
Comment from krys123
Debra, this is an excellent codary If it's the requirements of that their of which is also very moving. Dear imagery and this one is very artistically expressive and touchingly descriptive. The picture itself is worth 1000 words and your poem really complements your picture and that there of the picture complements your poem. Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and made the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Debra, this is an excellent codary If it's the requirements of that their of which is also very moving. Dear imagery and this one is very artistically expressive and touchingly descriptive. The picture itself is worth 1000 words and your poem really complements your picture and that there of the picture complements your poem. Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and made the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you Alex for your great feedback. Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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You are so sincerely welcome Debra.
Alex
Comment from Leineco
And just how did she get you wrapped around that little
tiny finger? Clearly her grin was irresistible - but I suspect that
this was a case of predisposition ;-) :-)
Nice one :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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And just how did she get you wrapped around that little
tiny finger? Clearly her grin was irresistible - but I suspect that
this was a case of predisposition ;-) :-)
Nice one :-)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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LOL! Thanks lorraine for your great feedback :) Debs x
Comment from tfawcus
I haven't heard of a Codary before - another interesting form. They keep coming! Yes, there's a definite hint of mischief in that grin! You can't help loving them though, can you? I think most children with a spark of life in them know how to play that game!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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I haven't heard of a Codary before - another interesting form. They keep coming! Yes, there's a definite hint of mischief in that grin! You can't help loving them though, can you? I think most children with a spark of life in them know how to play that game!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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LOL! All 3 of mine have that spark Tony - can get explosive in our house! Thanks for your feedback :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is lovely and I think you have met all the contest rules beautifully with this wonderful entry. Your daughter is a doll and you describe her grin wonderfully. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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This is lovely and I think you have met all the contest rules beautifully with this wonderful entry. Your daughter is a doll and you describe her grin wonderfully. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes :) I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Donna McNaughton
Great job executing the format of this prompt. I don't know if I'd stop at that grin... She's got more mischief hiding behind those sparkly eyes and that little wrinkle in her nose! You already probably know this, but you're in for big trouble... I bet she'll give you lots of stuff to write about.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Great job executing the format of this prompt. I don't know if I'd stop at that grin... She's got more mischief hiding behind those sparkly eyes and that little wrinkle in her nose! You already probably know this, but you're in for big trouble... I bet she'll give you lots of stuff to write about.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Hi Donna :) Thank you for your lovely feedback - she and my other 2 little monkeys are an endless source of inspiration for me! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Dawny53
As a mother myself I could really relate to this poem. Your daughter is beautiful and you did a fine job describing her antics. I felt like your poem was describing me with my own young daughters! Doesn't need much work except maybe tell us a lttle more next time!
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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As a mother myself I could really relate to this poem. Your daughter is beautiful and you did a fine job describing her antics. I felt like your poem was describing me with my own young daughters! Doesn't need much work except maybe tell us a lttle more next time!
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you Dawny for your lovely feedback - I appreciate it :) Kind regards, Debra