Comment from Lovinia

Exceptional

Hi Dean

Well, you have it spot on .... 'the more frightful the better'. Fabulous presentation. Your wonderfully macabre and descriptive phrasing raises the hairs on my neck and sends shivers down my spine ..... oooh, and the goosebumps of course. I love your perspective .... a 'juicy faery', such an unexpected victim to fall foul of life's blood only to mire in the bloodbath of their own self-delusion.

Good luck in the contest. A top entry. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

Comment from TamzinWhite

Excellent

It's like you're writing about taking heroin or something. Very well written. Great flow. Even though the picture is supposed to be sinister it is still somehow beautiful and the feel of the poem a lesson, so it wasn't horrific to read. Very well done.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Your poem fits the constraint of Horror Poem contest with class and leaves us with a fearful expression of its contents. You say these remarkes with a regard to all your poems of this calibre of horrors as well as kinder, softer poetry. Your showmanship will bring you high marks in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

Comment from amahra

Excellent

Hey Spooky Dean, I read this before but it was doing the contest. I voted but forgot to give a review. I wish you could show me how to put music and animated pictures on my computer.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

The music was enough to scare me! Your rhymes, though, are excellent even though I shiver at the meaning. You should win, you created the right atmosphere by the visuals and music. Faye

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

Comment from Jackarrie

Exceptional

Hi Dean, you have written a very vivid piece, it has great imagery, A unique way to show how a life can end. I believe it is a suitable entry into the Horror contest, I enjoyed reading it,

well done
Good luck in the contest,
Mary

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Well I think you have the winner as usual. loved the concept of suicide.
God rhythm and rhyme.
Good use of enjambment and awesome presentation.
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014

Thanks so much for your complimentary review, emrpoems. I really appreciate it.

As for the contest, I lost 22-18. But, you know what they say, you can't win 'em all. :}

Comment from Twilightspire

Excellent

Wow. Now that is powerful. That last line really did it for me. Goosebumps, my friend.
I love how you word your poetry, like reading an archaic poet. Phenomenal.
I like how you start it with a feeling of an undead stalker and morph it into a horror that is dogged in its need and desire.
A perfect addition to your book and I hope you did well in the contest.
Wonderful work, my friend.
-T.J.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014

Thanks, TJ, I really appreciate you giving me your opinions on it. As for the contest, well...let's just say I had a lot of fun writing the poem, LOL...

reply by Twilightspire on 30-Jul-2014

And that's what really matters, right? :)

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014

Yep, that's the only thing that really matters.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

Oh wow, this is really creepy and gruesome, but so masterful! What a fabulous presentation too - that music is chilling, and the artwork is horrifying! Good luck in the contest with this exceptional poem.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

Comment from evilynne

Exceptional

This is so spooky and wonderfully terrifying. And the spooky sounds are great, as is the picture. I may have nightmares now. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014