Bound firmly.
A young woman finds violence in the woods.23 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
this was cute, and that movie was scary, i dont watch them or eat ice cream, i have enough with stress in my dreams, i dont need horror..
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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this was cute, and that movie was scary, i dont watch them or eat ice cream, i have enough with stress in my dreams, i dont need horror..
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review and stars. God bless!
Comment from Eric1
This is a wonderful entry for this one hundred word dash competition my friend, great take on the Stephen king story IT, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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This is a wonderful entry for this one hundred word dash competition my friend, great take on the Stephen king story IT, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you Eric1 for the excellent stars and review, I always look forward to your feedback.
don't forget to read the other entries and vote.
God bless my friend.
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You are very welcome my friend, and yes, I will be voting
Comment from dennis0530
If this nightmare comes often when eating ice cream at bedtime, an allergy to some ingredients might be the cause.
Maybe just a change of flavor will bring back the enjoyment and a restful sleep.
Another option - try watching a funny cartoon ora love story. It is believed that what you see is ingrained in your subconscious.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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If this nightmare comes often when eating ice cream at bedtime, an allergy to some ingredients might be the cause.
Maybe just a change of flavor will bring back the enjoyment and a restful sleep.
Another option - try watching a funny cartoon ora love story. It is believed that what you see is ingrained in your subconscious.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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LOL! Thank you dennis0530 for the awesome review and excellent stars.
Don't forget to vote for your favorite.
God bless!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Whoooheee! Just the look of the critter in the artwork is enough to melt the ice cream! The dude has issues.
Fun story, and great presentation. Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Hi,
Whoooheee! Just the look of the critter in the artwork is enough to melt the ice cream! The dude has issues.
Fun story, and great presentation. Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you Jax as always for the great review and excellent stars.
Don't forget to vote.
God bless!
Comment from Diny
Reminesent of DAllas - it was all a dream!-
I almost didn't read it because i absolutly hated the picture-
Good luck in the contest
ans as always write on-
Diny
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Reminesent of DAllas - it was all a dream!-
I almost didn't read it because i absolutly hated the picture-
Good luck in the contest
ans as always write on-
Diny
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you Di for another great review and kind stars.
Don't forget to read all the entries and vote.
God bless!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Ah, the old 'only dreaming' escape...
You use it well here, although maybe you shouldn't have hinted at it in the title to create more suspencse.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Ah, the old 'only dreaming' escape...
You use it well here, although maybe you shouldn't have hinted at it in the title to create more suspencse.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you Steve for the awesome advice, I changed the name and agree it was necessary. God Bless!
Don't forget to vote!
Comment from adewpearl
good use of dialogue to convey intense emotion
I always feel let down by "it was just a dream" stories, so the ending was my least favorite part
Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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good use of dialogue to convey intense emotion
I always feel let down by "it was just a dream" stories, so the ending was my least favorite part
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I am Sorry the ending was a bit dreamy, but I literally wrote this piece in about 15 minutes, had to go to work LOL. I always look forward to your feedback and reviews my friend.
don't forget to read the other entries and vote for your favorite. God Bless!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ha-hah! Would you believe me if I told you that I have done similar things like those your protagonist did myself? Probably not, but that still doesn't change the fact that this does happen to many of us from time to time.
Nightmares, I find, are some of the best inspirations for poetry and prose there are. I just wonder if this really happened to you?
Well done, and excellent 100 word entry for the contest. The ending was totally unexpected, just as 100 word flash fiction stories should be written.
Good luck in your contest. :}
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Ha-hah! Would you believe me if I told you that I have done similar things like those your protagonist did myself? Probably not, but that still doesn't change the fact that this does happen to many of us from time to time.
Nightmares, I find, are some of the best inspirations for poetry and prose there are. I just wonder if this really happened to you?
Well done, and excellent 100 word entry for the contest. The ending was totally unexpected, just as 100 word flash fiction stories should be written.
Good luck in your contest. :}
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I absolutely love your feedback and reviews Dean! I can't seem to get enough of them and no, this dream did not happen but I usually receive my inspirations from the other twisted dreams I have.
don't forget to vote and God Bless!
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I won't forget, and you are very welcome, my friend. :}
Comment from Cajungirl
After this short story, I will think twice about ice cream before I go to bed. LOL
Great story and an excellent contest entry. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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After this short story, I will think twice about ice cream before I go to bed. LOL
Great story and an excellent contest entry. Best of luck.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you for another great review and excellent stars Cajungirl. I always look forward to reading your feedback.
Don't forget to vote and God bless!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Yikes! I was relieved too! Who would have thought something as harmless as ice cream at bedtime could bring on such horror??
Best wishes for the contest, mystery writer.
Again ... yikes! :)
Have a wonderful weekend.
Sonali
Firmly against the large pine tree. I found myself nude, bound tightly, legs spread apart.... the opening sentence seems a incomplete ... suggest: ... I was bound tightly to the large pine tree. I found myself nude, legs spread apart.
A haunting laugh echoed (also incomplete) ... suggest: A haunting laugh echoed around me / I heard a haunting laugh
He instantly sped toward me, I closed my eyes. ... suggest: ... He sped towards me (avoid adverbs, adjectives that are not absolutely necessary)
I awoke(no comma needed here) to find a bowl of melted ice cream spilling over my lap. IT, by Stephen King was playing on the movie channel.
I cried out (with) relief and swore I would never eat ice cream before bedtime again.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Yikes! I was relieved too! Who would have thought something as harmless as ice cream at bedtime could bring on such horror??
Best wishes for the contest, mystery writer.
Again ... yikes! :)
Have a wonderful weekend.
Sonali
Firmly against the large pine tree. I found myself nude, bound tightly, legs spread apart.... the opening sentence seems a incomplete ... suggest: ... I was bound tightly to the large pine tree. I found myself nude, legs spread apart.
A haunting laugh echoed (also incomplete) ... suggest: A haunting laugh echoed around me / I heard a haunting laugh
He instantly sped toward me, I closed my eyes. ... suggest: ... He sped towards me (avoid adverbs, adjectives that are not absolutely necessary)
I awoke(no comma needed here) to find a bowl of melted ice cream spilling over my lap. IT, by Stephen King was playing on the movie channel.
I cried out (with) relief and swore I would never eat ice cream before bedtime again.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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You are amazing Reachingforthestars. I absolutely appreciate the excellent review, feedback and stars. I made the corrections and damn the story works wonderfully. This is why I joined fanstory. for the feedback which propels me to better heights. Thank you so much and God Bless!
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My pleasure!