A Book of Love
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Comment from TAB_that's me
ooh-la-la:) great lune written in perfect form and syllable count. great entry for the contest - good luck to you.
teresa
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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ooh-la-la:) great lune written in perfect form and syllable count. great entry for the contest - good luck to you.
teresa
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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ooh-la-la...is right :) Thanks Teresa
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Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a well-presented romantic poem as a 5-3-5 "lune." The form and syllable count are correct according to the contest rules. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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This is a well-presented romantic poem as a 5-3-5 "lune." The form and syllable count are correct according to the contest rules. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Thank you very much Jeanie :)
Comment from Julia.
Dear poet, the poem definitely meets the 5-3-5 syllable requirements. I like that it still sounds haiku like with the first two lines set against and interpreted by the third. However, kisses being like nectar is very cliche. I think the poem would be stronger if you came up with an original and interesting interpretation of a kiss. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Dear poet, the poem definitely meets the 5-3-5 syllable requirements. I like that it still sounds haiku like with the first two lines set against and interpreted by the third. However, kisses being like nectar is very cliche. I think the poem would be stronger if you came up with an original and interesting interpretation of a kiss. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Thank you Julia...will keep that in mind :)