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A Captive Heart Will Flee

ABC Poem

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Comment from nancy_e_davis
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Well whatever it resembles I like it Michael. Especially the way you pick up the last line of the stanza as the first line of the next stanza. Well done. I with you luck in the contest. You went the extra mile.:<) Nancy

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
    Thank you. This is how far behind I am. :)
    Well, actually much farther than this.
    Glad you liked this. I kind of borrowed from Villanelle or something like that. This did really well! mikey
Comment from l.raven
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HI Michael, sad as it is...but your poem is so very true...I think I have been on both sides...love makes ya do the craziest things...then you run and hide...sigh...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
    Sooooo true. I'm pleased to be an old married dude. Nothing to be jealous of anymore. Hahaha!! mikey
Comment from Nosha17
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I guess, some relationships founder because of the possessiveness and jealousies of the other partner. Sad really because they destroy themselves and the other in the process. Vivid imagery of the troubled mind that is jealous and excellent rhyming within an ABC poem. One thing, last verse, blossom. Good luck in the contest., Faye

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
    You are so correct and on the money. Fixed, "Blossom". Well, I fixed it two weeks ago when I read this. I'm SOOOOOO far behind. mikey
Comment from LIJ Red
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Rhymes and rhythm, mind-images in the words and a little repetition for those
fond of triolets and the like...looks like a pretty good poetic shotgun blast to me.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

Comment from justafan
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Now, Mikey you know I know diddle squat about meter, But, I do know a Lil something about jealousy. This is perfect representation of how that feels to the soul. Wonderful hon.

Always,
Missy

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

Comment from robina1978
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Beautiful artwork that complements your poem perfectly. It is indeed a triple ABC poem with a nice layout. I am pretty sure you are not a jealous person. But you write what it is if it strikes you. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Locked in the tomb of jealousy. A great ABC poem from those locked into this jealous nature, the doom and gloom. Like the repeating lines, they work well, and for me I'm afraid I've never learnt what iambic or trochaic metre is so for me it just all flows nicely. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

Comment from nordicgirl
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Mercy me, for a free verse poet, you can sure pen a beautiful formal piece of poetry. You do not bow to rhyme or meyer here. Every word is the rifgt wod and it ows like butter in a saucepan. As good as any of the formal writers on site. This is going to place. I would not even know it was an ABC poem without it being mentioned!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

Comment from tbacha58
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As you slowly walk away my anger wanes.
Beneath my furrowed brow a lone tear falls.
Could it be true that anger's born in pain?
Does truth cut with precision when it calls?
I'd follow and I'd beg but for these walls.

Oh Mickey this paragraph made me feel each word you wrote, the description of that tear, sounded so painful, yet beautiful, i also loved the last 2 lines, especially , - I`d follow and I`d beg but for these walls. Also an amazing picture.
Good luck for the contest, amazing poetry young man. Much love from Montreal. Terry (mum) xooxox

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

Comment from Deborah Marie
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Wonderful contest entry, good luck. Progression, rhythm and flow are wonderful. I especially like the repeating of last line in first and second stanzas... Take care and keep 'em coming. God Bless, Deb

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015