2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "haiku (raindrops on cold)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
23 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A clever haiku and does fit the guidelines for this contest, I think. I am never sure anymore as they all are different and none are really what the Japanese call haiku. This is clever. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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A clever haiku and does fit the guidelines for this contest, I think. I am never sure anymore as they all are different and none are really what the Japanese call haiku. This is clever. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, I really appreciate it.
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Gypsy,
I love this haiku. I love the rain especially when I hear it hitting on something. So soothing. That is how I felt reading your haiku. Thank you so much for allowing me that. Best wishes in the contest.
Blessings,
Darlene
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Gypsy,
I love this haiku. I love the rain especially when I hear it hitting on something. So soothing. That is how I felt reading your haiku. Thank you so much for allowing me that. Best wishes in the contest.
Blessings,
Darlene
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you Darlene, you are very kind. Happy Holidays! Peace be with you.
Comment from a.w.brooks
Gypsy
I can understand about hearts on a windowpane, seems like that is the only hearts I get anymore. Maybe because I am older and I don't just settle. But a good Haiku I like the raindrops breathing on the windowpane. Thanks for the read and happy writing.
A.W.Brooks
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Gypsy
I can understand about hearts on a windowpane, seems like that is the only hearts I get anymore. Maybe because I am older and I don't just settle. But a good Haiku I like the raindrops breathing on the windowpane. Thanks for the read and happy writing.
A.W.Brooks
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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LOL I know what you mean, that is the kind of hearts I get too. Thank you for the kind review AB Brooks. Happy Holidays!
Comment from Dom G Robles
A Haiku: A 13-word poem. This poem speaks of raindrops striking on a window pain. Although the writer feels the knocking of raindrops along the window pane,
it seems it does not matter much to the writer, which to others, remind of painful memories
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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A Haiku: A 13-word poem. This poem speaks of raindrops striking on a window pain. Although the writer feels the knocking of raindrops along the window pane,
it seems it does not matter much to the writer, which to others, remind of painful memories
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Thank you Dom, I really appreciate your review. :) Happy Holidays!
Comment from foxangie123
Great Haiku. The title is perfect for Haiku standards. As an FYI this type of poetry doesn't allow for pictures. It's creators, the Japanese, wanted the three lines only to provide the imagery for the reader. They felt if there was titling other than the first line-which you did right as well as pics the mind would already be thinking and so true indeed. I think it's great and if you take the picture out I will up the stars. Otherwise it isn't really a Haiku-right. Some people allow it but it makes it not as it originators wanted. It will be a five star. You are very talented with this type I want to say too.
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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Great Haiku. The title is perfect for Haiku standards. As an FYI this type of poetry doesn't allow for pictures. It's creators, the Japanese, wanted the three lines only to provide the imagery for the reader. They felt if there was titling other than the first line-which you did right as well as pics the mind would already be thinking and so true indeed. I think it's great and if you take the picture out I will up the stars. Otherwise it isn't really a Haiku-right. Some people allow it but it makes it not as it originators wanted. It will be a five star. You are very talented with this type I want to say too.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Thank you angie, I really appreciate your review. :) Happy Holidays!
Comment from Liberty Justice
Lovely little metaphoric poem portraying heartbeats of the sounding of the raindrops. Presents such vivid picture and sound imagery that brings a coziness and
warmth to be inside out of the rain looking outward at designs it makes. liberty justice
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Lovely little metaphoric poem portraying heartbeats of the sounding of the raindrops. Presents such vivid picture and sound imagery that brings a coziness and
warmth to be inside out of the rain looking outward at designs it makes. liberty justice
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Thank you Liverty Justice, I really appreciate your review. :) Happy Holidays!
Comment from krys123
Gypsy;
- I just wanted to let you know that a true haiku does not use personification. However I think in this particular contest it's okay.
-I just love your outstanding photographs of the rain on the windowpane and on their ground or pavement. They really are appropriate, relative and complementary to your writing. A fantastic choice to set the mood and tone for your haiku.
-your first two lines of your haiku are grammatically interconnected and shown imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
- your third line or what some call a satori dish your writing that aha moment, which is an excitement and a freshness to the haiku and also summarizes the relativity of the concept of the haiku.
- I really liked it very much.
- thank you for sharing and posting and good luck in the contest Gypsy and may the Lord be with you always make your friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Gypsy;
- I just wanted to let you know that a true haiku does not use personification. However I think in this particular contest it's okay.
-I just love your outstanding photographs of the rain on the windowpane and on their ground or pavement. They really are appropriate, relative and complementary to your writing. A fantastic choice to set the mood and tone for your haiku.
-your first two lines of your haiku are grammatically interconnected and shown imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
- your third line or what some call a satori dish your writing that aha moment, which is an excitement and a freshness to the haiku and also summarizes the relativity of the concept of the haiku.
- I really liked it very much.
- thank you for sharing and posting and good luck in the contest Gypsy and may the Lord be with you always make your friend.
Alex
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Thank you Alex, I really appreciate your review. :) Happy Holidays!
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You are very welcome Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good haiku you have penned for the contest. The words you used on this was very good. It told a story in such few words. Great job and good luck in the contest. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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This is a very good haiku you have penned for the contest. The words you used on this was very good. It told a story in such few words. Great job and good luck in the contest. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Thank you Teri, I really appreciate your review. :) Happy Holidays!
Comment from Lesley Collier
A sensitive haiku of raindrops that knock lightly on the window but don't come in with the love of nature in their hearts. Well written with wonderfully descriptive words and true to form!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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A sensitive haiku of raindrops that knock lightly on the window but don't come in with the love of nature in their hearts. Well written with wonderfully descriptive words and true to form!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Thank you Lesley, I really appreciate your review. :) Happy Holidays!
Comment from MelB
Hi Gypsy, the only thing I wasn't sure about is the last line. Did you mean to say breath or breathe? Other than that, a lovely poem. It's fun to watch raindrops move down a window.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Hi Gypsy, the only thing I wasn't sure about is the last line. Did you mean to say breath or breathe? Other than that, a lovely poem. It's fun to watch raindrops move down a window.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Thank you Mel, I really appreciate your review. :) Happy Holidays! I meant breathe, I will go change it now. Thanks!
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You're welcome. I thought you meant that, but wasn't entirely sure. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you!