The Mary Bell story/Cerulean eyes
Suffer little children-Mary the 10 year old Strangler55 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
What a dreadful story. So very disturbing to read. You have written it well and I appreciate the author notes as I hadn't heard of this before. It would be very hard to leave prison and lead a normal life when you have never had one. Well written, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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What a dreadful story. So very disturbing to read. You have written it well and I appreciate the author notes as I hadn't heard of this before. It would be very hard to leave prison and lead a normal life when you have never had one. Well written, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for very kind review x
Comment from Thesis
Meia, what a ghastly subject. I see you did extensive research of this real life act and character. Wow. It's quite disturbing that a little girl could commit such terrible acts against another child. Your words conveyed the horror.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Meia, what a ghastly subject. I see you did extensive research of this real life act and character. Wow. It's quite disturbing that a little girl could commit such terrible acts against another child. Your words conveyed the horror.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for very kind review x
Comment from Donya Quijote
This genre of poetry is definitely you niche. What a awful tale to immortalize in a poem. I guess its not too uncommon as we have here in the land of Orange the tale of Lizzie Borden. Abuse usually brings out the worst in people no matter their age. At least, this child as an adult did not continue her murderous ways. Ordinary people do not forgive nor forget easily.
Your rhyming is very good. You meter is a bit off but call style and soon there will be another kind. Let's call it off meter. :) You recreate the horror of the scenes with good description and without getting bogged down in all the unnecessary details.
I appreciate the lesson in dialect as I am a lover of languages.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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This genre of poetry is definitely you niche. What a awful tale to immortalize in a poem. I guess its not too uncommon as we have here in the land of Orange the tale of Lizzie Borden. Abuse usually brings out the worst in people no matter their age. At least, this child as an adult did not continue her murderous ways. Ordinary people do not forgive nor forget easily.
Your rhyming is very good. You meter is a bit off but call style and soon there will be another kind. Let's call it off meter. :) You recreate the horror of the scenes with good description and without getting bogged down in all the unnecessary details.
I appreciate the lesson in dialect as I am a lover of languages.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for very kind review x
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is scary stuff. It's hard to imagine how and why things like this occur. At least she feels guilt which is a good thing. At least it shows she has a conscience. Very sad for me to even read, but you surely have gotten my attention.
Drew
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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This is scary stuff. It's hard to imagine how and why things like this occur. At least she feels guilt which is a good thing. At least it shows she has a conscience. Very sad for me to even read, but you surely have gotten my attention.
Drew
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for very kind review x
Comment from sunnilicious
This is a sick, twisted freaking poem. And I am not happy that it is a real story. However, I am glad that it is not you confessing in a poem. Why did Mary have to know your mother... I bet your mother's a nice woman too. Wicked people always gravitate towards the sweet and innocent. I ran out of 6's... Still, you wrote and Eexceptional non-fiction poetic work. Peace be with you.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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This is a sick, twisted freaking poem. And I am not happy that it is a real story. However, I am glad that it is not you confessing in a poem. Why did Mary have to know your mother... I bet your mother's a nice woman too. Wicked people always gravitate towards the sweet and innocent. I ran out of 6's... Still, you wrote and Eexceptional non-fiction poetic work. Peace be with you.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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my mother is lovely, she only knew Mary as an acquaintance.thankyou so much for very kind review x
Comment from DonandVicki
It is obvious that you spent a good deal of time and energy composing this poem. I would say that this is one of the most horrific poems that i have read, Poe included.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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It is obvious that you spent a good deal of time and energy composing this poem. I would say that this is one of the most horrific poems that i have read, Poe included.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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what a wonderful review thank you so much xxmeai xx
Comment from Dean Kuch
What a bizarre story, Meia.
Normally I don't feel any sort of empathy nor sympathy for someone who could commit such unspeakably heinous acts upon a child.
But one has to wonder the sort of torture young Mary was being put through to feel she had to resort to such ghoulishly drastic methods in order to garner attention.
Frightening...
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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What a bizarre story, Meia.
Normally I don't feel any sort of empathy nor sympathy for someone who could commit such unspeakably heinous acts upon a child.
But one has to wonder the sort of torture young Mary was being put through to feel she had to resort to such ghoulishly drastic methods in order to garner attention.
Frightening...
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your very kind remarks Dean. This is a tough one to call as I have mentioned in my lengthy amended notes. N.B :Today I got a review which remarked "This is five stars but I avoid your work Meia as I tend to find it creepy and disturbing.." Haha my work is done :)....I pointed out no-one was forcing her to review it but thanks anyway lol. I am currently writing the Story of the Monster of Glamis castle. Sir Walter Scott spent a night there and was unnerved by the experience. Perfect material :) I got another review from Jeff saying I am a better prose writer and my poetry is wasted on such topics as I write about. I tried blocking him but he can still review my work for some reason so I unblocked! I am pleased with your review and hope you are doing well kindest regards, Meia :)
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Just ignore him (Jeff), Meia.
I do.
I'm fine, thanks for asking.
You are very welcome.
Comment from jusylee72
what a great story and so well told in your poem. Questioning the why. Scary and sad that she lived through so much pain that she became a murderer. Amazing that she got back into the world at all. Great job on your historic poem
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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what a great story and so well told in your poem. Questioning the why. Scary and sad that she lived through so much pain that she became a murderer. Amazing that she got back into the world at all. Great job on your historic poem
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind and measured review. The fault seems to lie with the horrific childhood of Mary, but I cannot help but wonder what sort of a mother she REALLY is. Kindest regards Meia x
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Meia,
Such a tragic story this is! Well told via your poem. Excellent rhyming and smooth flow, with vivid imagery created for your reader. My favorite line is "Her wicked Mam had birthed a beast".
What Mary did was horrendous, but, she too was a victim. Who knows how much a mind can take and how it will react.
Thanks for your author notes as well, Meia!
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Hi Meia,
Such a tragic story this is! Well told via your poem. Excellent rhyming and smooth flow, with vivid imagery created for your reader. My favorite line is "Her wicked Mam had birthed a beast".
What Mary did was horrendous, but, she too was a victim. Who knows how much a mind can take and how it will react.
Thanks for your author notes as well, Meia!
Connie
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much for your very kind review Cnonie. I am delighted you 'enjoyed' it, it is a poem for me that creates a mixture of emotions. Most negative and confused. But I also hope to put out a message with poems like this. Children are never born evil, however it is so sad for the families of the murdered children. Again, many thanks, kindest regards, Meia x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
But no-one believed you, until you showed the world again
How cruel can be a child of ten.
"I Murder so that I may come back".....
Those were the word you wrote, and so did you hack
Your initial, M into his skin,
Then, you near-castrated him.
What a sick tormented and cruel child she was -
one can hardly believe a mere child could be
so evil, and yet today we regularly hear of
child killers who not only kill but torture
people for the sheer fun of it - so sick.
Your poem drives home the evil and the suffering
you have unique style of your own which draws
the reader in ... your words with such vivid imagery...
Margaret
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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But no-one believed you, until you showed the world again
How cruel can be a child of ten.
"I Murder so that I may come back".....
Those were the word you wrote, and so did you hack
Your initial, M into his skin,
Then, you near-castrated him.
What a sick tormented and cruel child she was -
one can hardly believe a mere child could be
so evil, and yet today we regularly hear of
child killers who not only kill but torture
people for the sheer fun of it - so sick.
Your poem drives home the evil and the suffering
you have unique style of your own which draws
the reader in ... your words with such vivid imagery...
Margaret
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much for your very kind review Margaret. I am delighted you 'enjoyed' it, it is a poem for me that creates a mixture of emotions. Most negative and confused. But I also hope to put out a message with poems like this. Children are never born evil, however it is so sad for the families of the murdered children. Again, many thanks, kindest regards, Meia x