Echoes of Artistry
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Speaking of Auden and Icarus"NaPoWriMo 2017
22 total reviews
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Thank you Kim for sharing your lovely, thoughtful piece and the other two that are equally provoking. We all have a bit of the Ostrich in us don't we. That feeling of helplessness turned to numb turned to just turn away? Much to ponder this morning and you have set me on that path. Thank you. BTW Love the Villanelle form and will have to try one of those too before we come to the end of the thirty.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you Kim for sharing your lovely, thoughtful piece and the other two that are equally provoking. We all have a bit of the Ostrich in us don't we. That feeling of helplessness turned to numb turned to just turn away? Much to ponder this morning and you have set me on that path. Thank you. BTW Love the Villanelle form and will have to try one of those too before we come to the end of the thirty.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Wendy,
I love Villanelles. Have you ever been to www.shadowpoetry.com? Check that out and look under poetry types. There are tons of styles to try. I really enjoy exploring different styles. I think that it has become a little bit of self preservation to fend for ourselves these days. However, in this day and age people aren't even talking face to face anymore. Most just hid behind their screens, whether they are computers, tablets, or most likely, their smart phones.
When I've written something that makes people ponder that makes me happy. Thank you for the excellent review.
Kim
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Great job on this Villanelle poem and extensive author notes, Kim! "Is it so common place, I've tuned it out at all?" .. love this line.
Technology has taken over. I often wonder what society will be like twenty of fifty years from now. Will all social skills be gone. As technology advances, people are spending more and more time by themselves and not interacting face-to-face. "DE-sensitivity" ... yes, we are all becoming desensitized to all the horrible things that are going on in the world. I also think that there will always be wars. We just don't seem to learn from past mistakes.
Great job on this, Kim!
Connie
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Great job on this Villanelle poem and extensive author notes, Kim! "Is it so common place, I've tuned it out at all?" .. love this line.
Technology has taken over. I often wonder what society will be like twenty of fifty years from now. Will all social skills be gone. As technology advances, people are spending more and more time by themselves and not interacting face-to-face. "DE-sensitivity" ... yes, we are all becoming desensitized to all the horrible things that are going on in the world. I also think that there will always be wars. We just don't seem to learn from past mistakes.
Great job on this, Kim!
Connie
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Connie,
You are absolutely correct. I'm glad that you related so well to this piece. Auden had never been more than a cursory acquaintance that I knew from afar. In reading him today, he became like a friend, more of a kindred spirit the more I read. Your appreciation of this selection is the icing on the cake. :)
Kim
Comment from honeytree
Very interesting to read
in every way times
have changed over the many years
cruelty and killing exist we
loose our loved ones not knowing why
life and death still prevail life can be tough.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Very interesting to read
in every way times
have changed over the many years
cruelty and killing exist we
loose our loved ones not knowing why
life and death still prevail life can be tough.
Honeytree
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Annie,
Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate your comments and this exceptional review.
Kim
Comment from rjuselius
wow, this is an outstanding piece of poetry with an interesting philosophical sentiment and a solid social commentary dear kim! i thorouhgly enjoyed you poem.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
virtual sixer..
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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wow, this is an outstanding piece of poetry with an interesting philosophical sentiment and a solid social commentary dear kim! i thorouhgly enjoyed you poem.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
virtual sixer..
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Rebekka,
I'll take a virtual six any day of the week. Thank you for the wonderful comments :)
Kim
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Villanelle. Today, technology overtake us even more with every device we use have to be handled with care and work with batteries or elecyricity. It took over our social life completely.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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A very well-written Villanelle. Today, technology overtake us even more with every device we use have to be handled with care and work with batteries or elecyricity. It took over our social life completely.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Sandra,
No one really talks to each other any more. Their heads are mostly buried in their electronics. Thanks for the great comments.
Kim
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This very good.
Well-written.
It has great rhyme and rhythm.
I especially like the repeating question, 'Oblivious am I?'
Great artwork!- I love the image.- Very beautiful.- Very talented!
Good job on the author's notes.- Very professional!
Very helpful information.
Very detailed.
Thank you for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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This very good.
Well-written.
It has great rhyme and rhythm.
I especially like the repeating question, 'Oblivious am I?'
Great artwork!- I love the image.- Very beautiful.- Very talented!
Good job on the author's notes.- Very professional!
Very helpful information.
Very detailed.
Thank you for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Nicole,
I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. The connection between the artwork and the poetry was just to rich to pass up. Thank you for the wonderful comments.
Kim
Comment from damommy
These days, it seems most people have their face stuck in something electronic, and hardly know what's going on around them. Also, I think we see so much carnage on TV and in movies, that we HAVE become de-sensitized.
A good villanelle. Outstanding.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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These days, it seems most people have their face stuck in something electronic, and hardly know what's going on around them. Also, I think we see so much carnage on TV and in movies, that we HAVE become de-sensitized.
A good villanelle. Outstanding.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Yvonne:
Thank you for the great comments. I appreciate your thoughts and the time you've taken to review. :)
Kim
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Kim. First let me say that you are a talented poet who pursues your craft with both feet. Your Villanelle, the presentation, and extensive notes leave nothing out. It seems the way of things for people to be oblivious to others which may be due to self preservation or self absorption. It seems that only in times of extreme crisis do humans pull together to accomplish a singular goal. Otherwise we're all caught up with fighting with each other. I doubt that will ever change. I wonder, too, if any of us questions our interest in others or lack of it. Your fine post certainly prompts this reader to ponder these things. Hugs, Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Kim. First let me say that you are a talented poet who pursues your craft with both feet. Your Villanelle, the presentation, and extensive notes leave nothing out. It seems the way of things for people to be oblivious to others which may be due to self preservation or self absorption. It seems that only in times of extreme crisis do humans pull together to accomplish a singular goal. Otherwise we're all caught up with fighting with each other. I doubt that will ever change. I wonder, too, if any of us questions our interest in others or lack of it. Your fine post certainly prompts this reader to ponder these things. Hugs, Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Marilyn,
This is the best kind of review. I love to hear the thoughts that my poetry evokes from the reader. Your kind words are appreciated and I'm honored by the compliments.
*hugs*
Kim
Comment from Irish Rain
I absolutely love the Villanelle form. It just sounds so soothing when read, of course, it's the repetition. I love the quote by Auden. I think we have all become 'de-sensitized'...a sad shame. This is quite lovely, blessings...
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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I absolutely love the Villanelle form. It just sounds so soothing when read, of course, it's the repetition. I love the quote by Auden. I think we have all become 'de-sensitized'...a sad shame. This is quite lovely, blessings...
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Irish:
I really loved that quote, too. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I'm happy that you enjoyed this selection.
Kim
Comment from tfawcus
One of the joys of reviewing here is being reintroduced to famous poems of the past. What a wonderful villanelle that is by W H Auden - and it just goes to show, as yours does too, that rules are there to be bent!
I very much like the cadence of "Oblivious am I? Could I the ploughman be?" and it works beautifully as a repeating line. My only quibble is that the meaning is rather deeply embedded in the accompanying picture and your author notes. Without either of these, with the poem standing alone in its own right, I wonder what sense would be made of it.
The painting is a powerful visual representation of the single-mindedness, one might almost say the narrow-mindedness of the ploughman who is so closely focused on his task that he does not see the wonders going on around him, the mighty ship and seascape.
This sense of just getting on with what is important in one's own life instead of worrying about the disasters besetting the outside world is captured with precision in your poem.
I was very much struck with the emphasis of the internal rhyme coupled with the alliteration of 'd's in your final stanza:
"I fear tears cried as I've denied society
allows this dire downfall, ..."
A fine poem indeed.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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One of the joys of reviewing here is being reintroduced to famous poems of the past. What a wonderful villanelle that is by W H Auden - and it just goes to show, as yours does too, that rules are there to be bent!
I very much like the cadence of "Oblivious am I? Could I the ploughman be?" and it works beautifully as a repeating line. My only quibble is that the meaning is rather deeply embedded in the accompanying picture and your author notes. Without either of these, with the poem standing alone in its own right, I wonder what sense would be made of it.
The painting is a powerful visual representation of the single-mindedness, one might almost say the narrow-mindedness of the ploughman who is so closely focused on his task that he does not see the wonders going on around him, the mighty ship and seascape.
This sense of just getting on with what is important in one's own life instead of worrying about the disasters besetting the outside world is captured with precision in your poem.
I was very much struck with the emphasis of the internal rhyme coupled with the alliteration of 'd's in your final stanza:
"I fear tears cried as I've denied society
allows this dire downfall, ..."
A fine poem indeed.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Tony,
Any time I've written a poem that evokes such a lengthy response from you it makes me very happy. I value your opinion and estimation of my writing and you have made me smile today. Thank you so much for all of the fine comments.
Kim