Of Memory's Touch and Forget-Me-Nots
A Contest Entry written in the form of a Sestina35 total reviews
Comment from Nika2016
This is beautiful and sad. Perhaps.. they have already shifted to another time dimension and only peek back to say good-bye...
A nicer view of dementia...
Maybe the confusion is standing in both worlds at once.
A lovely poem.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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This is beautiful and sad. Perhaps.. they have already shifted to another time dimension and only peek back to say good-bye...
A nicer view of dementia...
Maybe the confusion is standing in both worlds at once.
A lovely poem.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Nika,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review. My mother suffered from dementia, but her memories of the past were always so vivid...
I am pleased that you enjoyed my offering...
Comment from Beck Fenton
This is truly a beautiful piece to read and feel. Love never dies, although the mind can try to forget, there is still something down deep in the soul that will resonate if only for a moment. I loved your poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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This is truly a beautiful piece to read and feel. Love never dies, although the mind can try to forget, there is still something down deep in the soul that will resonate if only for a moment. I loved your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Beck,
Thank you so much for your excellent rating and review.
I so appreciate your thoughtful comments...
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, this is a lavish write in its beautiful sensitivity and fluid free verse. I am relieved and delighted with its conclusion, a happy ending. Thank you. This poem touched me emotionally, because of the devastating condition it describes. It is a beautiful love story and fully complies with the prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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In my opinion, this is a lavish write in its beautiful sensitivity and fluid free verse. I am relieved and delighted with its conclusion, a happy ending. Thank you. This poem touched me emotionally, because of the devastating condition it describes. It is a beautiful love story and fully complies with the prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello evesayshi!
I am truly honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful/complimentary review. Sestinas are not everyone's favorite, but I find them challenging and rewarding. For me, it was the perfect poetic format to tell my story... Thank you again!
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You are very welcome indeed - a truly beautiful piece. I must admit, I was unaware of the form, only the words and presentation...Eve
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My goal is to write a short one! :)
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I know you will accomplish it easily, especially with your special gift...Eve
Comment from Katya
Oh my! This is really, really touching. I almost cried. Love lasts a lifetime sometimes--and it is just as strong at the end. For her too--she is giving him everything she has. I really enjoyed this picture of a loving couple who have run the whole course.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Oh my! This is really, really touching. I almost cried. Love lasts a lifetime sometimes--and it is just as strong at the end. For her too--she is giving him everything she has. I really enjoyed this picture of a loving couple who have run the whole course.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Kathleen,
So honored by your review and pleased that you enjoyed!
Thank you!
Comment from emereaux
Your work touched my heart. Your beautiful words describe exactly what my dear mother and father are going through right now. You captured the absolute essence of the experience of disappearing into Azlheimer's, with moments of what can only be called divine grace as an inaccessible memory comes bubbling to the top, before it disappears again.
To have written so profoundly about this, you must know first hand. I wish you well, and I loved your poem!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Your work touched my heart. Your beautiful words describe exactly what my dear mother and father are going through right now. You captured the absolute essence of the experience of disappearing into Azlheimer's, with moments of what can only be called divine grace as an inaccessible memory comes bubbling to the top, before it disappears again.
To have written so profoundly about this, you must know first hand. I wish you well, and I loved your poem!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello emereaux,
Thank you ever so much for your exceptional rating and review. I drew upon some of what my parents endured before they passed away, but they both physically hurt so much, that there was times of anger as well...Mostly I remember how my mother would share her dreams and speak of the people waiting for her in the shadows... Thank you again!
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Comment from Gloria ....
Fantastic love poem, author. And a sestina too! Amazing romp through the seasons of love and the bouquet of love that stood the test of time and will not be forgotten.
So lovely and a top-notch poem.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Fantastic love poem, author. And a sestina too! Amazing romp through the seasons of love and the bouquet of love that stood the test of time and will not be forgotten.
So lovely and a top-notch poem.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Gloria,
Sestinas are not everyone's favorites, but I was in the mood to tell the story - based a bit on my parents - by attempting one.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
Comment from angel123
Your love poem is very meaningful and touching. It flows well with an important message about health and fleeting memory. Your love poem defines how we should love one another; family, friends, humanity. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Your love poem is very meaningful and touching. It flows well with an important message about health and fleeting memory. Your love poem defines how we should love one another; family, friends, humanity. Best wishes!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello angel123,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from estory
I think you did a great job with this; it really reads like prose poetry, very much in the vein of Jack Anderson, in poems like The Mysterious Sound or My Adventures As A Mountebank In South America. There is a strong dream like effect here, as you keep circling through those forget me nots, and time seems to stand still. you keep reaching out in hope, and it goes nowhere. I really thought the style and format very interesting and innovative, very contemporary and here and now, experimental. So for imagination, as well as execution, i'm giving this a six estory
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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I think you did a great job with this; it really reads like prose poetry, very much in the vein of Jack Anderson, in poems like The Mysterious Sound or My Adventures As A Mountebank In South America. There is a strong dream like effect here, as you keep circling through those forget me nots, and time seems to stand still. you keep reaching out in hope, and it goes nowhere. I really thought the style and format very interesting and innovative, very contemporary and here and now, experimental. So for imagination, as well as execution, i'm giving this a six estory
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello story!
What a wonderful review!
Not too many folks enjoy/appreciate the sestina form, but I find it challenging and rewarding.
Thank you for your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
Comment from Zue65
I would never be able to write a Sestina because of the elaborate rules that I have to follow. So, I commend you for writing such an excellent poem in this poetic form as you followed strictly the requirements for writing such. Very well done.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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I would never be able to write a Sestina because of the elaborate rules that I have to follow. So, I commend you for writing such an excellent poem in this poetic form as you followed strictly the requirements for writing such. Very well done.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Sestinas are challenging, but they are also very rewarding to pen.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from SeanFox16
I had tears in my eyes reading this beautiful, amazing poem. I think we would all love to revisit the strawberry fields of our youth and relive those magical moments we care not to forget. And when our time with the people who helped create those magic moments is limited, our desire to turn back the clock is even more intense. The ending of this poem was sublime and when she said "I will" it almost felt like being present in that moment in time ye shared all that time ago. Well done on an incredible poem.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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I had tears in my eyes reading this beautiful, amazing poem. I think we would all love to revisit the strawberry fields of our youth and relive those magical moments we care not to forget. And when our time with the people who helped create those magic moments is limited, our desire to turn back the clock is even more intense. The ending of this poem was sublime and when she said "I will" it almost felt like being present in that moment in time ye shared all that time ago. Well done on an incredible poem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Sean,
So very pleased you stopped by and enjoyed my offering.
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!