Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

Very nicely done and funny too. I hope you win, that we would be great but even if you don't it's a lot of fun trying. That in itself is a reward. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018

Thanks, BN

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Comment from fm wright

Excellent

I counted 8 syllables in the first line and 6 syllables in the fourth line. Either your count is off or mine is. Otherwise it's a wonderful entry for the Alliterisen contest. Best of wishes for the contest.


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 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018

Thanks, FM. You were right on the first line, and I've made a note that I am using 'ev-er-y-one' as a four-syllable word in the fourth line.

reply by fm wright on 18-Sep-2018

You're right about the everyone being four. My fault as I pronounce it with only 3 syllables.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

I congratulate you on your poem.
A tricky challenge, this one.
Clever line breaks.
Your syntax holds together.

Best of luck at the polls.

Peace, Lee

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 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018

Thanks, Lee