Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

Oh this is most clever, Craig, the burrowed time so true, but I hear ya, those holes can be dang dangerous and especially if you're running around playing volleyball or something.

Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee with this little wabbit.

Gloria

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018

I'm trying to think of the last time I played volleyball out in the paddocks... oh, that's right, I remember :)

Many thanks for the great comments and rating, Gloria.

Craig

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Ha ha ha - funny pun. I enjoyed the whimsy and wit here in ironic contrast with the message. Well done. Well presented. Phonetically texture with all the B and P sounds (cousin sounds). Loved reading it aloud! That's not an easy achievement in a 5-7-5. Bravo.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

Thanks, RD, most grateful for the very kind comments :) Cheers, Craig

reply by rama devi on 04-Nov-2018

:-)))))

Comment from Linda Kay

Excellent

Quite witty pun there with the "burrowed time." Unfortunately, the rabbits on your property have an easier time than they should due to human interference. On our small property, it is voles that are digging tunnels everywhere so the ground may collapse underneath you! Good poem with correct syllable count for the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

Thanks so much, Linda. Sorry to hear you have similar problems. Cheers, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I do like your "burrowed time." We had an explosion of rabbits here, too. But no foxes or coyotes were killed. I'm guessing it's been a good year for the nesting eagles. Watch your step - sounds dangerous walking!

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

Thanks very much, Helen. I'm always pretty careful wandering around, holes or no holes. Don't want to step on a snake :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is the cleverest poem I've read in a long time. I love clever writing. It reveals a bright mind behind the words. This is an excellent contest submission.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the very generous comments, they are much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

Now this is a precious write. That final line was brilliant, CD. Short and succinct. That image was also so very well chosen. Those 17 syllables pack a punch. The notes were well written also :0) Do you feed said rabbits? Maybe you can get them to cut the grass, Lol. Just teasing. Excellent entry. I wish you all the best of luck with this very strong contender.
Janelle

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

LOL I love watching the rabbits play. I'm watching one mow my front grass as I type. I don't feed them, and I don't appreciate them destroying my property. However, I won't do anything to hard them. I just wish humans would leave alone. We keep creating messes; given time, and lack of interference from us, nature can correct them. Thanks heaps for the great review, Janelle. Craig

reply by Lady Jane on 04-Nov-2018

Yes, sadly, we humans create more mess than we clean up :( You're very welcome. Sip some cocoa and enjoy a grilled cheese ...
Me

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks just a thought about your concern about wildlife, you think, rabbit population hike, you would do something for a check in their population; well said, well done. Write More Inspire More -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

Thanks for the kind review, however, to clarify one thing: no, I would not "do something" for a check in their population. I would advocate exactly the opposite... "do nothing", which includes not killing the predators which keep their numbers in check. Humans should just butt out. We have created a mess. Left alone, nature will do what we can't, and sort it out :)

Comment from Karol Bond

Excellent

Nicely written. Your words flowed smoothly throughout. Reminds me of the farm I grew up on. The photo is perfect for the piece. Good luck in the contest. ;)

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 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

Thanks so much... appreciated. Craig

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You are right, Craig. Man is great at fixing the symptom rather than the underlying cause. Your 575 is correct in syllable count. Good play on the word 'burrowed.'

We have prairie dogs that do the same thing--make burrows in fields etc. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

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 Comment Written 04-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018

Thanks very much, Jan. We just need to learn to butt out. Left alone, nature can fix our stuff-ups, given time.