Comment from TheStoryMan

Excellent

What a tragic tale even as the young couple finally start dating they lose the man who brought them together. Poor Patches to lose his master so tragically.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Thank you Storyman. Thanks for the review.

Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams

Excellent

You really deserve 6 stars, so here are some of my own...****** + SOMO

This is such a beautiful tear-jerking story. I love every bit of it, Lordinajamjar.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Ha ha Sandra. I shall cherish your six stars. I am so glad you enjoyed this.

reply by Sandra Elizabeth Williams on 27-Feb-2019

You're welcome :-)

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is a very lovely short story and pulls at our heartstrings in a sad, but good way. I love it that you incorporated a Lilac bush into this story. I cannot wait for my two to bloom. A wonderful read.

Melissa

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Thanks Sugar. I hope Lilac bushes bloom very soon.

Comment from light

Excellent

This is. Indeed a beautiful story. I liove the smell of Lilac. In fact, I just sprayed my room with a Lilac spray. You captured the heart of the old man. Perfectly. Well done.
Elaine

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

I smell the Lilac now. :) Thank you Elaine.

Comment from Coco Jane

Exceptional

What a tender, touching story--like an old folk tale.
I notice that you call Patches "it" in the first paragraph, but "he" later on. Is this on purpose?
What a neat gesture for Jack to get Peter and Paula together by purchasing show tickets for them.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Thans Jane. So glad you liked it. I thought about your question. Almost changed it to he. I left as was because it made sense to me that the dog be called it until he joined Peter at the park bench.

I enjoyed your review. Really made me think. All the best.

Comment from KatyM

Excellent

Very sweet story. I found one little typo: "These are tickets I bought to a show called Once, but I can't go. So, I want you two to go see it( there is an f by itself) f. It is playing tonight, and I would like you to both meet me back to me tomorrow and tell me all about it. Is that OK with you two?"

It is sad about the older man passing away. Patches sounds so cute. What does, Kalinka! Kalinka! Mean? I am guessing that it means dance because of the context. What language is it from? Happy Writing, Katy Moffitt

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Thank you Katy Moffitt. I sure made that chane pkus one or two others. I am just trying to answer all the reviews before I get out there and start reviewing some your stuff. Thanks again.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there,

Thank you for sharing this charming story. Your presentation with the lovely lilac gave the reader a sense of where you were going and you did a wonderful job of allowing us to feel the grief experienced by the characters.

Wonderful job of giving us a sense of the dog's barking.

I look forward to reading more of your work,

~Mustang Patty~

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Thanks again Mustang. This is the first piece I posted here. I appreciate yout support and kind words.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That was so beautiful, it made my neck prickle. The lilac tree blossomed now he is with Alice again, and the dog could hear his master calling 'Kalinka, kalinka!' The was just a joy to read. Well done, it should have been put into contest. I'm sure you could sell it to a magazine. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Sandra you are so kind. This was the first piece I posted here and I am so grateful that it was well received. Thanks again.

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 27-Feb-2019

You are very welcome. If this is a taste of things to come, I'll fan you and make sure I don't miss any. Welcome to FS, it's our pleasure to have you. :) xx

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

This is a lovely story. My mother loved her lilac bush. I picked up a couple of points. In the beginning:

Don't be fretting there boy I'm just catching my breath. I'll be fine don't you be fretting now.
I think there should be a period after 'boy' and after 'fine.

And the phrase: 'for the treat he brought to the talented little dog each day' I might have written it as 'for the treat he brought each day to the talented little dog'.

Thanks for sharing this with us.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019

Thank you so much Judy. I did rework on those sentences you pointed.. plus a few others. ;) Thanks again.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This is so beautiful. It reminded me of the Scottish story Greyfriars Bobby about a Scotty Dog who refused to leave his master when he died...stayed by the tombstone...
The lilac blooming ...so beautiful...young love blossoming
God bless

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019

Thanks Jenny. I am glad you enjoyed this story. I tried to depict love on several different levels in this piece. All the best.