Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Very interesting chapter Tony with lots of information and more intrigue to come. Really enjoying this story, always well written, great dialogue, with a little wit thrown in.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019

Thanks, Valda, for your review of 'Babylon-on-Thames', and for your comments. Much appreciated, as always. All the best, Tony

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Now the secret service assignment doesn't seem nearly so bad. I like how you've taken us into a more convoluted plot that ever imagined before. I hope Helen and Kayla are innocent!

Punctuation nit:
Actually, it isn't. (missing an open quote before the Actually)

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019

Thanks, Helen, for your review of 'Babylon-on-Thames', and for your comments. Thanks, too, for picking up the typo. Much appreciated, as always. All the best, Tony

Comment from Miss Sherry

Excellent

Most excellent writing here. Descriptives and images that transport the reader to other places, where more excitement dwells than in our ordinary lives. Very timely subject matter that interests the reader, who does not read history on such things. I shall love following this further!

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019

Thanks, Miss Sherry. Glad you are enjoying the exotic flavour of this. I appreciate your review.

Comment from Gianinas

Exceptional

I liked the chapter very much. I found the subject intriguing and the writing style captivating and easy to follow. I intend to read the other chapters to follow the adventure.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019

Thank you so much, Gianinas, for your kind review and award of a sixth star. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I enjoyed your reference to the Tower of Babble. I could see the correlation. I am struggling with Helen and her sister being involved with Jihadists, Oh my this is getting interesting, it was already, but now even more so.


You'll be on your own when you reach Paris but ,if you run into difficulties, you can contact the Embassy direct line." (Comma needs to be closer to but)

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019

Thanks for the review and spag pickup, Barbara. I hope the Culverson girls don?t turn out to be terrorists. You never know these days!

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

The plot is thickening nicely. (I hope I didn't say hat last time.) There is a nice mix of dialogue and description.

I picked up a few small glitches. Speech marks are needed before 'actually' in the following:
Actually, it isn't. I think they load the office coffee machine with crushed acorns.

I though his attempt at humour unnecessarily coarse but decided to let it pass.
'Though' should be 'thought'.

And I might have written: 'What she wouldn't have told you, because she wouldn't have known, is that her father was working for us' rather than 'What she wouldn't have told you is that her father was working for us because she wouldn't have known.'

Write on, my friend. :)

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019

Thank, Judy for your review, spag pickups and suggestion. All much appreciated. Tony.

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Plot thickening, what! This is a real curve in the story. Looking forward to some more. Reviewing from over here to help sankey's funny money. No spags and once again a very good read.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019

Thanks, Sankey. I appreciate the review. Best wishes, Tony.

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Excellent post here, Tony. There is plenty of dialogue and it seems so natural between these characters.

And the James Bond flavor is obvious throughout. I don't know if you intended it that way, but it just is. LOL

Just curious, my friend, is the end game in sight for this book? Reason I ask is my experience has been that publishers do not like manuscripts that are too long in terms of word count and chapter count.

Bood job as usual, my friend. Bob

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019

Thanks, Bob. I appreciate your comments. At this stage I?ve written about 55,000 words. I understand that the average length of a novel is between 60,000 and 80,000 words. Does that sound about right? When editing, I expect to trim a bit and to amalgamate several of the chapters.

reply by Mastery on 20-Mar-2019

I see. I tried that way once and ai was very disappointed with the outcome. I had to juggle things so much it was something i will never do again. fae better to edit and isguard as you go, I found. If you want to publish, that is. :) Bob

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter and a good twist of the past events. The two sisters are now under suspision of being involved with their parents murder in a mass murder.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019

Thanks, Sandra, for your review of 'Babylon-on-Thames', and for your comments. Much appreciated, as always. All the best, Tony

Comment from royowen

Excellent

So his foray into espionage has taken him to being part of MI6, He meets Carruthers, who says he is "John Smith". And is being sent to spu on Kalyla and Helen, who are reputed to be the children 2 MI6 operatives, their parents who had been close to exposing Jihadist Terrorist cells, that's why they were shot. Well done Tony, great episode, Roy
Typo : (")Actually it isn't...

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019

Thanks, Roy, for your review of 'Babylon-on-Thames', and for your comments. Thanks, too, for picking up the typo. Much appreciated, as always. All the best, Tony

reply by royowen on 24-Mar-2019

Well done