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Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, I liked this a lot, and I do know that you've written quite a few tanka over the years. The only thing is that it is normally written in lower case. Good luck with the judges. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Hi Bill, I liked this a lot, and I do know that you've written quite a few tanka over the years. The only thing is that it is normally written in lower case. Good luck with the judges. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Hi, Ulla. If that?s a criteria it?s neither stated nor in the example used for the contest. Of course, the rules for this contest are fairly broad. I normally give my tanka-form poems a different name so I needn?t conform to other?s rules. Pranka is my go to format. I?ve noted that the only ones of these contests I ever win are either by one vote over the usual winners or, when it?s a secret society decision, by mistake. ; )
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Yeah, thats right, you use the Pranka which is so funny. But to answer your question. Yes, like haiku, tanka is written in lower form. The site continuely get this wrong. You know I'm not a poetry writer, but I've learned quite a lote about the Japanese forms. Good luck. :)
Comment from Earl Corp
This would have been a good Faith poetry contest entry too. This poem When Reasons Run Out makes sense and is a spiritual poem. Good luck in the contest.
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This would have been a good Faith poetry contest entry too. This poem When Reasons Run Out makes sense and is a spiritual poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Earl
Comment from susand3022
A nice poem Bill, are you practicing your Tanka's? Ahh... I see this one is for a contest! The other one must have been a practice run? Both are good... good luck in the contest! :)
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A nice poem Bill, are you practicing your Tanka's? Ahh... I see this one is for a contest! The other one must have been a practice run? Both are good... good luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Susan.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed you uplifting and faithful words here Bill, a message for all of us, face a new day with support and we will win through, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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I enjoyed you uplifting and faithful words here Bill, a message for all of us, face a new day with support and we will win through, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from judiverse
Great Tanka, and best of luck in the contest. It reads so smoothly. Use of rhyme with reasons and seasons is excellent. Your Tanka has an uplifting thought, too. When people feel there's no reason to go on, the Lord offers a new season and purpose in life. Well stated. judi
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Great Tanka, and best of luck in the contest. It reads so smoothly. Use of rhyme with reasons and seasons is excellent. Your Tanka has an uplifting thought, too. When people feel there's no reason to go on, the Lord offers a new season and purpose in life. Well stated. judi
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Judi
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, Bill.
-The syllable count is good.
-The use of one continuous
thought is also effective.
-Good opening lines,
followed by a good pivot line.
-The message in your poem
is a very good one and
shows a positive and "greater purpose."
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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-Nice image and
presentation, Bill.
-The syllable count is good.
-The use of one continuous
thought is also effective.
-Good opening lines,
followed by a good pivot line.
-The message in your poem
is a very good one and
shows a positive and "greater purpose."
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Pam
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You are welcome, Bill.
Comment from LisaMay
Have the reasons run out on fleet feet in excitement to greet the new day in the company of the Lord? ...or have they evaporated, and no excuses are left to continue a sham? ... either way, and both are equally valid happenings in your poem, a new season and a greater purpose will always be available when we take it to the Lord.
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Have the reasons run out on fleet feet in excitement to greet the new day in the company of the Lord? ...or have they evaporated, and no excuses are left to continue a sham? ... either way, and both are equally valid happenings in your poem, a new season and a greater purpose will always be available when we take it to the Lord.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, LisaMay
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a simple, natural and nice message for living, and states when reasons run out, just wake and seek the Lord for you find a new season and a greater purpose there; well said, well done. Keep writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks a simple, natural and nice message for living, and states when reasons run out, just wake and seek the Lord for you find a new season and a greater purpose there; well said, well done. Keep writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, ALD
Comment from closetpoetjester
What an inspiring message this is Bill. When you are tired of making excuses and there are simply no more, then it's time to look for a new way. You certainly have nothing to lose by rising to a new challenge and a little faith for God helps those who first help themselves.
How'd I do?
P
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What an inspiring message this is Bill. When you are tired of making excuses and there are simply no more, then it's time to look for a new way. You certainly have nothing to lose by rising to a new challenge and a little faith for God helps those who first help themselves.
How'd I do?
P
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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There ya go. Thanks, P, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Boogienights
This is a wonderful poem, with great advice. When you run out of steam or you have something you are going through, its vreat to have the creator on your side. Best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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This is a wonderful poem, with great advice. When you run out of steam or you have something you are going through, its vreat to have the creator on your side. Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thanks, BN