Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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22 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 3-5-3 passion poem. When we love something or someone we are held captive willingly into the grasp of whatever our passion us about.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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A very well-written 3-5-3 passion poem. When we love something or someone we are held captive willingly into the grasp of whatever our passion us about.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Sandra, thank you.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Lovely image and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-I like how you continue
from the title and
describe the emotion.
-Effective word choices,
and personification at the end.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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-Lovely image and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-I like how you continue
from the title and
describe the emotion.
-Effective word choices,
and personification at the end.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Pam, I do thank you for acknowledging the transition from title to the declaration.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Bichon
You have used excellent wording choices to really describe the impact of love. The words were powerfully and successfully created an image in only a few lines, great job.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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You have used excellent wording choices to really describe the impact of love. The words were powerfully and successfully created an image in only a few lines, great job.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Bichon, Thank you, Have a great week.
Comment from Boogienights
Very well said. This is a great way of describing passion, although love isn't always a component of it. There is a sometimes just a physical attraction. If we are lucky, love enters in. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Very well said. This is a great way of describing passion, although love isn't always a component of it. There is a sometimes just a physical attraction. If we are lucky, love enters in. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Boggienights, we are poets who like to create deep meaning with words. thanks for your validation and good wishes.
Comment from royowen
I think a lot of people will relate to this in one form or another, although these days we might not be sure what form. An excellent entry in this lune poetry contest, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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I think a lot of people will relate to this in one form or another, although these days we might not be sure what form. An excellent entry in this lune poetry contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Roy, your wise words are so true these days, it is a wonder is it not? Have a great Sunday!
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Bless you
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent 3-5-3 poem for the contest
with a very good description of passion
and excellent choice of art work.
There's no getting out of that grasp,
nor would anyone want to.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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You've written an excellent 3-5-3 poem for the contest
with a very good description of passion
and excellent choice of art work.
There's no getting out of that grasp,
nor would anyone want to.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Robert, thank you.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Yes, indeed, that is precisely what passion is! It controls you, consumes you and dictates your decisions! You are willing to make yourself vulnerable and are hopelessly bound in its trance!
A good entry for the contest! Best wishes! :-)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Yes, indeed, that is precisely what passion is! It controls you, consumes you and dictates your decisions! You are willing to make yourself vulnerable and are hopelessly bound in its trance!
A good entry for the contest! Best wishes! :-)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Aaqib, thanks for the review!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Perfect syllabic adherence on this 3-5-3. The art choice is definitely related to the subject. Love is personified with the word 'grasp' and the 'impetuously' part may or may not depend on the individual(s) involved. Good luck in contest!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Perfect syllabic adherence on this 3-5-3. The art choice is definitely related to the subject. Love is personified with the word 'grasp' and the 'impetuously' part may or may not depend on the individual(s) involved. Good luck in contest!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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True statement, thank goodness 😅
Comment from Minglement
Wow, you've penned a lovely little gem of an poem for this entry in the 3-5-3 Passion poem. I love the feeling your words create. I almost feel the artwork detracts from your beautiful poem because the people pictured look anything but passionate. Just an aside. Your poem stands alone :)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Wow, you've penned a lovely little gem of an poem for this entry in the 3-5-3 Passion poem. I love the feeling your words create. I almost feel the artwork detracts from your beautiful poem because the people pictured look anything but passionate. Just an aside. Your poem stands alone :)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you! I struggled with using it may change it!
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You're most welcome. It wasn't a criticism, I'd just like to see something that speaks to the passion in your words ;)
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is a sexy little poem! It's interesting that the middle line, with the most syllables, is a single word. The title, description and picture help to clarify the author's intention behind the poem's words. The man is staring intensely at the woman, and she is staring intensely out, as if she is truly enthralled. They are both red in color, that telltale flush in skin, that comes from passion. You have communicated very well in your poem.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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This is a sexy little poem! It's interesting that the middle line, with the most syllables, is a single word. The title, description and picture help to clarify the author's intention behind the poem's words. The man is staring intensely at the woman, and she is staring intensely out, as if she is truly enthralled. They are both red in color, that telltale flush in skin, that comes from passion. You have communicated very well in your poem.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much!
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You're very welcome.