The Opposition
This poem offers what the Thesaurus does not.24 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
Nice twist on the rules of the competition. I like the way you have done the words. They give me the images of waves coming and crashing down. To have that innocence back where it was all about you and your imagination would be grand.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Nice twist on the rules of the competition. I like the way you have done the words. They give me the images of waves coming and crashing down. To have that innocence back where it was all about you and your imagination would be grand.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This is a very lovely poem about competition. The opposition can get very nasty in how they compete sometimes. Your poem is telling us that to compete is not about the other peson but its about being honest with oneself.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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This is a very lovely poem about competition. The opposition can get very nasty in how they compete sometimes. Your poem is telling us that to compete is not about the other peson but its about being honest with oneself.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Susan Morritt
I read your poem quite a few times, enjoying it more each time. You have managed to paint a picture within your words. "row after row after row", and "on its bow in straggling penciled letters" are two of my favourite lines. Beautiful. Thank you for posting this.
Susan
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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I read your poem quite a few times, enjoying it more each time. You have managed to paint a picture within your words. "row after row after row", and "on its bow in straggling penciled letters" are two of my favourite lines. Beautiful. Thank you for posting this.
Susan
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from estory
I loved it. I like the unfolding structure, how each stanza opens out and unfolds into these marvelous images of creativity, these moments of imagination in the sea of possibility. You have a great metaphor there. "A little girl coloring with crayons; row after row after row/ Of wavering lines" that was nicely done. Nice sense of rhythm and the music of language. This was interesting: "She seems not to see the changing light outside the window, or even if the boat will ever sail" There is the sense of self absorbtion, maybe, and a sense of the fantasy of imagination, the ethereal nature of it in the realm of reality. "What matters is that ocean, that deep, silent ocean." In the end, the experience of life is bigger than us, larger than life. A lot of depth and breadth to those images. estory
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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I loved it. I like the unfolding structure, how each stanza opens out and unfolds into these marvelous images of creativity, these moments of imagination in the sea of possibility. You have a great metaphor there. "A little girl coloring with crayons; row after row after row/ Of wavering lines" that was nicely done. Nice sense of rhythm and the music of language. This was interesting: "She seems not to see the changing light outside the window, or even if the boat will ever sail" There is the sense of self absorbtion, maybe, and a sense of the fantasy of imagination, the ethereal nature of it in the realm of reality. "What matters is that ocean, that deep, silent ocean." In the end, the experience of life is bigger than us, larger than life. A lot of depth and breadth to those images. estory
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for a lovely review.
Comment from Aurora Musings
I loved this. Inspired! I was drawn to the girl sitting by the ocean shore, I was drawn into her silent world, her world of beauty. The last stanza is splendid.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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I loved this. Inspired! I was drawn to the girl sitting by the ocean shore, I was drawn into her silent world, her world of beauty. The last stanza is splendid.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Thanks again. You have made my day.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Yes, that should be the ultimate long term goal of all competition-- that we strive to excel in all areas of our life. If one looks on the bright side, competition can be a healthy teaching tool with the right coach, teacher, or parent.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Yes, that should be the ultimate long term goal of all competition-- that we strive to excel in all areas of our life. If one looks on the bright side, competition can be a healthy teaching tool with the right coach, teacher, or parent.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Opposition
Wonderful entry for the Competition writing prompt contest. The simple beauty of a child's creative genius. She doesn't need to compete to know that she is perfect in every way. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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The Opposition
Wonderful entry for the Competition writing prompt contest. The simple beauty of a child's creative genius. She doesn't need to compete to know that she is perfect in every way. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about competition and the stress that is part of being competitive when we try to be the best we can, but thee are always others that seem to be better han we can dream to be.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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A very well-written poem about competition and the stress that is part of being competitive when we try to be the best we can, but thee are always others that seem to be better han we can dream to be.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
This is beautiful! I love the way you arrange the wordings that give such a wonderful shape to the stanzas. You've written well.
Just one thing: In her soul, Whatever competition. The comma after "soul" should be a full-stop.
My very best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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This is beautiful! I love the way you arrange the wordings that give such a wonderful shape to the stanzas. You've written well.
Just one thing: In her soul, Whatever competition. The comma after "soul" should be a full-stop.
My very best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for your review and for the heads up.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I am a sucker punch for the ocean symphony. I love this stanza:"The ocean
is what matters,
that deep, silent
ocean. It is as though
she is crayoning the colors
of her soul, Whatever competition
is, whatever it may mean, that child,
in that brief moment, was its opposite."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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I am a sucker punch for the ocean symphony. I love this stanza:"The ocean
is what matters,
that deep, silent
ocean. It is as though
she is crayoning the colors
of her soul, Whatever competition
is, whatever it may mean, that child,
in that brief moment, was its opposite."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much.