Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from lyenochka
You chose and gorgeous picture to illustrate your poem and you show us the transition into the season of Fall. I like all your rhyming couplets but the first doesn't quite rhyme for me, anyway.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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You chose and gorgeous picture to illustrate your poem and you show us the transition into the season of Fall. I like all your rhyming couplets but the first doesn't quite rhyme for me, anyway.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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I will give it a second look.
Comment from Eternal Muse
What a wonderful poem about autumn. Its imagery and visuals bring me back to the East Coast where I lived for many years before moving Wes.
Wonderful rhymes and flow.
As morning creeps into the dark nights view
a dose of chilled air brings shivers to you
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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What a wonderful poem about autumn. Its imagery and visuals bring me back to the East Coast where I lived for many years before moving Wes.
Wonderful rhymes and flow.
As morning creeps into the dark nights view
a dose of chilled air brings shivers to you
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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EM, thank you, I appreciate your enjoying these lines.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Autumn to me is a magical season. The transition is so obvious yet so beautiful. Your well written poem exposes your deep feelings for this time of year and resonates with me. Lovely.
If I might I think the line that has 'before December' would flow better if you said >'ere December.
Ralf xx
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Autumn to me is a magical season. The transition is so obvious yet so beautiful. Your well written poem exposes your deep feelings for this time of year and resonates with me. Lovely.
If I might I think the line that has 'before December' would flow better if you said >'ere December.
Ralf xx
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Ralf, thank you hum. I will look at this again.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem with couplets about the transition between seasons that happen smoothly while we observe the changes day by day.
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A very well-written rhyming poem with couplets about the transition between seasons that happen smoothly while we observe the changes day by day.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Jim.
-You wrote a very good
poem with effective
seasonal imagery and rhyme.
-This is my favorite one:
"colourful birds chirp goodbyes."
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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-Very nice image, Jim.
-You wrote a very good
poem with effective
seasonal imagery and rhyme.
-This is my favorite one:
"colourful birds chirp goodbyes."
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Pam, thanks!
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You are welcome, Jim!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A beautiful poem about a beautiful season. I loved the rhymes and the flow and one can really see the scene and small the earth in one's mind. Thanks for sharing!
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A beautiful poem about a beautiful season. I loved the rhymes and the flow and one can really see the scene and small the earth in one's mind. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Seshadri, I am so grateful for your insight,
Comment from Mastery
You are a plethora of ideas encased in one man, Jim. Your poem on the autumn here is original and covers the tide of Autumn so well.
I liked these lines especially.
"....to shrouded trees and very grey skies
while many colourful birds chirp goodbyes."
Thanks for sharing. Bob
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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You are a plethora of ideas encased in one man, Jim. Your poem on the autumn here is original and covers the tide of Autumn so well.
I liked these lines especially.
"....to shrouded trees and very grey skies
while many colourful birds chirp goodbyes."
Thanks for sharing. Bob
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thanks Bob!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is excellent--well-written and vividly descriptive. Though I LOVE fall, I can understand the feelings of those who truly miss summer. I also love spring--mid-spring. The last couplet reveals an appreciation for fall.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Your poem is excellent--well-written and vividly descriptive. Though I LOVE fall, I can understand the feelings of those who truly miss summer. I also love spring--mid-spring. The last couplet reveals an appreciation for fall.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Janice, Thank you!
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading your poem, Jim. The rhymes are good choices and display your meaning very well. We missed you in class yesterday!! Hope all is well!!
Melissa
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I enjoyed reading your poem, Jim. The rhymes are good choices and display your meaning very well. We missed you in class yesterday!! Hope all is well!!
Melissa
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Melissa thanks, much, yeah I am a tough old bird. I had another ER visit, with some internal bleeding, dealing with blood thinners is a bummer, but life goes on...
Comment from wishawave
A well penned poem. A series changes of season. The changes in nature brings different observations and also the changes how the author feels and sees the world.
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A well penned poem. A series changes of season. The changes in nature brings different observations and also the changes how the author feels and sees the world.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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thanks much.