Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Spring Comes"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from mermaids
I admire your smooth flow of rhyming words that add to the strength of your theme. "My melancholy reverts as anticipations swarm" is a line that shows feelings as spring is about to come forth. Excellent acrostic form and use of words.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I admire your smooth flow of rhyming words that add to the strength of your theme. "My melancholy reverts as anticipations swarm" is a line that shows feelings as spring is about to come forth. Excellent acrostic form and use of words.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Gee
Very nice Acrostic rhyming poem for the competition.
I haven't been able to do one of these yet.
I think you do well and should do well in the competition.
Thanks for sharing. We appreciate it.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Very nice Acrostic rhyming poem for the competition.
I haven't been able to do one of these yet.
I think you do well and should do well in the competition.
Thanks for sharing. We appreciate it.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you much Gee!
Comment from Janet Foor
An excellent rhyming acrostic poem. I am anxiously awaiting Spring and your lovely poem. I watch for each harbinger and hope that winter exits and Spring arrives.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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An excellent rhyming acrostic poem. I am anxiously awaiting Spring and your lovely poem. I watch for each harbinger and hope that winter exits and Spring arrives.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Janet, for your review and comments, Enjoy the anticipation.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
This piece is a nice commentary on the promise of spring in the depths of winter. The form is well followed and the photograph a lovely example of the setting.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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This piece is a nice commentary on the promise of spring in the depths of winter. The form is well followed and the photograph a lovely example of the setting.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your review and comments.
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:-)
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are clear, descriptive, hopeful and creative. I thought
about when I lived in NY how much during the winter I wanted spring to
come. The poem brought back many memories of the joy spring brings!
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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The author's words are clear, descriptive, hopeful and creative. I thought
about when I lived in NY how much during the winter I wanted spring to
come. The poem brought back many memories of the joy spring brings!
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Harmony, have a great week!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written rhyming acrostic poem you have penned for the writing prompt contest. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Your words and art work go very well together. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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This is a very beautiful and very well written rhyming acrostic poem you have penned for the writing prompt contest. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Your words and art work go very well together. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Teri, wow , unexpected but very much appreciated review, sixes and comments. Thank you🙏
Comment from Maria Millsaps
Spring Comes- I found this acrostic poem to be well crafted. I like your usage of metaphors and similes. The last part of your poem, you nicely closed with a vision of hope. Spring Comes, and yes it does with the newness and freshness of a new birth.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Spring Comes- I found this acrostic poem to be well crafted. I like your usage of metaphors and similes. The last part of your poem, you nicely closed with a vision of hope. Spring Comes, and yes it does with the newness and freshness of a new birth.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you Maria for your review and comments.
Comment from GWEnos
Great poem! I especially like the rhyming scheme. I wish I'd thought of it. Believe I shall rewrite one of mine - with a few stolen words from yours. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Great poem! I especially like the rhyming scheme. I wish I'd thought of it. Believe I shall rewrite one of mine - with a few stolen words from yours. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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good luck to you also.
Comment from Frank Malley
Acrostic poems impose difficult limits that often cause poets to use corny rhymes and propped diction. "Spring Comes" does not fall prey to the difficult limits, and expresses capably a love for Spring, probably one of the most poetically selected of all topics. I would suggest removing the commas in line 8; obverting is used here to mean, I think, functioning as a ceiling for pre-spring stillness and slumber. I think line 10 would be a little stronger thus: ' Exiting winter; tremulous no more as my heart warms.' Merely suggestions.
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Acrostic poems impose difficult limits that often cause poets to use corny rhymes and propped diction. "Spring Comes" does not fall prey to the difficult limits, and expresses capably a love for Spring, probably one of the most poetically selected of all topics. I would suggest removing the commas in line 8; obverting is used here to mean, I think, functioning as a ceiling for pre-spring stillness and slumber. I think line 10 would be a little stronger thus: ' Exiting winter; tremulous no more as my heart warms.' Merely suggestions.
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Great comments thank you for your honest feedback.
Comment from papa55mike
Yes, we all need spring to burst forth and rescue us from the bitter cold. I've read several of these entries today and I like this one. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Yes, we all need spring to burst forth and rescue us from the bitter cold. I've read several of these entries today and I like this one. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you as always, Mike.