Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
How on earth are you doing TWO NOVELS at the same time??!!! Oh, my stars. And you ain't playing, neither. Wow.
Guys being so aggressive with a young girl. Guns already coming out. Whew! If this is just chapter THREE what else do you have in mind?
And four thousand dollars (possibly) for a horse?? I had no idea!
Great start!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Barb,
How on earth are you doing TWO NOVELS at the same time??!!! Oh, my stars. And you ain't playing, neither. Wow.
Guys being so aggressive with a young girl. Guns already coming out. Whew! If this is just chapter THREE what else do you have in mind?
And four thousand dollars (possibly) for a horse?? I had no idea!
Great start!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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During the research I did that's pretty cheap. Both this novel and Football are complete. I am in the process of writing another novel. I am hoping their names don't wander into each other's story. LOL Thank you.
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WOW. You're my hero!
Comment from Sankey
As is your usual style, another great chapter. Drama and feelings etc. A couple of things to look at. a lot of work for her to get use(d?) to me
There's no way (they)could've wandered off.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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As is your usual style, another great chapter. Drama and feelings etc. A couple of things to look at. a lot of work for her to get use(d?) to me
There's no way (they)could've wandered off.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you. I am off to make those corrections. I appreciate the help
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Sorry wrong time of the week for the SIXES!
Comment from John Ciarmello
I enjoyed this Chater from beginning to end. I will certainly have to go back and catch up. I got a good feel for the characters in this chapter as well. It read smoothly and to no surprise professionally. I love Cordero a knight in shining armor.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I enjoyed this Chater from beginning to end. I will certainly have to go back and catch up. I got a good feel for the characters in this chapter as well. It read smoothly and to no surprise professionally. I love Cordero a knight in shining armor.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate hearing the males on FS.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, the girl does seem to have a tendency to be attract some bad company but she's lucky having Cordero and Jorge coming to her help. I'm
Only found a small thing: Drying tears = Drying her tears. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Hi Barbara, the girl does seem to have a tendency to be attract some bad company but she's lucky having Cordero and Jorge coming to her help. I'm
Only found a small thing: Drying tears = Drying her tears. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I have made that correction. I appreciate the catch. Thank you.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like and have a pleasant read of this Romance Fiction, narrative taletelling of the theme percolation as well plot development concordance is balanced and realistic like the appropriate, realistic, short and catchy, after all, it's a horse matter, speed and movement at par the required tune; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I like and have a pleasant read of this Romance Fiction, narrative taletelling of the theme percolation as well plot development concordance is balanced and realistic like the appropriate, realistic, short and catchy, after all, it's a horse matter, speed and movement at par the required tune; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from eliz100
This was a great chapter for your book. It was an easy read and very enjoyable.I found one small error. The line starts with, "Cordero grinned...... You wrote except his one. I think you mean this one.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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This was a great chapter for your book. It was an easy read and very enjoyable.I found one small error. The line starts with, "Cordero grinned...... You wrote except his one. I think you mean this one.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I have made that correction. Thank you for the catch.
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Your welcome
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great chapter. How do you know so much about horses? The chapter was based on great dialogue that brought the reader directly into the story. Very engaging dialogue. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Great chapter. How do you know so much about horses? The chapter was based on great dialogue that brought the reader directly into the story. Very engaging dialogue. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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My aunt and uncle did the rodeo circuit and had a ranch in Oklahoma. I stayed with them.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It looks like she's had such a bad experience, she's scared when a stranger comes near. She had every right to be worried about that Luke fellow. I'm thinking he might be one of those men that the sheriff warned Cord about. Which means he'll be close by when they all go home. That horse seemed to like Ali, she could end up being her horse! I enjoyed this chapter, Barbara, I don't know how you are managing two books together!! :)) Sandra xx
There's no way (they)could've wandered off.
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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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It looks like she's had such a bad experience, she's scared when a stranger comes near. She had every right to be worried about that Luke fellow. I'm thinking he might be one of those men that the sheriff warned Cord about. Which means he'll be close by when they all go home. That horse seemed to like Ali, she could end up being her horse! I enjoyed this chapter, Barbara, I don't know how you are managing two books together!! :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I am struggling managing two books to be honest. LOL Katherine might show up in this book. LOL Thank you.
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When I posted the first chapter of my Time Travel books a couple of weeks ago, I kept writing Margot's character as Veronica's. So easy to do. I'll leave that book until this one is finished. It's going to be a shorter novel than usual. xxx
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I'm afraid, I'm going to do it as I edit. Both of these two books are complete so I'm writing another book, her name is Emma in case it shows up. LOL
Comment from Melodie Michelle
I only have five stars to give otherwise I will give you a virtual six! The characters were exemplary and the storyline was really awesome!
Thanxxxxx for sharing and many blessings to you!
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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I only have five stars to give otherwise I will give you a virtual six! The characters were exemplary and the storyline was really awesome!
Thanxxxxx for sharing and many blessings to you!
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Don't worry about the six. I'm not. I'm just happy you reviewed and enjoyed.
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I wanted you to know bc I think it's very important to let the writer know how you truly felt when you review a piece of their work. I meant it from my heart, I was not just saying that my friend! This piece deserves a six star rating!
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