Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from BethShelby
When Ali gets through with this serial rapist, he may not be able to pay child support if he goes to jail. It is a sobering that women could actually be caught up in situations a bad as the one Amy is in. He father is total jerk as well to refuse to listen to his daughter and to disown her. I'm enjoyed your story. I like the way you had Ali react with tears over the situation.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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When Ali gets through with this serial rapist, he may not be able to pay child support if he goes to jail. It is a sobering that women could actually be caught up in situations a bad as the one Amy is in. He father is total jerk as well to refuse to listen to his daughter and to disown her. I'm enjoyed your story. I like the way you had Ali react with tears over the situation.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I worried about the tears being too much, but that's how I would've reacted and have at times when I've had to make student home visits.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written. Good work.
It sounds like a nice payday for Amy.
Tough if Ali is very successful, Pat Rogers could lose his position and wealth, maybe declare go to jail and declare bankruptcy.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Nicely written. Good work.
It sounds like a nice payday for Amy.
Tough if Ali is very successful, Pat Rogers could lose his position and wealth, maybe declare go to jail and declare bankruptcy.
Good luck.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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We'll wait and see what happens to Rogers. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, yes, rape is always a horrible thing, but this scumbag needs to be nailed and kept accountable. I sure hope Ali will succeed in that regard. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Hi Barbara, yes, rape is always a horrible thing, but this scumbag needs to be nailed and kept accountable. I sure hope Ali will succeed in that regard. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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We'll wait and see. Things will start picking up. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How awful! I know it happens a lot, which is worse. Men seem to get off on being dominant, making the girl obey their demands. Usually they are men who can't do it in the normal way. I hope that awful man gets his comeuppance and not only has to pay, but goes to prison as well. Why do fathers believe the man? I'd have nothing more to do with my father if he was like that. This was a well written chapter, Barb, very well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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How awful! I know it happens a lot, which is worse. Men seem to get off on being dominant, making the girl obey their demands. Usually they are men who can't do it in the normal way. I hope that awful man gets his comeuppance and not only has to pay, but goes to prison as well. Why do fathers believe the man? I'd have nothing more to do with my father if he was like that. This was a well written chapter, Barb, very well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from nomi338
What a horrible person. As for Amy's dad, I have no words to describe his failure. If something like this ever happened to any of my daughter's or my grand daughter, I would be in jail for manslaughter for sure. My oldest daughter kept from me for years the fact that a former boyfriend had tried to hurt her. Of course she held her own against him. My two daughters and my grand daughter are fighters who take no crap from any man. Those who have tried have learned to regret it.
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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What a horrible person. As for Amy's dad, I have no words to describe his failure. If something like this ever happened to any of my daughter's or my grand daughter, I would be in jail for manslaughter for sure. My oldest daughter kept from me for years the fact that a former boyfriend had tried to hurt her. Of course she held her own against him. My two daughters and my grand daughter are fighters who take no crap from any man. Those who have tried have learned to regret it.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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I hate to say it there are horrible men in the world. Luckily most men are wonderful. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This chapter presents an interesting slice of the story, well-paced and with excellent description. I enjoyed my read. But as you say, none of us ever writes perfectly. The problem is usually we know what we wrote, so that's what we see. A couple of things for you to consider:
"We'll go together. It wouldn't look right." > "It wouldn't look right. We'll go together."
Rogers used it to cause problems between Cord and her > Rogers had used it to cause problems between Cord and herself
I did research > I did some research
Cord's Matt's > double 's is ugly
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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This chapter presents an interesting slice of the story, well-paced and with excellent description. I enjoyed my read. But as you say, none of us ever writes perfectly. The problem is usually we know what we wrote, so that's what we see. A couple of things for you to consider:
"We'll go together. It wouldn't look right." > "It wouldn't look right. We'll go together."
Rogers used it to cause problems between Cord and her > Rogers had used it to cause problems between Cord and herself
I did research > I did some research
Cord's Matt's > double 's is ugly
Kate xx
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the help. I've made the corrections. I do appreciate the review.