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Quiet Lawyer

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Can a broken heart be mended?

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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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Cordero is such a considerate man! "My life's better because you're in it," is a line that anyone wants to hear:-)

Ali seems to be settling in nicely at the ranch and with the locals - she'll fit right in when she and Cord get married.

The sentence, "He handed her it and kissed her" sounds awkward. "He handed it to her"?

Samson pushed his way PAST him, not passed him




 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help and made the changes.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Barabara--I couldn't resist popping in to wish you a happy 2023--another wonderful storyline here--I sense a happy ending pending--wish I could have followed from Chapter 1. You sure have a knack for dialog. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the encoragement.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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You did an excellent job, as always on this chapter. I can tell things are coming together. I did find one sentence that didn't read well to me. I added a couple of words which makes the sentence clearer for me. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley

Lisa added, "Not only Lobo, the entire West Texas. (Not only Lobo but the entire West Texas area.)

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    I think that does read better. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Barbara,

I love Cord, in my opinion, his kind of man doest exist anymore. He seems deep in love.

Great chapter, the last one, right?

Good luck with all your writing. Happy New Year!!!

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    No this isn't the last one. There are 5 more chapters broken each broken into two parts. We have two trials coming up and a little more drama. Thank yu for you for the kind review.
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 31-Dec-2022
    Oh, okay, that's good. :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Was this the last chapter of this book? Or will you be posting more for us to read being the book is completed? Just thought I'd ask being things are getting better for Alexandra and Cord. We can't miss the announcement of their engagement.

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    I will be posting more to this novel. We don't have them engaged yet and there's a lot that still need to happen. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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Well, I had a six left, Barbara so this is yours. I really liked this chapter. Cord is a gentleman and is clearly in love. Now onto when it all becomes official. Happy New year. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the kind review. I have a feeling it'll take some time to make it official.
Comment from estory
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There's that exchange about the fire between Cord and Ali, in which she tells him she blames herself and he absolves her of that. Hints of wedding rings, and that conversation between the women at the end where they seem to be pressing Ali a bit for how deeply she is involved, as well as hinting at how aloof he has been in the past. Good tension between characters, I like that push and pull between Ali and Cord and the girls who used to know him as well as the mom. She seems to be hanging back a bit. He seems to want to press ahead. So we have to see how this sorts out. Good suspense at the end of this chapter. estory

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    It will be sorted out but will take some time. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
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Thanks for being a day early. Obviously plans for New Year's on your side. we are there already, of course. Loved this chapter. So descriptive of emotions and feelings etc.

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
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I'm concerned that Ali is always in some kind of crisis and dependent on others. She's always in need of rescuing or looking after. I hope we'll see again the side of her that defended the women Pat had abused. Maybe she'll be stronger now that Alan is out of the way, and she has definitely learned from her experience with him. Great scene with the women. They are grateful to Ali and are interested in her relationship with Cord. Looks like an engagement may be on the way! Ali's ready to move forward now. At this stage in the week, I'm afraid I'm out of sixes but this was definitely worthy. judi

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    Ali will stand up for herself soon. Not a problem with the sixes. I'm just glad you enjoyed reading.
reply by judiverse on 31-Dec-2022
    You've really been busy, with a new novel in the works. Good for you! judi
Comment from eliz100
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This is another excellent chapter. I think there is one small edit, "but I'm Becca, Caridad, (this) is Cari. You moved the story along nicely. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
    Cari is short for Caridad. Thank you for the kind review.