The Note
Dribble Flash Fiction - 52 words (3rd place)31 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Talk about regrets, one's anger can be a terrible thing, or unforgiveness. If the object of our resentment is dying, there is no way back from the ravine created by death, this is beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Talk about regrets, one's anger can be a terrible thing, or unforgiveness. If the object of our resentment is dying, there is no way back from the ravine created by death, this is beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Roy ~ Thanks so much for your thorough and thoughtful review on my dribble flash. It is much appreciated. ~DD
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Most welcome
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. This was totally unexpected, for me anyway.
For valid reasons to Lucy, she walked out of her home and mother. If she'd read the note or letter sooner, maybe, just maybe the dynamics would've been better.
Well done in so few words.
John
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Wow. This was totally unexpected, for me anyway.
For valid reasons to Lucy, she walked out of her home and mother. If she'd read the note or letter sooner, maybe, just maybe the dynamics would've been better.
Well done in so few words.
John
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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John - Thanks so much for your thorough and thoughtful review on my dribble flash. It is much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Sugarray77
I thought you developed this little dribble very well, DD. The implied and unspoken message to the reader is supremely gripping and we all feel sorry for the main character. Lots of lessons here. So well done and I send you good luck!
Melissa
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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I thought you developed this little dribble very well, DD. The implied and unspoken message to the reader is supremely gripping and we all feel sorry for the main character. Lots of lessons here. So well done and I send you good luck!
Melissa
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Melissa. I appreciate your review on my fictional dribble story. Thank goodness it was plucked from my imagination. Too sad if it was a real story. ~DD
Comment from jessizero
This story was both intense and heartbreaking. It really pulled at my emotions, and you told it well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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This story was both intense and heartbreaking. It really pulled at my emotions, and you told it well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Jess. I appreciate your review on my fictional dribble story. Thank goodness it was plucked from my imagination and not based on fact. I don?t think I could cope. Have a great weekend. ~DD
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with a sad subject, DD.
I enjoyed reading your entry, though it was
poignant. Your twist at the end was heartbreaking.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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You did a great job with a sad subject, DD.
I enjoyed reading your entry, though it was
poignant. Your twist at the end was heartbreaking.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Jan. I appreciate your review on my fictional dribble story. Thank goodness it was plucked from my imagination and not real life. Have a good weekend. ~DDxo
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, how awful! There is never a good enough reason to leave our mums without a chat first. Now this lady has lost the chance. What a sad contest entry, DD, I'm sure many children who leave home really don't know why they did. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Oh, how awful! There is never a good enough reason to leave our mums without a chat first. Now this lady has lost the chance. What a sad contest entry, DD, I'm sure many children who leave home really don't know why they did. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Sandra, for taking the time to review my flash dribble. Your comments were thoughtful and much appreciated. ~DDxo
Comment from jenintorre
How very sad. You packed a complete story into just fifty words here. Well done.
I love flash fiction. Wishing you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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How very sad. You packed a complete story into just fifty words here. Well done.
I love flash fiction. Wishing you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Jen, for taking the time to review my flash dribble. Your comments are much appreciated, as always. Happy Sunday. ~DDxo
Comment from Julie Lau
Oh. There is certainly a moral there - not to leave communications unread. There was also the chance that Lucy's mother was becoming less bearable because the cancer was affecting her behaviour. I have already learned in my own life never to delay in communicating with older people; you never know when you might suddenly lose them. Congratulations on producing a very thought-provoking story. Julie Lau
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Oh. There is certainly a moral there - not to leave communications unread. There was also the chance that Lucy's mother was becoming less bearable because the cancer was affecting her behaviour. I have already learned in my own life never to delay in communicating with older people; you never know when you might suddenly lose them. Congratulations on producing a very thought-provoking story. Julie Lau
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Julie, for taking the time to review my flash dribble. Your comments were thoughtful and thorough and much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow! How heartbreaking to find the note 18 months after she stormed out of the house leaving the letter unopened only to read it maybe too late. I am careful to read notes left to me as soon as I get them for that reason alone. Thanks for sharing this dribble flash fiction tale and its heartfelt conclusion.
Jesse
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Wow! How heartbreaking to find the note 18 months after she stormed out of the house leaving the letter unopened only to read it maybe too late. I am careful to read notes left to me as soon as I get them for that reason alone. Thanks for sharing this dribble flash fiction tale and its heartfelt conclusion.
Jesse
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Jesse, thank you, for taking the time to review my flash dribble. Your comments were thoughtful and, as always, much appreciated. Happy Sunday. ~DDxo
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Have a happy Sunday too.
Jesse
Comment from Pantygynt
Ouch! Since it made me feel like that, this has to be an effective little tale. It is the sort of thing that could so easily happen and then that six months of vacuum. Readers imagine what the mother must have felt throughout those months and what Lucy must have felt on reading the note and the power of the piece becomes apparent as it should in a Flash.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Ouch! Since it made me feel like that, this has to be an effective little tale. It is the sort of thing that could so easily happen and then that six months of vacuum. Readers imagine what the mother must have felt throughout those months and what Lucy must have felt on reading the note and the power of the piece becomes apparent as it should in a Flash.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thanks again, Jim. I am glad it made you go - Ouch! ? in a good way. I always appreciate your keen eye reviews. :-)