Guided by Faith
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, Seth's making a little headway one bite at a time, but I don't see him breaking through full force any time soon. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Well, Seth's making a little headway one bite at a time, but I don't see him breaking through full force any time soon. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Good job with the description of the pain. It was spot on. Seth was slick and smart when he hid the sleeping bag in the garage. She's none the wiser and he can take care of her as well. Good chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Good job with the description of the pain. It was spot on. Seth was slick and smart when he hid the sleeping bag in the garage. She's none the wiser and he can take care of her as well. Good chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
A simple chapter with easy dialogue and dialogue between them with no knives thrown, and. ...
He lets the cat out of the bag...
"I understand, but you're surrounded by people who love you.
Okay, let's see where this goes when she wakes up and Seth on the floor.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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A simple chapter with easy dialogue and dialogue between them with no knives thrown, and. ...
He lets the cat out of the bag...
"I understand, but you're surrounded by people who love you.
Okay, let's see where this goes when she wakes up and Seth on the floor.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent dialogue as these two grow closer. Seth is a helpful neighbor and so considerate. Emma is very lucky to have such a good landlord and friend. It's great he is a good cook and willing to sleep on the floor to keep her safe. It will be interesting to see if this sparks and gossip around this small town.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Excellent dialogue as these two grow closer. Seth is a helpful neighbor and so considerate. Emma is very lucky to have such a good landlord and friend. It's great he is a good cook and willing to sleep on the floor to keep her safe. It will be interesting to see if this sparks and gossip around this small town.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
I congratulate you on the flow of your dialogue. That's nothing that can be taught, as you probably know, but must be felt as you write and you sense inwardly the need for, say, transitions or identifier tags. I imagine we all have to go through out own learning curve until the facility is learned. You do it so well.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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I congratulate you on the flow of your dialogue. That's nothing that can be taught, as you probably know, but must be felt as you write and you sense inwardly the need for, say, transitions or identifier tags. I imagine we all have to go through out own learning curve until the facility is learned. You do it so well.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is a short sub-chapter. I think that better describes it. You may want more content. I know what happens on FS if things appear too long. It's hard to know where to cut off.
Everything looks good to me.
I do know how you feel about 'certain' forms of intimacy. But, have you considered, that you are replacing one form with another. 16 days, and they are this close. She shouldn't trust him or he her at this point, to this extent. Here, Seth is taking the place of her parents, for some unknown and unbelievable reason, forgetting his position, as this would completely compromise the crime done against her in a court.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Hmm, this is a short sub-chapter. I think that better describes it. You may want more content. I know what happens on FS if things appear too long. It's hard to know where to cut off.
Everything looks good to me.
I do know how you feel about 'certain' forms of intimacy. But, have you considered, that you are replacing one form with another. 16 days, and they are this close. She shouldn't trust him or he her at this point, to this extent. Here, Seth is taking the place of her parents, for some unknown and unbelievable reason, forgetting his position, as this would completely compromise the crime done against her in a court.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine chapter Barbara and it sounds like Seth is trying to impress Emma with his cooking prowess and she is responding too, although she is still trying to be independent, I enjoyed the dialogue, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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A fine chapter Barbara and it sounds like Seth is trying to impress Emma with his cooking prowess and she is responding too, although she is still trying to be independent, I enjoyed the dialogue, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a home-y chapter where the characters are feeling more and more comfortable. Seth sounds like a gentleman.
Only suggestion:
"I need to call the Taxi service and see about getting a ride to work tomorrow."
Un-capitalize taxi. Unless it really is called something like The Taxi Service.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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This is a home-y chapter where the characters are feeling more and more comfortable. Seth sounds like a gentleman.
Only suggestion:
"I need to call the Taxi service and see about getting a ride to work tomorrow."
Un-capitalize taxi. Unless it really is called something like The Taxi Service.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I wondered about taxi. I changed it numerous times. I fixed it and will leave it alone.
Comment from Sankey
Another lovely chapter. Nothing about the Crown vehicle driver. I am sure Peggy will turn up again, soon. You carry us along, nicely. Romance must be coming. No spags.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Another lovely chapter. Nothing about the Crown vehicle driver. I am sure Peggy will turn up again, soon. You carry us along, nicely. Romance must be coming. No spags.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Barbara,
Nice chapter! Please put the couple together soon. I'm interested in seeing how different their speech is when they confess their love for each other!
Lovely story, Barbara.
Good luck with it.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Barbara,
Nice chapter! Please put the couple together soon. I'm interested in seeing how different their speech is when they confess their love for each other!
Lovely story, Barbara.
Good luck with it.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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LOL Good point. They are both being very guarded. Thank you for the kind review.