Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

In the first sentence, should "as" be there?

And then you leave us with a cliffhanger! Good one, Barbara.

I'm waiting for the day that Emma trusts Seth 100% and Seth begins to relax about the age difference.

Thanks for sharing another good chapter.

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

I deleted the 'as'. I'd rewritten that sentence as I posted and still messed it up. I appreciate the help.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

It sounds like there is happy news in this chapter Barbara. I can understand Emma's reluctance to have money spent on her. I did a little bit of on-line dating a couple of years ago and I would only go for a drink with new people I met as I didn't want to be indebted to a stranger. Men often feel entitled in these situations. Another fine chapter Barbara, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

They sure do. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 18-Dec-2023

Comment from Austin Yu

Excellent

I love how you made God the central theme throughout Emma's life and her struggles. Such a powerful story you wrote, and I look forward to more work done by you!!!

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Navada

Excellent

This is my first time visiting the world of Emma and Seth and I think I will return! Them seem real and down to earth and motivated by good values, unlike Ronnie, it seems. Looking forward to more installments!

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.

Comment from Sankey

Exceptional

So sorry I have taken a bit longer to get to this great chapter. The school position sounds good. I hope we are moving more toward some romance. The age difference always seems to be a problem. As I have said I am 9 years older than Louise, but she had a more stable upbringing than me although my Mum did the best she could without Dad's support.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you for the kind review. To some people it's a problem. I'm four years older than my husband, but it's never been a problem.

Comment from Paul McFarland

Excellent

I think this first part of chapter 27 is fine. You have certainly have left the reader anxiously waiting for the second part. It looks like we are in for another surprise.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you for the encouragement.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

I must admit, I never thought about the money until you mentioned it. I just prefer to read good writing and it is mostly longer. Then I looked at how many people opened my writing and how few of them read it and I understood. I started making them shorter. This is a good half chapter, and the dialogue is revealing about their characters. You do have two extra words as if you rewrote and missed them: Extra (as) in first line. I've dated (but) a little . . .

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

I have deleted both of those words. Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the help. I have had reviewers actually state the post was too long because they wanted the quick money.

reply by Carol Hillebrenner on 18-Dec-2023

At least they read it and hopefully gave you a decent review.

Comment from Daylily

Excellent

I like how this story continues to develop, Barbara. It holds interest and that is a big positive. You have an excellent way of closing your postings, as well, and it leaves readers wanting to find out more.

Hope you also have a blessed Christmas holiday!

-- There is an extra word here:

"That makes sense. I've dated but a little but nothing serious. I'm new at this relationship thing."

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

I have omitted that word. Thank you for the catch and the kind review. I appreciate the help.

Comment from Teri7

Exceptional

Barbara, this is a really great chapter! They all are really good, but this one was really great! It always excites me to see Emma and Seth get along and realize they are dating! You used great descriptive words and each time Emma or Seth say something like good advice it seems to draw them closer. You are a great writer my friend. Merry Christmas and may Blessings to you! love, Teri

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

This is another excellent chapter. The hook at the end makes the next chapter a must-read. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you for the encouragement.