Guided by Faith
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Sounds like Seth is pretty protective of Emma - doesn't want anyone else volunteering for youth trips. All the men seem to be attracted to Emma!
As a person who didn't wait until I was married, I confess I know how hard this would be for any couple falling in love. It's natural to want them in a physical relationship.
Perhaps this will bring an early marriage:-)
Great dialogue to tell the story of their desires, fears, and blossoming love.
I didn't see any necessary edits.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Sounds like Seth is pretty protective of Emma - doesn't want anyone else volunteering for youth trips. All the men seem to be attracted to Emma!
As a person who didn't wait until I was married, I confess I know how hard this would be for any couple falling in love. It's natural to want them in a physical relationship.
Perhaps this will bring an early marriage:-)
Great dialogue to tell the story of their desires, fears, and blossoming love.
I didn't see any necessary edits.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Everybody has to do what's right for them.
Comment from Jim Wile
Emma is certainly an anomaly these days, but it's refreshing to read a story about an old-fashioned girl with an old-fashion sense of morals and a guy who respects them. Bravo for that, Barbara.
This was a very sweet chapter as these two get their feelings out in the open, and they both know where each other stands.
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I'm not..." and then Emma interrupts. -- The ellipsis should probably be an em dash instead, which is typically used for an interruption, while the ellipsis is commonly used to indicate a pause (among other things.)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Emma is certainly an anomaly these days, but it's refreshing to read a story about an old-fashioned girl with an old-fashion sense of morals and a guy who respects them. Bravo for that, Barbara.
This was a very sweet chapter as these two get their feelings out in the open, and they both know where each other stands.
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I'm not..." and then Emma interrupts. -- The ellipsis should probably be an em dash instead, which is typically used for an interruption, while the ellipsis is commonly used to indicate a pause (among other things.)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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For Christmas my son gave me a new grammar book. Lucky you guys. I just reread the section on em dashes and ellipses. According to this book 'The Blue Book of Grammar and Punctuation' & ' A Writer's Reference', I am correct. I will check in my other books for clarification. The second book was one of my son's college textbook.
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The book may say it's correct, but I never see it used that way anymore.
I think this approach is much more common these days:
Click here.
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I've used it this way for all of my novels and none of my editors have corrected it, so far. We'll see.
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Sometimes there are no hard and fast rules and you have to use whatever style guide whoever you're writing for is working under, and they all differ in various aspects.
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They differ from editor to editor. I use three and each one has their own thing. I also stick with my grammar books, why? You can find anything on the Internet. I have nine books, and they often differ. I go by which version most the books agree with. I have argued with my editors too. If all my books say the same thing, then my editor is wrong.
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I guess they're human too and not always right.
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Sometimes it seems like grammar is not a science, which I always thought it had set rules, it's up to the person judging it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
In all relationships we have to have honesty as we cannot build good foundations with lies. Seth has a good heart and he is respectful. Being able to discuss problems that are a little uncomfortable is a sign of a lasting friendship. Emma is gaining her strength and it shows. I think she is beginning to realise what a good catch Seth is, another fine chapter Barbara, I enjoyed the progress in your story here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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In all relationships we have to have honesty as we cannot build good foundations with lies. Seth has a good heart and he is respectful. Being able to discuss problems that are a little uncomfortable is a sign of a lasting friendship. Emma is gaining her strength and it shows. I think she is beginning to realise what a good catch Seth is, another fine chapter Barbara, I enjoyed the progress in your story here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Sorry I'm late getting this review completed. Things are moving and I still enjoy the way they are. In Australia shook is no...nod is yes. He [shook](nodded) his head. I see you said nodded later so no worries.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Sorry I'm late getting this review completed. Things are moving and I still enjoy the way they are. In Australia shook is no...nod is yes. He [shook](nodded) his head. I see you said nodded later so no worries.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
Another good chapter, Barbara. I liked reintroduction of the ex-boyfriend to provide a bit of a road bump after the reading of the church notices.
A couple of very minor things..
1. Maybe reverse these two sentences to make absolutely clear that Chief Carter and Seth are one and the same person:
Seth, please stand. Chief Carter teaches our young adult Apostles Creed class.
2. An apostrophe is needed here: A fifties' dance
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Another good chapter, Barbara. I liked reintroduction of the ex-boyfriend to provide a bit of a road bump after the reading of the church notices.
A couple of very minor things..
1. Maybe reverse these two sentences to make absolutely clear that Chief Carter and Seth are one and the same person:
Seth, please stand. Chief Carter teaches our young adult Apostles Creed class.
2. An apostrophe is needed here: A fifties' dance
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I have made the changes. I never thought about the first one. It does make it clearer. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
It's always very satisfying when the air is cleared and these two protagonists are now on an equal footing. Emma is getting more and more assertive, e.g. with Ronnie, and there has definitely been a coming of age over the weeks for her. It wouldn't surprise me if she becomes keener on taking the relationship to a new level...or maybe not:) Thanks for sharing your excellent story, Barbara. Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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It's always very satisfying when the air is cleared and these two protagonists are now on an equal footing. Emma is getting more and more assertive, e.g. with Ronnie, and there has definitely been a coming of age over the weeks for her. It wouldn't surprise me if she becomes keener on taking the relationship to a new level...or maybe not:) Thanks for sharing your excellent story, Barbara. Debbie
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Wendy G
IT is good that they are bringing these issues into the open, as they will then feel more comfortable with each other but also more understanding. Another interesting and engaging chapter.
Wendy
Edits: but paused and watched Ronni leave. (Ronnie)
"You already for tomorrow?" asked Seth. (all ready)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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IT is good that they are bringing these issues into the open, as they will then feel more comfortable with each other but also more understanding. Another interesting and engaging chapter.
Wendy
Edits: but paused and watched Ronni leave. (Ronnie)
"You already for tomorrow?" asked Seth. (all ready)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I appreciate the help I have made the corrections. My grammar check is throwing a temper tantrum over all ready, but I check it against my grammar books and you're correct. Thank you.
Comment from Navada
I wish there were more men around like Seth, who appreciate the value of Emma's decision and don't view it purely as some kind of obstacle. I like the fact that they can discuss these things together even though it's uncomfortable.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I wish there were more men around like Seth, who appreciate the value of Emma's decision and don't view it purely as some kind of obstacle. I like the fact that they can discuss these things together even though it's uncomfortable.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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A reviewer told me Emma should consider Seth's feeling and they should compromise. I don't see any compromise in this situation. Either they have sex or they don't. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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That reviewer is flat out wrong, in my opinion. Throughout history, women have been asked to compromise. Not on this point.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Barbara. This is a great chapter that deserves a six. I've already run out. ð??"
I still loved it. Poor Seth and Emma seem to be tripping all over themselves trying to avoid the huge elephant in the room.
You give us a view of their life in the church and their shared interests and beliefs. A strong Christian message for young people everywhere.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Hi Barbara. This is a great chapter that deserves a six. I've already run out. ð??"
I still loved it. Poor Seth and Emma seem to be tripping all over themselves trying to avoid the huge elephant in the room.
You give us a view of their life in the church and their shared interests and beliefs. A strong Christian message for young people everywhere.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the understanding. That's more important than a six.
Comment from royowen
I love that last statement of Seth were he says of Emma, that herb humility reveals that precious inner beauty, that the three of the main women women in my life, all carry that quality. I love that Emma kneed Calhoun where the sun don't shine, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I love that last statement of Seth were he says of Emma, that herb humility reveals that precious inner beauty, that the three of the main women women in my life, all carry that quality. I love that Emma kneed Calhoun where the sun don't shine, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. I have taken some heat stating that Emma didn't take Seth's desires into consideration, that they need to compromise. I see no compromise in this situation either they have sex or they don't.
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I agree Barbara, don?t give in, you?re a light.