A Candle In the Night
The closest I can come to a spooky poem, I guess.26 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning Adonna,
I love the way you write. This poem continues your
tradition of using descriptive language that allows the
reader to feel and sense the poem and its setting as it
is read aloud.
Favorite lines include:
My loneliness is like the night;
friends have deserted, children too,
and left me here inside these walls
with nothing much to see or do,
and where not even sounds intrude.
(Oh how I can relate....)
The candle flickers in the wind
and smoky wisps rise up like dreams
that used to burn with passion's flame
but now evaporate in steam
I love the resolve in the last stanza:
I resolutely trim the wick
and find another match to light
the shrinking candle on the sill,
and realize, though it is night,
my withered hope has been renewed.
well penned, my friend. a delight to read
and review this evening.
-ray
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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Good Morning Adonna,
I love the way you write. This poem continues your
tradition of using descriptive language that allows the
reader to feel and sense the poem and its setting as it
is read aloud.
Favorite lines include:
My loneliness is like the night;
friends have deserted, children too,
and left me here inside these walls
with nothing much to see or do,
and where not even sounds intrude.
(Oh how I can relate....)
The candle flickers in the wind
and smoky wisps rise up like dreams
that used to burn with passion's flame
but now evaporate in steam
I love the resolve in the last stanza:
I resolutely trim the wick
and find another match to light
the shrinking candle on the sill,
and realize, though it is night,
my withered hope has been renewed.
well penned, my friend. a delight to read
and review this evening.
-ray
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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I thank you Ray, for such a warm and kind review. It is always good to hear from you, and your comments mean a lot to me.
Comment from l.raven
This is very well written.I love the flow of this poem.the wording is great,and easy the understand.It was nice the way the candle melted and had such feeling to it.Great poem
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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This is very well written.I love the flow of this poem.the wording is great,and easy the understand.It was nice the way the candle melted and had such feeling to it.Great poem
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I'm glad to know you found it enjoyable and easy to understand.
Comment from Alaskastory
'A Candle In the Night' sheds insight into the contrasts we live through good and bad days. The rhyme pattern is intriguing with the words ending each frame. You have a rare talent.
Thanks for sharing this really good poem, MissM.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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'A Candle In the Night' sheds insight into the contrasts we live through good and bad days. The rhyme pattern is intriguing with the words ending each frame. You have a rare talent.
Thanks for sharing this really good poem, MissM.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much Alaska! You are so encouraging, and I want you to know how much I appreciate your comments. Hugs to you... MM
Comment from CodyJack
I think your spooky poem to be very hopeful of how we change and can have hope no matter what is happening around us. Good imagery and nice rhythm to boot. Cody
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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I think your spooky poem to be very hopeful of how we change and can have hope no matter what is happening around us. Good imagery and nice rhythm to boot. Cody
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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Thanks cody. I'm glad you liked this, and took the time to comment. Many thanks.
Comment from annettebda
I have often watched as candles burn and realized a metaphor with how our life candle burns,inexorably to the end, It is a metaphor that has been well presented in this poem
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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I have often watched as candles burn and realized a metaphor with how our life candle burns,inexorably to the end, It is a metaphor that has been well presented in this poem
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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I sincerely appreciate your wonderful review and insightful comments, Annette. Thank you so much for this review.
Comment from Kelly Shackelford
Spooky So is she wanting the ghost to visit her or am I reading too much in the poem? It is well written with good flow. thank you for sharing it
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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Spooky So is she wanting the ghost to visit her or am I reading too much in the poem? It is well written with good flow. thank you for sharing it
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your wonderful review and good question. You are never reading 'too much' into a poem. It is for you to read with your own imagination and perceptions, and whatever that gives you is yours to keep. Thanks so much for reading and for this great review.