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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Seven Shades of Inspiration"A collection of crowns of sonnets
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Comment from JW
After reading this dictionary-based type poem, I could only conclude that it was Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious, which is a good thing. Otherwise, I would have to present it with less stars and claim it was dociousaliexpilisticfragicalirupus.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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After reading this dictionary-based type poem, I could only conclude that it was Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious, which is a good thing. Otherwise, I would have to present it with less stars and claim it was dociousaliexpilisticfragicalirupus.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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lol, thanks Jonathon :-). I'd have loved to squeeze in antidisestablishmentarianism, but it's too long for a sonnet line!
Thanks for the great review.
Mike
Comment from Julliette
Your poem is a piece of ingenious and brilliant fluidity. I really liked despite that I preffer a short poems,especially in english because isnīt my native language.
This part sound great:
Romantic beauty is your herbal tea;
a bolstering tisane to fight the cold,
the gift of shared responsibility,
the path to replication for the bol
Thanks for share your poem and greetings for you :)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Your poem is a piece of ingenious and brilliant fluidity. I really liked despite that I preffer a short poems,especially in english because isnīt my native language.
This part sound great:
Romantic beauty is your herbal tea;
a bolstering tisane to fight the cold,
the gift of shared responsibility,
the path to replication for the bol
Thanks for share your poem and greetings for you :)
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Juliette, for this wonderful review :-). I'm so happy you enjoyed reading through even though it is a bit long!
Mike
Comment from jackpeg
You must have thumb-worn every page in your Roget's Thesaurus before coming to the end of this one. It really rambles and slips and slides in and out of coherency so that the reader, if he continues to the end (which I did), would have to be dizzy with the effort. I think it lacks sophistication, but I can tell you that many in the teenage, performance poetry slam set, really dig it. They won't care what any of the pedantic words mean. They just like to hear them rattled off.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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You must have thumb-worn every page in your Roget's Thesaurus before coming to the end of this one. It really rambles and slips and slides in and out of coherency so that the reader, if he continues to the end (which I did), would have to be dizzy with the effort. I think it lacks sophistication, but I can tell you that many in the teenage, performance poetry slam set, really dig it. They won't care what any of the pedantic words mean. They just like to hear them rattled off.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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lol, fair enough, Jack. I can assure you, the only time I actually went near a dictionary during writing this was to copy and paste some of the official definitions for the author's notes.
I can further assure you that it makes perfect sense, it just might require a little investment to glean it (read Rama Devi's review to see somebody who did 'get' the philosophical points I was driving at). The vast majority of classic poetry can take many readings before its intent and meaning becomes lucid, so I make no apology for pursuing a similar vein.
I don't belive a poem needs big words at all, but a contest which actually required their use was a perfect opportunity to break out some truly beautiful words that I hope others will see and utilise.
I thank you for your time, but I worry that you got caught up in your desitre to make a sarcastic witticism, and stopped paying full attention as you read.
Mike
Comment from Espresso momma
Can I first confess, I didn't get out the dictionary. I know, bad girl. But this was a pretty keep idea to write such a complex piece as this. Thanks much.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Can I first confess, I didn't get out the dictionary. I know, bad girl. But this was a pretty keep idea to write such a complex piece as this. Thanks much.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you; I don't expect everyone to go running for their dictionaries, I doappreciste the encouragement, though :-)
Mike
Comment from Mustang Patty
Mike; your poem is a breath of fresh air right now. Delving into the dictionary, you were able to bring us wondrous words - and that is why we write. Expression through words and learning more about them. Wonderful. ~patty~
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Mike; your poem is a breath of fresh air right now. Delving into the dictionary, you were able to bring us wondrous words - and that is why we write. Expression through words and learning more about them. Wonderful. ~patty~
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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You understand perfectly, Patty - it's not about showing offwithout understanding (as one re iewer accused), but glorying in beautiful, rare words and their meanings.
Mike
Comment from rivki1111
Hello, great entry for the competition. I laughed in places, as it is very witty and well written, with a wide gamet of emotions.
(That has to be one of the weirdest photo for a bio, I've seen, so congrats!!! lol (^_^) Just as well you did't have a cold, or you may have been squelched by now.)
I have no suggestions for improvement, and thanks for sharing your poem, cheers, Rebekah.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Hello, great entry for the competition. I laughed in places, as it is very witty and well written, with a wide gamet of emotions.
(That has to be one of the weirdest photo for a bio, I've seen, so congrats!!! lol (^_^) Just as well you did't have a cold, or you may have been squelched by now.)
I have no suggestions for improvement, and thanks for sharing your poem, cheers, Rebekah.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much, Rebekah :-). Not many have seen the humour, so I'm thrilled you 'plugged in' to it. My wife took that photo the other day and I just HAD to use it! I blew it up first to make sure there were no slimy invaders though! lol
Mike
Mike
Comment from dismac (Paul)
Wow. This had to be a labor of love indeed. The crafting of these words into coherent concepts continually causes creatures of cadence causality to crash. I am going back now and read it again. LOL Paul
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Wow. This had to be a labor of love indeed. The crafting of these words into coherent concepts continually causes creatures of cadence causality to crash. I am going back now and read it again. LOL Paul
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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lol, thanks, Paul. One reviewer has accused me of not making sense, and using long words for the sake of it, but I'm adamant that's not true. The most fun element of this challenge was using exactly the right words for the concepts I was exploring, in a contest that provided me the perfect opportunity. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Mike
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I went back and read it again, and love it more....great job. Paul
Comment from Majicman
It seems you are like a living dictionary, with your use of 'big' words. You must live with a circle of intellectual friends with a great capacity for the English language. I admire you and your great poem.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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It seems you are like a living dictionary, with your use of 'big' words. You must live with a circle of intellectual friends with a great capacity for the English language. I admire you and your great poem.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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I just have Fanstory for that, and it's a wonderful place to meet people who share my love of words :-). Thank you so much for the review.
Mike
Comment from pickthorn
Quite a vocabulary you have displayed with this piece. "A humorous approach can grant insight by poking at the sanity of life." Very ramollescent indeed. Good job, good writing.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Quite a vocabulary you have displayed with this piece. "A humorous approach can grant insight by poking at the sanity of life." Very ramollescent indeed. Good job, good writing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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lol, thanks, Pickthorn. I adore obscure and archaic words, so this was a perfect opportunity to use a few that I've had waiting in the wings, and I got to spout off about philosophy and inspiration at the same time!
Mike
Comment from RaymondJohn
There's no better way to deal with a deadly serious topic than by humor. The Greeks knew it, and so has every thinking writer since. I once asked a friend why he never read books. "I looked through a dictionary once. If every word written in the English language is in it it, why should I bother reading a book." My retort: "So why do you bother talking?" Great job 'flump. You've always been one of my favorite writers. Ray.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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There's no better way to deal with a deadly serious topic than by humor. The Greeks knew it, and so has every thinking writer since. I once asked a friend why he never read books. "I looked through a dictionary once. If every word written in the English language is in it it, why should I bother reading a book." My retort: "So why do you bother talking?" Great job 'flump. You've always been one of my favorite writers. Ray.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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... and you, Ray, are one of my favourite reviewers. It was your encouraging review of one of my first stories on here that kept me on site when some really bad reviews of other work had me almost cancel my membership. So glad I didn't!
As for this piece, it was a perfect excuse to break out the words I itch to use in the manner they were intended, and for the most part it's gone down well. Thanks so much for your comments :-)
Mike