Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Part One of Chapter Two"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Kentucky Jim
I think this work is excellent. The dialogue moved along nicely, and the characters were completely believable, as were the things they said. The grammar is good, and the dialogue is terrific!
Of course, it raises questions about his diagnosis, so you've left the reader wanting to read further. Great!
Excellent work.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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I think this work is excellent. The dialogue moved along nicely, and the characters were completely believable, as were the things they said. The grammar is good, and the dialogue is terrific!
Of course, it raises questions about his diagnosis, so you've left the reader wanting to read further. Great!
Excellent work.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and kind words.
Comment from Scornwell
I found this to be as well written as your work usually is. Your characters come across strong and the dialog sounds realistic and seems natural for the characters. I am curious to learn about Troy's diagnosis.
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I found this to be as well written as your work usually is. Your characters come across strong and the dialog sounds realistic and seems natural for the characters. I am curious to learn about Troy's diagnosis.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from jerrymckeon
Well written to graphically point out spousal abuse. Your writing flows nicely and is easy to read and follow. In the second to last paragraph there is something that needs to be addressed: You have "Bobby, we're home." as a sentence - should it be: "Bobby was home, when she walked ......."
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Well written to graphically point out spousal abuse. Your writing flows nicely and is easy to read and follow. In the second to last paragraph there is something that needs to be addressed: You have "Bobby, we're home." as a sentence - should it be: "Bobby was home, when she walked ......."
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. In your suggestion, Anna was announcing that she is home. I will check it out.
Comment from Lostworld21
Loved your story! I read a bit of this, and went back and finished the rest too! Easy to read and extremey gripping! Can't wait for the next installment :)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Loved your story! I read a bit of this, and went back and finished the rest too! Easy to read and extremey gripping! Can't wait for the next installment :)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from markk
Well written and a very good continuation to this story with a strong end to it that keeps the reader interested and wanting to read on. well done. Good luck with your own treatment.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Well written and a very good continuation to this story with a strong end to it that keeps the reader interested and wanting to read on. well done. Good luck with your own treatment.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - you've really gotten the tension working in this one. Written with great pace and your usual attention to editing. Well done! Warm regards, Bill
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Hi Barbara - you've really gotten the tension working in this one. Written with great pace and your usual attention to editing. Well done! Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.I
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Thank you for brightening my day each time I read your post. Thank you also for being a teacher. I always disect your posts and try to learn.
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You are to kind.
Comment from amahra
First let me get this out of the way: just one little error: When Anna heard a "hello", I'm sure you meant ["hello,"].
I love this story; I read the first and will continue to follow.
I'm glad you got the answer about your Chemo.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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First let me get this out of the way: just one little error: When Anna heard a "hello", I'm sure you meant ["hello,"].
I love this story; I read the first and will continue to follow.
I'm glad you got the answer about your Chemo.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your eagle eye and the review. Nobody else has caught that error.
Comment from Cletus Hardiman
The "write" was great....... I am glad the lady in the story had a friend. Her "husband" ( if you could call him that ) is not worthy of any woman....This kind of thing just makes me sick! Thank you for writing this.... I noticed something about you at the bottom. Don't know about it, but I hope everything is all right! Cletus Hardiman ( Clete )
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The "write" was great....... I am glad the lady in the story had a friend. Her "husband" ( if you could call him that ) is not worthy of any woman....This kind of thing just makes me sick! Thank you for writing this.... I noticed something about you at the bottom. Don't know about it, but I hope everything is all right! Cletus Hardiman ( Clete )
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for the kind review.
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You are very welcome..... Clete
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Hi Barbara! I am glad you won't get more chemo but am sad about the sore on your back. I hope it heals soon my friend.
About this story, I think this is a very hard subject to touch. It touches hearts and brings back memories to any woman who has gone through it. You are doing a wonderful job!
God bless you!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Hi Barbara! I am glad you won't get more chemo but am sad about the sore on your back. I hope it heals soon my friend.
About this story, I think this is a very hard subject to touch. It touches hearts and brings back memories to any woman who has gone through it. You are doing a wonderful job!
God bless you!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for your kind review,
Comment from The Stranger
Troy could be very sorry that he didnt at least see Anna into the house safely,this could turn out to be a fatal erroof judgement, both for Anna and Troy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Troy could be very sorry that he didnt at least see Anna into the house safely,this could turn out to be a fatal erroof judgement, both for Anna and Troy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. It is too dangerous for Troy to be seen with Anna.