Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Part 3, Chapter 6"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from eliz100
This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual.It is very believable about the underground railroad for abused women and their children.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual.It is very believable about the underground railroad for abused women and their children.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
I was hoping it was Anna that Margaret had with her. Looks like things are looking up for her ...except we don't know what Bobby may have up his sleeve. Great chapter. As usual, I enjoyed reading and reviewing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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I was hoping it was Anna that Margaret had with her. Looks like things are looking up for her ...except we don't know what Bobby may have up his sleeve. Great chapter. As usual, I enjoyed reading and reviewing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Yes, Bobby is a wild card and will be throughout the novel. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from JW
This is an interesting addition to your story. Thank Goodness they have found Anne, and she's okay. JW
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Today we showed up on Margaret's door step(doorstep).
While he waited(,) he tapped his fingers.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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This is an interesting addition to your story. Thank Goodness they have found Anne, and she's okay. JW
Here are a few items you may or may not want to review"
Today we showed up on Margaret's door step(doorstep).
While he waited(,) he tapped his fingers.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Thank you for catching them. You are the only one who has. I appreciate it.
Comment from bhogg
Barbara - my only complaint was the brevity. I really get into your stories, so could have gladly read more. I don't open my checkbook to many things, but two here locally are a home for battered women and one for wounded warriors. Well written and edited. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Barbara - my only complaint was the brevity. I really get into your stories, so could have gladly read more. I don't open my checkbook to many things, but two here locally are a home for battered women and one for wounded warriors. Well written and edited. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 07-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciat your encouragment. Both charities are worthy causes.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A well written segment, explaining the underground network for abused women. The behaviors described in your notes are all part of the classic brainwashing process. Well done, Barbara. :) Nancy
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A well written segment, explaining the underground network for abused women. The behaviors described in your notes are all part of the classic brainwashing process. Well done, Barbara. :) Nancy
Comment Written 07-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from JeffreyStone
It is ovvious that you really understand the characters you have created. I believe that dialogue is the best way to define the characters; and as you know , it is difficult to write. The dialoge carries this story. Well done. Thanks for the author notes. Jeffrey
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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It is ovvious that you really understand the characters you have created. I believe that dialogue is the best way to define the characters; and as you know , it is difficult to write. The dialoge carries this story. Well done. Thanks for the author notes. Jeffrey
Comment Written 07-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Excellent chapter and I really like your notes. If one person drew strenght to make a choice for freedom, your writing will have served a great purpose Barbara.I believe some will. Very well written,I look forward to the next.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Excellent chapter and I really like your notes. If one person drew strenght to make a choice for freedom, your writing will have served a great purpose Barbara.I believe some will. Very well written,I look forward to the next.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Thnnk you for your kind review and encouraging workds.
Comment from rheabug
This was a very good piece to review. It shows all the concerns involved in abuse for anyone but especially women. I watched my Mom go through a somewhat abusive relationship with my Dad. God Bless you for bringing this issue to the forefront.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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This was a very good piece to review. It shows all the concerns involved in abuse for anyone but especially women. I watched my Mom go through a somewhat abusive relationship with my Dad. God Bless you for bringing this issue to the forefront.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Helen Tan
No SPAG noted. So Aunt Margaret got to know Anna by coincidence. These abused women have to be moved constantly for fear of being tracked down. The story is moving - the husband will be let out soon. They don't have much time for their next steps.
Troy grabbed her arm, hurried her into the lobby, and hugged her.
He took her hand in his and caressed it with his thumb.
I know Troy cares about Anna and there's a growing romantic interest and concern, but I am a bit unsure whether he would take such intimate actions like caressing her hand at this point in the story. Just thought I would let you know.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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No SPAG noted. So Aunt Margaret got to know Anna by coincidence. These abused women have to be moved constantly for fear of being tracked down. The story is moving - the husband will be let out soon. They don't have much time for their next steps.
Troy grabbed her arm, hurried her into the lobby, and hugged her.
He took her hand in his and caressed it with his thumb.
I know Troy cares about Anna and there's a growing romantic interest and concern, but I am a bit unsure whether he would take such intimate actions like caressing her hand at this point in the story. Just thought I would let you know.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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I thought he might trying to calm her down after scaring her. I will think about it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Another good chapter, Barbara. I really like the last paragraph, where Troy left the message for his dad. This chapter is well written and well edited.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Another good chapter, Barbara. I really like the last paragraph, where Troy left the message for his dad. This chapter is well written and well edited.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.