Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Part two, Chapter 11"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from jfmorgan
Very well done Barbara. Your story handles a very sensitive subject with class and boldness. I usually try to find an editorial insight to offer, but in this case I think to leave well enough alone is best. Very well done.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2011
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Very well done Barbara. Your story handles a very sensitive subject with class and boldness. I usually try to find an editorial insight to offer, but in this case I think to leave well enough alone is best. Very well done.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from abbasjoy
Great story line, well written and interesting. Love the suspense that has been created with the search now on for the abductor. You can feel the romance aspect beginning to blossom. You are a great story teller.I look forward to reading the next chapter.
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Great story line, well written and interesting. Love the suspense that has been created with the search now on for the abductor. You can feel the romance aspect beginning to blossom. You are a great story teller.I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sense.life
Enjoy the background description! Since, this is the first page of the story no idea what the main characters look like. Loved the silent thought she has of the cricket! Also, confused as to who the "Rodgers" were and why they want the baby(again, probably previously, explained). Respect the fact that this story seems to faces on all domestic abuse(of both men and women)! Kudos for that! Great story and other than, the moon there is not too much description to go on. Wish you the best!
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Enjoy the background description! Since, this is the first page of the story no idea what the main characters look like. Loved the silent thought she has of the cricket! Also, confused as to who the "Rodgers" were and why they want the baby(again, probably previously, explained). Respect the fact that this story seems to faces on all domestic abuse(of both men and women)! Kudos for that! Great story and other than, the moon there is not too much description to go on. Wish you the best!
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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This the the 35 post. I am sorry you struggled with the characters. Thank you for the review and I am glad you received the points for reviewing.
Comment from grim fandango
The flow of this works beautifully , and leaves me wondering what happens at the end, their eyes meet. And it begs questions how will it work out, particularly if they both have issues?, will it get in the way of something special?
brilliant effort.
grim:)
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The flow of this works beautifully , and leaves me wondering what happens at the end, their eyes meet. And it begs questions how will it work out, particularly if they both have issues?, will it get in the way of something special?
brilliant effort.
grim:)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - I haven't been on FS in quite awhile, so as soon as I got on, the first thing I wanted to do is catch up with your wonderful story. I great post. One of the things I wish I could learn from you is pace. Your stories are perfect! Bill
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Hi Barbara - I haven't been on FS in quite awhile, so as soon as I got on, the first thing I wanted to do is catch up with your wonderful story. I great post. One of the things I wish I could learn from you is pace. Your stories are perfect! Bill
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I have missed you. I hope you are feeling well.
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Feeling great. I finally fully retired and assumed I would have all sorts of time for writing ... not!
Comment from Teresa Paul
I loved your story, your message at the end and the ability to grab my attention with your first words. I was completely caught up in the storyline, maybe because at one time, I was one of the 82% when my twins were babies. Well done!
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I loved your story, your message at the end and the ability to grab my attention with your first words. I was completely caught up in the storyline, maybe because at one time, I was one of the 82% when my twins were babies. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
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You are most assuredly welcome!
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Great story it wa interesting and pleasant. I enjoyed reading it. There is no need for change.The story line and the art work blends well. Mary
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Great story it wa interesting and pleasant. I enjoyed reading it. There is no need for change.The story line and the art work blends well. Mary
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I bet a few readers are itching for the Troy/Anna relationship to get moving - the little snippets are tantalising.
This is good as always with a nice balance of narration and dialogue.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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I bet a few readers are itching for the Troy/Anna relationship to get moving - the little snippets are tantalising.
This is good as always with a nice balance of narration and dialogue.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. Since Anna was abused I can't move their relationship too fast. It would not be realistic.
Comment from Aislinge
Nicely done, Barbara. The scenes move well, and the reader gets a good sense of Anna's fear, as well as Everett's, Troy's, Betty's and Paul's determination to both figure out whodunnit and prevent it from happening again.
Thank you for a great read.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Nicely done, Barbara. The scenes move well, and the reader gets a good sense of Anna's fear, as well as Everett's, Troy's, Betty's and Paul's determination to both figure out whodunnit and prevent it from happening again.
Thank you for a great read.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tellis
The visuals of the full harvest moon brought back memories and I enjoyed reading this wonderful and well written chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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The visuals of the full harvest moon brought back memories and I enjoyed reading this wonderful and well written chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. A reviewer told me the moon wasn't descriptive enough.