Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "part one, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
You have really increased both the romance and the tension in this short chapter. I'm sure the harassment and danger are somehow being directed by Bobby or his psychotic mother.
I'm sure the flat tire is more than a puncture.
Keep up the great wtiting. The story keeps getting stronger and so does Anna as she recovers at last.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Hi Barbara:)
You have really increased both the romance and the tension in this short chapter. I'm sure the harassment and danger are somehow being directed by Bobby or his psychotic mother.
I'm sure the flat tire is more than a puncture.
Keep up the great wtiting. The story keeps getting stronger and so does Anna as she recovers at last.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Good chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed it. Think Troy is a sweetie. I wonder what the note is. Poor Anna, always having to look over her shoulder. It's not a pleasant way to live at all. No freedom.
Av
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Good chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed it. Think Troy is a sweetie. I wonder what the note is. Poor Anna, always having to look over her shoulder. It's not a pleasant way to live at all. No freedom.
Av
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rheabug
You are doing the state of Texas a great service by passing on this message of abuse and things that people go through at all phases of the healing process. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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You are doing the state of Texas a great service by passing on this message of abuse and things that people go through at all phases of the healing process. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Forgewright
I haven't read any of the others chapters yet. I believe from this chapter I can surmise that you are a skilled writer. Your story starts with the couple in everyday lover situations and with wonderful skill you slowly add suspence and danger. I like your habit of introducing speech with action. That is my prefered way to read. Small descripttions let me fill in as the action moved forward. It was a simple read, meaning your flow is excellent. I have the characters, the town, the car all pictured in my head, oh yes and that other guy as well. Hope he gets his. lol Clean and crisp writing with out bogging down the story with a lot of useless info. It's the meat. Remember to continue not to let your characters do things just so you can add suspence or danger. I was so glad when see didn't open the door. Too obvious an act of writer needing an easy fix to conjure up a scene. Keep sense in your scene.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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I haven't read any of the others chapters yet. I believe from this chapter I can surmise that you are a skilled writer. Your story starts with the couple in everyday lover situations and with wonderful skill you slowly add suspence and danger. I like your habit of introducing speech with action. That is my prefered way to read. Small descripttions let me fill in as the action moved forward. It was a simple read, meaning your flow is excellent. I have the characters, the town, the car all pictured in my head, oh yes and that other guy as well. Hope he gets his. lol Clean and crisp writing with out bogging down the story with a lot of useless info. It's the meat. Remember to continue not to let your characters do things just so you can add suspence or danger. I was so glad when see didn't open the door. Too obvious an act of writer needing an easy fix to conjure up a scene. Keep sense in your scene.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
You certainly have left your readers in suspense, wondering what is written on the piece of paper tucked under one of the windscreen wipers - which, of course, is the right way to ensure their interest.
I find this to be a most interesting story and always look forward to your next chapter. In this one, there is nothing to suggest changing.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
You certainly have left your readers in suspense, wondering what is written on the piece of paper tucked under one of the windscreen wipers - which, of course, is the right way to ensure their interest.
I find this to be a most interesting story and always look forward to your next chapter. In this one, there is nothing to suggest changing.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TammyGail
Wow.. barbara what a great chapter this was, very well written and expressed like always. Your closing lines had me on the edge of my seat hoping she wouldn't open the door to spy the note. Her flat tire and that note smell of wickedness. Thanks for sharing another great read it was a pleasure.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Wow.. barbara what a great chapter this was, very well written and expressed like always. Your closing lines had me on the edge of my seat hoping she wouldn't open the door to spy the note. Her flat tire and that note smell of wickedness. Thanks for sharing another great read it was a pleasure.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, good chapter. It is nice that she has such good people to rely on, like Paul to rescue with the flat tire. And, there you go again,keeping us in suspense... hmmm, I wonder if I could have stayed in the car and not have had curiosity make me get out and read that paper.......
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Barbara, good chapter. It is nice that she has such good people to rely on, like Paul to rescue with the flat tire. And, there you go again,keeping us in suspense... hmmm, I wonder if I could have stayed in the car and not have had curiosity make me get out and read that paper.......
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from peggles
I thought this chapter is another fine addition to your story
it follows on well from the previous one and it easy to connect
Poor girl it seems like Anna is being harassed yet again
I can't wait to see what happens next
A fine read which I enjoyed very much
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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I thought this chapter is another fine addition to your story
it follows on well from the previous one and it easy to connect
Poor girl it seems like Anna is being harassed yet again
I can't wait to see what happens next
A fine read which I enjoyed very much
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Poor Anna.. when will it
ever end!! She deserves
some happiness.
She turned toward the man[,] sitting by the
I wonder what's going on[.](?)
bite of her sandwich.["]
Most enjoyable, Barbara.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Poor Anna.. when will it
ever end!! She deserves
some happiness.
She turned toward the man[,] sitting by the
I wonder what's going on[.](?)
bite of her sandwich.["]
Most enjoyable, Barbara.
Margaret
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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I will take care of those errors. Thank you for catching them.
Comment from amada
I like the way you paint the easy and loving relationship between Troy and Anna. Wonderful the lunch scene, made me hungry. I'm waiting for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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I like the way you paint the easy and loving relationship between Troy and Anna. Wonderful the lunch scene, made me hungry. I'm waiting for the next chapter!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.