Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "part 2, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from hellion5
Very well-written, flowing story. I would like to see a little more about how Anna is feeling. An abuse victim might react more strongly to a car backfire (do they even do that anymore?) than just to move closer to Paul.
That was all I could find to comment on. No spag.
Great work--
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Very well-written, flowing story. I would like to see a little more about how Anna is feeling. An abuse victim might react more strongly to a car backfire (do they even do that anymore?) than just to move closer to Paul.
That was all I could find to comment on. No spag.
Great work--
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
I think this was a good chapter, although like you said, it needs a little more. I also think that the back-=firing muffler is a little too obvious. I might swap it up with headlights that sweep over them, or seeing a dark car at infrequent intervals. Forgive me if I offend. Just some ideas.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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I think this was a good chapter, although like you said, it needs a little more. I also think that the back-=firing muffler is a little too obvious. I might swap it up with headlights that sweep over them, or seeing a dark car at infrequent intervals. Forgive me if I offend. Just some ideas.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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The loud muffler goes back to her husband. His muffler was loud and it terrorized her knowing he would soon walk in the door. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I think this is a crucial and very important chapter where every body is facing their dramatic past. Very well written, as always!
Amazing job Barbara!!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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I think this is a crucial and very important chapter where every body is facing their dramatic past. Very well written, as always!
Amazing job Barbara!!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I'm so behind reviewing. you chapter is shaping up. You've succeeded to writing another enjoyable chapter. Your dialogue is excellent in this chapter. You intrigued me with your chapter ending: "It's seems my medical records showed up on the Internet today." Wow, Troy has a stalker. It's a conundrum. I look forward to reading future chapters and to see where you take your story. You are doing a splendid job writing this your book. Keep on writing professionally. Please have a blessed day, my friend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Barbara,
I'm so behind reviewing. you chapter is shaping up. You've succeeded to writing another enjoyable chapter. Your dialogue is excellent in this chapter. You intrigued me with your chapter ending: "It's seems my medical records showed up on the Internet today." Wow, Troy has a stalker. It's a conundrum. I look forward to reading future chapters and to see where you take your story. You are doing a splendid job writing this your book. Keep on writing professionally. Please have a blessed day, my friend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your continued support.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Paul dealt with the mechanics and called the police[] before he knocked on the window.
I'm confused. Has there been any mention of betty being Troy's stepmom?
Roberta
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Paul dealt with the mechanics and called the police[] before he knocked on the window.
I'm confused. Has there been any mention of betty being Troy's stepmom?
Roberta
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Yes at the beginning, Troy told Anna his story and when Anna was in the hospital Paul told Anna about it. Thank you for the kind review.
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I guess I should go back and review that; I'd forgotten all about it.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Well done, Barbara. Another interesting chapter. Poor Anna, having to live that way. Now I'm curious about these medical records. Wonder what's going on with those? Look forward to the next!
Av
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Well done, Barbara. Another interesting chapter. Poor Anna, having to live that way. Now I'm curious about these medical records. Wonder what's going on with those? Look forward to the next!
Av
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Tammara
What another great read, I really enjoyed reading this chapter! There seem to be an endless round of problems for Anna, what with her tire being slashed and then the threatening note. Her ex and his family would been the logical ones behind it but they surely know they're under scrutiny. Is there someone else wishing to harm her now? At least she's fighting back by bringing the police in. Interesting that Troy's medical records popped up on the Internet. Great chapter! :)
Tammara
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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What another great read, I really enjoyed reading this chapter! There seem to be an endless round of problems for Anna, what with her tire being slashed and then the threatening note. Her ex and his family would been the logical ones behind it but they surely know they're under scrutiny. Is there someone else wishing to harm her now? At least she's fighting back by bringing the police in. Interesting that Troy's medical records popped up on the Internet. Great chapter! :)
Tammara
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amada
A very exciting chapter. Lots of action and many unexpected twists. The dialog kept the story going and it seems more twists are about to happen. Exciting.
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A very exciting chapter. Lots of action and many unexpected twists. The dialog kept the story going and it seems more twists are about to happen. Exciting.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JW
This section of a chapter makes a great addition to your story. It does a great job of showing how abusers can be, and the trauma victims go through. Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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This section of a chapter makes a great addition to your story. It does a great job of showing how abusers can be, and the trauma victims go through. Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Poor Troy, but he has
Betty and Anna for
comfort... abuse
is rarely forgotten
no matter how long ago
it was (I've never
forgotten what I went
through in spite of
moving on)
I could feel me grab his arm
I could feel myself grab
A great chapter, Barbara
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Poor Troy, but he has
Betty and Anna for
comfort... abuse
is rarely forgotten
no matter how long ago
it was (I've never
forgotten what I went
through in spite of
moving on)
I could feel me grab his arm
I could feel myself grab
A great chapter, Barbara
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.